Hello. I can see you put A lot of work into it. I can't see anything obviously missing or wrong, though I am concerned with Her having a powerful ability. (personally I thought I was brushing the limit with Hiro- which I must stress is a potential rather then an actual ability... I felt his story was too dark without some hope.
Power tends to corrupt and any character in this position of god hood is going to be trapped wether they intervene or not intervene. (after all why didn't they intervene the last hundred bad events or so?) The question of who gave them that right comes to me. It feels a bit off Selene would put a human in this position. Eg. You can save 10 babies a day on earth but the 99999 others you have to leave.
I'm sorry but human gods don't make for much drama. Basicky I fear such a character can either never use the power or always use it- but that's another debate entirely.
I will say the she's got what Morgana desires, and unlike her, seemed to luck into it without a scheme. That feels a bit iffy to me too.
The most important question is if it makes the story more interesting I think... I personally can only think decent and corruption by such power but then I'm a pessamistic soul at the moment. It takes away the threat of the darkness and Morgana and anything less then a god.
