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Thank you. With all the posts I didn't think it would get noticed :)

Eggcellent chapter

Someone had to :)

I too am curious. At first I thought this would be a normal-ish world but I’m kinda glad there is the implication of some exotic biology out there, at least I certainly hope so. I wonder about Sarah too …

Girl Jon is cute. Knight in shining armor indeed. Hope to see more.

Thanks. Well, I think Rebecca is being modest and just finding an ‘excuse’ for being confident, and turning into someone that knows almost everything is a surprising way to start feeling that confidence. She’s just very close to her character and she put a lot of thought before attempting it. I envision her as a special case since the locket was given to her, no doubt she was psychologically assessed and deemed stable and compatible… and her desire is surpassingly modest. It’s not outside human capability to do what she does… at least with a small group. She is following the mantra of helping others though I did want to make sure it was a place she could reasonably interact with people…

Though I’m a bit unsure on how the powers transfer. I imagine it would be the characters the owner feels close to not necessarily the new person … so … hopefully some shenanigans…

Thank you. Yeah I had been thinking I was wrong to put so many parallels to drugs… but in the end after much thought and feedback I just embraced it and accepted it’s a bit of a walk on the dark side.

Eh, I debated it hard but meh, she is a completely different character ;) there's a third squirrel somewhere that I havn't really worked on yet...

Interesting. I was a bit worried Biff was just going to be cured. I’m rather glad she’s sphinxified again. Cute kissing scenes

Very much enjoyed it thank you for adding to it. Loving Jon’s thoughts and curious how this magic could work

Rearranging atoms require energy .. doing it in a specific pattern decreases entropy for that area… you are literally extending the life of someone, putting more sand in their hourglass. At least that’s how I saw it

Hey sorry been away for 3 weeks so missed your messages.

It’s all fine. I like people adding their ideas. It usually tempers my own writing.

It’s all good. My primary thought was that these were young people new to a relationship. A jock and a pretty cheerleader girl. That relationship is probably 90% physical attraction, since that’s generally how it starts. A change in physicality can result in a sudden loss of that relationship… not necessarily a gender change. If Biff was paralysed in an accident for instance would Sarah be at his side? She would like to think so I think… and this chapter addresses the exact thoughts I had there.

…lately felt more optimistic. It is new to Sarah but that 10% of him she likes is still there.. and even the physical bodies we have will grow old and wither… male or female. I think Sarah does still like him she just has to get used to the new Biff. That’s my take on it.

I don’t mind stories going down darker/lighter routes I mean it’s there to be used as you like ;)

Unique names are hard. I wanted to give a ‘clever’ sounding name but one that felt ‘nice’ . It probably would be Emmett in retrospect.

Hey nice. Forgot about this story thread lol

Probably nothing…

Ha a fun idea but I’ve got a dragon situation somewhere else … this is something a little more standard but no less annoying ;)

And absolutely nothing will go wrong …

Very interesting! I like the characters already :)

Ah no they do! I just didn’t make it clear. What I meant is they don’t remember what was going on in their new lives. I’ll revise it to make that clearer.

A little from column A and a little from column B. Though I don’t think Barry’s character changed that much from chapter one, just his body did.

So I fear I wrote myself into a corner here. I tried to be ‘clever’ and try something weird with story structure … but stories are made a certain way for a reason and this isn’t going to work. Going to take a few steps back, sorry to anyone who got invested in this.

Pretty big for a rabbit I thought

Thanks. I wasn’t sure if it’s a good idea but I really like the antagonist here. It kinda shows what someone with real magic is capable of and leaves no trace at all …

Thank you :)

Cats seem telepathic sometimes….

Ah I find it hard to deny a direct request sure ;)

Oh and I’m quite excited to see what you might come up with. Always enjoyed your additions so far!

Well not sure I had an idea either. I admit I do enjoy Barry’s story but an old fashioned ‘detective’ story is fun too.

Hmm... Well the Mara part is tricky. I admit I was fearful I had written myself into a wall, but I felt it was best to address why a boy might have trouble learning magic. Conflict need not be physical, and there could be another way to settle a contest then a physical fight. When in doubt, do something cute is my general motto. Which leads me to...

My first draft did have an Angel TF but I found it unsatisfying. People getting what they want through prayer just doesn't work in a story. Otherwise people would be praying for all sorts of miracles. I am very sorry, but Helen comes across as 'very' unsympathetic, wollowing in the lack of a good relationship with her daughter. I don't see how that can be the fault of a child, that's the fault of a parent. She seems to generally crave more, rather then be happy that Zair found a place to learn more about her kind she resents that it wasn't her that lead her to it. Helen's desires are inherently destructive in my humble opinion but that's not to say it makes a bad story to explore. There is also something coming up later on the nature of an Angel's power. It is far far more restrictive then that of a demons in what they are allowed to do. They can not inervene with 'fate' for instance.

So yes I just thought it would be cute. Cats are cute.

Okay I have had a read and tried to organise my thoughts as best I can.

First off I’m very grateful that one feels a desire to contribute to my stories and I absolutely love the passion I can see in the writing. There’s no reason you can’t make this your own, but there are some things that make me a little uncomfortable in what they establish.

I kind of liked Uni having a mysterious role in this rather then being another fighter. Though you certainly wrote the fight sequences well.

The relationship between Helen and Lucifer was always going to be strange. I kind of liked the subversion that Helen was the one acting selfish. This seems to hold true with the last chapter, given she seems to be thinking more about herself rather then Zair, though I could be misreading it. A goofball devil dad is kinda more intriguing.

I really like how you described the well of power. I had a few weird ideas, making it a huge portal to the spirit world is really cool.

I think Mara is a little over the top. I’m not sure she would so quickly surrender her identity for power, but does want to explore magic because it is beautiful to him/her.

I do like the fairy and you probably read my mind with the laser cutter as that was planned to be a thing in the future ;)

I’m thinking to try a third path in this. My one suffered from complexity but I think it can be simplified and you have given some interesting ideas

will read it soon and I might branch off it. My own branches are not always priority and I didn't get as many votes on it, so its possible your take is better :)

Love Susan’s mother. Another great chapter :)

Thanks for the feedback

Well, the issue here is that one doesn’t want to make a bad situation worse. They can work through this sure.. it would be hard but as a parent why take an even bigger risk to one’s child? That’s sort of what I was trying to go for, though I didn’t convey it too well.

Very good! Liked the pony tail style ears. Hm wondering what instincts she’s struggling with.

I most certainly look forward to it! You really did a good job working out the details and challenges of her new body.

Upvoted and favourited. A wonderful addition! Thank you

@shinzon gamma

Thank you for the encouragement I will try :)

@broom11 thanks, I appreciate the comments and up votes :) I’m going to be a little busier so might not be able to update for a while.

@perri Well my ideas are vague still. I have a few ideas but I would certainly love to see your ideas too!

I had a feeling you would enjoy that ;)

Thanks. I admit I wasn't sure, felt like the pacing is too fast in some areas here. There is a bit more to it but this is from what Terry saw, and how a demon terrified him... not just that of course, but made him feel negative about himself.

Thanks. Yes Terry is a bit cliche, but what isn't these days ;)

thanks :) Never left, was always lurking

urgh yeah I got the names wrong initially here and had to edit it.. clearly missed some entries.

Heya feel free to try adding something. As long as you are not 'mean' to the characters, or place them in impossible situations im sure it's fine. It's all free. I'm sure nothingsp wouldn't mind, we rarely have a plan.

Hi thanks for the comments. I am starting to feel more inspired to write again. I've always felt nothingsp is the true genius and inspiration. I'm working on a new story at the moment so hopefully once ice settled on the plot I'll write it up. Magic ring was an attempt to set up a magic girl story but it didn't quite work for me.

Thanks ;)

To be honest, I might have to branch out of it. I wanted to give it a try, but it has hurt my characters way too much and introduced elements I didn't really want at the start

Sure it would. Just faster. The situation looked impossible to me. I didn't want to invoke time travel so early but I didn't see anything I could write in response without trapping my characters:(

I find this so adorable for some reason

One of my favourite parts of the story

Well a few ideas though i do hope to keep Jon and Biff exploring their relationship.

I decided to continue it. Seems there is more interested then I thought. Thanks for the encouragement :)

Due to lack of interest I am discontinuing this story. Thanks for enjoying it if you did.

Hi there and welcome! Some consider it an honour for their story to be added upon. ;)

very cute, love it.

Great episode. Hope to see more craziness from the blade though this will be fun to explore

Admittedly I’m unsure when I wrote this. I just wanted to add to the catworld and this cat spirit popped in my head. I might try to think of another idea.

Magic. The neck was erased yet Lucy talks. Therefore the mechanisms must be in her body too

Hey looks good! I was tempted to do something similar. Trying to figure out a way to get his head stuck on another body ;)

Love it

Really hope something goes wrong. Magics great when it’s working. Let’s hope they don’t get stuck... actually...

Seconded