While I acknowledge Nicole's wish about exaggeration, I'm not looking to focus on it exactly as a 'revenge'. I'm taking it to have been interpreted in a different way.
AnotherUser, I think you have a slightly different idea of where it should go than I do. Which is fine. That is why we can all branch off in different ways. I'm not sure if my version will end up taking all of your suggestions. Forced impregnation sounds like something I'd probably have trouble writing.
I tend to go by an old writing adage about sex. In a story, it is best left to the imagination. So, for me, the most graphic parts usually happen off camera and I focus on the characters.
So, Jon is embarrassed right now, but the majority of the student body didn't hear the wish, so they think it is business as usual. So why would they be embarrassed?
Jon is also in a bit of a roller coaster of emotions, but is that because testosterone suddenly makes people into emotionally unstable beings? Or is it just he's undergone so many changes that he can't cope and eventually...he'll adapt?
Nicole is liking it, but will that last? She's already said some things and realized that she's being mean, and part of her is sorry for that.
Sarah...well, I can see her becoming unremarkable, but I'm not sure if she's going to start going after the new males for taking her assets. Sure way to get locked up by the unknowing authorities. Notice, she's taking a very physical approach, which indicates, like Jon and Nicole, her initial emotional responses have changed. Trying to hit Nicole is consistent with women being the 'big, strong' dominant gender types.
That's also why...later on, I figured Nicole is going to discover that history is still full of wars and such. Putting women in charge didn't make the world a feminist utopia.
As for first person, I usually write third person, but I've done some first person stuff. I'm not sure if I'll switch, but I have an idea about some things.
