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my iphone and windows computer both at the same time started on February 29, so it can’t be some browser issue (could my wireless router have a virus so everything using my wifi sees it screwed up?) but when I go to web.archive.org and look at old pages it looks right so that supports hypothesis it’s the site not me. But here I’m seeing a lot of asterisks and such. How did you make it bold anyway. The guide says an underscore makes it italics and asterisks make it bold but when I did it, asterisks made it italics and nothing made it bold. Well nothing shows as bold now. Just asterisks at start and end. All hard returns are gone so it’s all one unending paragraph which is especially hard when it’s a series of quotes and I can’t tell who’s saying what.

But is everyone else just going to pretend that they don’t see it all as one long paragraph with none of the formatting characters being anything but appearing as part of the text? In the last 2 days something changed on the website and that’s how it all is. Do you see it as normal matisguy?

Sarah and Karyn need a Thelma and Louise ending in this one imo, tbh it might be too good for them

What happened to all the hard returns. It looks like every paragraph break on every page of the website is gone now. It’s still there in the edit page but it’s all one long paragraph when seeing it here, not just this one but all of them.

if it’s so intriguing why doesn’t Gary want to try changing himself?

To hell with it. I uploaded the last chapter anyway. Maybe sometime in the future someone will find it and care.

it’s not Biff that’s at fault for this, it’s Karyn. 100%. It’s like she covered him in fish blood and then kicked him into a tank of piranhas and then condemned and swore vengeance against the fish for being so evil for what they did next

You already got the answer you wanted but I have seen this several times actually. Not the bimbo mean girl thing but taking turns changing each other and being unaware of it. Just a few days ago I found one where Karyn turns Jon into a fox person and then he turns her into a horse person: https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/27046. Of course the root cause is further back with a magic pencil which leads to lots of different things. Earlier I found one where she ends up a thumbelina sized fairy and I don’t remember what he was or where it was located. I’ve seen this premise at least 5 times. Here’s another one, where Jon turns Karyn into a clown in a variation of humanity where humans are sexually dimorphic and women look like clowns https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/16165

I’m pretty sure that ftp acronym is not a thing. I look up with translators and it says the f word is portuguese for brother. And just by ftp it seems like the acronym for female to part and I didn’t think it was what I wanted at first since it would be mtp in this case, but of course if p is the destination then it’s not really important whether the subject started male or female. Perhaps change it to “htp” for “human to part”.

You know, there really should be another series of tags that identify the type of story in the parameter of whether it’s 0% story 100% porn like this thing, or story driven, or some combination thereof, maybe a scale from 0 through 10 for “porn driven”, and a second scale from 0 through 10 for “story driven”. Just to tell perspective readers what it’s going to be. I’m not putting down someone that wants content that’s completely devoid of anything but fap fuel, or if that’s what you’re looking for one day and the next day you want something else you’ll know what you’re getting as you look for it, I come across something like… this and I’d like to know that’s what it is so I can save my time without starting to read any of it.

Jessycat was fast. 23 minutes and 51 seconds for this, well thought out with formatting and I don’t see any errors, maybe she put it into a word processor first.

He’s such a simp here though. Between believing it was 100% his fault Karyn made the wish she did (what, so he’s responsible for everything she does?) to lamenting “how poor the pickings were when it came to reliable men”…. for her. Wow, that’s a new level of cuckery he found right there! Any reasonable person would say “why doesn’t she think I’m good enough” if he wants her and “her standards are unreasonable and there are plenty of good men” if not but no not Jon, he’s thinking vicariously like a middle aged woman losing her prospects on behalf of Karyn!

If she can wish for anything why is she making him work hard so she can steal the wages she has no use for and torturing him like he’s her biggest enemy and did something unforgivable? He’s just her boyfriend. I guess this is just another psycho revenge fantasy against nobody in particular.

Sarah’s in high-school and her mom is 30 years old? Hmmmm....

I didn’t notice before this was the science wizard’s first one. He was off to a good start!

My thanks to the clearly one single person who has upvoted every chapter of this series, usually by the time the view count of each chapter gets to 20. If you reply with some contact info I’ll e-mail you the last chapter if you want.

So basically a hentai version of Midori no Hibi.

As much as I want to say Zzyzx has morgan freeman’s voice so that it’s the most comfortable for Jon, I can’t help but think the voice of Fart from Rick and Morty would be much more fitting.

Here’s an obscure fact for you: a male fox is called a reynard. Which is one letter off from renard, the french word for fox.

Her speech reminds me of Saddam Hussein's "I can change" number from the south park movie. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yADrtfAmLTo "It's not my fault, that I'm so evillll! It's society! Society!"

I don’t know why almost everyone else thought it was essentially omniscient and willing to provide any information desired. The evidence is strongly to the contrary. Read the original letter from grandfather and see what it says. “There is no limit to the number of times you can do this, as far as I can divine”, “How it works, or where it came from beyond that, I have no idea. All I can tell you is how it works and trust you to use it wisely.”, “This range I estimate at several miles, but I fear I have not been able to determine an exact figure.” - Does it make any sense grandpa would have said any of these things in his letter, if he could have wished for information? Really I think everyone else has been screwing up, both being lazy with the deus ex machina, and negligent in maintaining consistency, by having information being anything anyone can ask for at all. Now I have put asking for information into some story segments I have written myself but I think I have only done it at depths where someone else had already written that into the story already so I might as well not have a reason to refrain from it then.

And The Lost Room is from 2006 and yet it’s still one of the best things I’ve ever seen. You shouldn’t limit yourself to the “new releases”, either here or otherwise.

As for the change in narration, even before the parts I wrote, it started in 1st person told by Jon, and then because of sloppiness was suddenly changed to third person, so I thought it would be interesting if that was because the narrator changed to JonSarah and so it became first person again once she became the active character, but then with that precedent perhaps it should go back to third person when they separate and back to first person for JonKaryn to be the narrator. It’s partially created out of a desire to make that first change of narration not just seem negligent but I think it worked out nicely.

“fix” is a strange relative subjective condition. Was it not in need of “fixing” before this chapter but now it needs to be fixed? Why is that, because it’s ok to turn the males into females but not vice versa because girls are good and boys are bad? Who needs to be fixed specifically and in what way? If the outcome was Jon and Karyn separate leaving them identical triplets except with Karyn having blonde hair and breasts and then got a surgical mastectomy and then Jon broke his friendship with Karyn and created a new one with his new bro Sarah would that not be a fix? Jon and Sarah could even recombine if they wanted because that was not wished for in the past tense. They could even set up a thing where they can merge and separate at will whenever they want just for fun. The only ones who definitely would be different than how they started would be Sarah and Karyn and they would just be reaping the consequences of their actions while Jon is the only one who never did anything bad to anyone and he would be back to normal. If you see this as being a big hole and much worse in a way other than Karyn ruining her relationship with Jon, isn’t that opinion just created out of an anti-male bias? Because that’s the only permanent change, Sarah and Karyn have had their genders changed, which is especially inconvenient for Karyn considering her first wish.

This sure has a lot to unpack doesn’t it.

Sarah dunking Karyn in a trash can is a reference to Shorts, in which Sarah’s counterpart Helvetica Black was always doing that to the main characters. Last name Black, hmmm, is that a coincidence or were they actually influenced by this website when they made that movie?

after use of web.archive.org and fixing the link to what it was at the time I was able to figure out the link you reference is now this: https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/15738 Maybe someone should have a bot look through all the links in the website and make them dynamically link to what the current address is?

oh it’s like the occupant from The Lost Room

What if there’s a child of that branch which itself gets deleted and then there’s nothing? And does the existence of comments also prevent its deletion?

I thought for sure some other woman was going to enter the house while he was upstairs, such as Karyn or his family members, and they would be caught in the crossfire and changed that way and stuck like that. A total missed opportunity there.

You left in a paragraph from the first one where he tricks Sarah which does not belong here, the paragraph starting with “In an instant, Jon's hand completely changed”. Jon’s hand isn’t changing here, he’s only changing Sarah.

48 hours? They had sex for 48 hours straight. In her own home with her parents home. Not as a result of a wish, that’s just their typical behavior. Because that’s just a believable thing that happens, sex for 48 hours. Did the writer just step off the spaceship from his own planet before writing this? The death by Snu Snu planet.

Put another way, whereas the switched stone branch seems to be about the side effects taking the victims by surprise and them trying to deal with them if they figure out what happened and creating the additional quest of recovering the “true” stone, this is just about nerfing the original stone.

I have a clear idea for the motivation for the shadowy figure but I’m not sure if I should say it because it might function as a spoiler if anyone later uses it, and if anyone puts it in later please remove this comment admin, but the idea is, he’s been changed by the animal stone himself, and one can’t undo it with the primary stone unless one tricks two other people into ruining their lives or fully changing by the animal stone, sort of like the worst kind of chain letter.

I’m not sure if your comment is for me or for others but I literally just wrote a chapter in the switched stone section. https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/5192122

The motivation here is just that the stone is too powerful. It’s like in dbz where death itself carries no consequences because you can just wish everyone back. Also whoever has the stone is far too OP. Where some psychopath character whether it be Sarah McMillan or someone else is just unstoppable and there’s no real challenge or plausible way for them to fail in their evil ambitions. Well now they’re in for a surprise if they think they’re invincible with the stone. And the original letter from the grandfather does seem sloppy in its consideration, like he thought it could do anything and yet he didn’t know exactly what its range was, well why didn’t he wish for that information? Maybe the answer is one can’t wish for information, and he actually didn’t test it very well with high ambitions because he didn’t actually try to do anything outlandish with it and drastically overstated its capabilities.

It’s not a “theory” about the stone in general, it’s not a “phase”, it’s a branch with this additional set of constraints. That’s it. If you want to write from here, you play by these rules.

Yes there should be a build-up... of the right length and quality. And the resolution shouldn't be too simple as well. Though you're one to talk Christine L: https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/46462 followed by https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/46463 followed by https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/46466 I think I'd have preferred a swift resolution with truck-san to that. Anyway this current chapter is too far. I think a few chapters earlier would be the best place to continue from, but it just would seem so, non-canonical.

the amount of time between this and the previous page written by the same guy is something

Well it’s actually an earlier branch of the one that I was writing to earlier where Jon becomes Sarah‘s little sister, and that’s the only story it led to until I added this one in the last few days, but the progression to that didn’t really make much sense because Sarah just wished Jon would understand her (how that leads to turning Jon into her sister seems like a stretch) so I thought I would write a story starting from there with the wish granted more accurately.

This isn’t a new chapter, I just broke the previous one into 2 pieces (with the last paragraph duplicated at the start here) because too many things happened in a single chapter and it shouldn’t all be a package deal.

oh yes and the “real” Paige is brought into existence too. With a magic rock, it’s pretty easy to flip the worst possible ending into the best, isn’t it? Still better story than 99% of hollywood movies I’d say though, not to toot my own horn too much, not that it’s a hard benchmark to achieve.

I don’t know Zelo. I haven’t decided to be the one to continue with it. There are a number of things on here I thought I might do, but it’s hard to put much into it when it’s met with such indifference. There are a number of ways this could go, I had one in mind and it’s actually drifting further from that because this version of Sarah may have shaped out to not be that evil. My original plan: Jon/Paige sees a grabber tool and a bucket in the garage and thinks nothing of it at first. She bides her time and eventually the opportunity comes with Sarah out of the house and she searches her room and finds the stone in the chest at the foot of her bed, but knowing she can’t touch it, gets the grabber and drops it in the bucket, and then brings it miles away on a bicycle and buries it in a field. She is uncertain what to do next because what if one of Sarah’s wishes is something like always knowing where the stone is or being able to summon it with the words “return to me” or something. On the other hand what if Paige actually can still use it? But she just buries it and returns and right before she gets back, gets a call on her cellphone from Sarah desperately asking her where the stone is and what she wished for with someone else’s help. Paige in triumph says “I didn’t wish for anything but it’s gone, you’ll never touch it again, cunt.” Then to Paige’s surprise Sarah tells her the rest of the McMillan family are held up as hostages at gunpoint and they’re going to execute them in front of her unless they are led to the stone. The leader of the criminals then is put on the phone and Paige asks how he knows about the stone and that Sarah had it, and he explains to Paige that they had found them because the stone only has a range of a few miles so it doesn’t affect public records and history outside that, so it’s actually pretty easy to track down just by looking for discrepancies between public records stored in one place and another, and he’s well aware that Paige isn’t supposed to exist so it led them right there. Jon tells him that he’ll never get the stone, and that she’d rather let her family be executed than let it fall into their hands, and ends the call. Of course she’s not broken up about it because it’s not her real family and is none too fond of the McMillans. Later Sarah finds her as the only survivor after they fled emptyhanded and is distrught furious with Paige and attacks her, but despite her smaller size, Paige incapacitates her and says “We’re even now Sarah. You took away my family, and I took away yours. I guess I’ll see you in hell.” And then like the Spider-Man origin story, because Jon Merlin also disappeared and the records of Jon Merlin existing in town don’t match the records from afar, the criminals then kill his family too in their search for the stone, and if Jon hadn’t been so indifferent to them, and Jon/Paige is left with that. Paige then contacts Susan her friend from school to tell her where the stone is buried and then the surprise twist is, Susan’s family are the criminals. But Susan is the one to go there, and figures out what Sarah wished for and compensate for it all manages to wish Jon’s and Sarah’s families back to life and restore Jon’s rightful place in his true family the Merlins. The story ends with Jon getting a letter from his grandfather who is alive and well and enjoying a regular tourist experience in South America, but also a letter from a young girl he doesn’t know named Susan, telling him that he doesn’t remember her, but that she knows him, and is grateful for something he did for her in another life, and will be his guardian angel who will look out for him and be there for him if he really needs her. The end. That was the plan at least. A very detailed and involved story unlike much you see on this website but it would really be a whole lot of trouble to write all that tbh.

Here's why you're probably wrong. It needs conflict. You can't just give it a happy ending unless you're committed to that being the end of the story. And any good story does have an ending and there are so many of these that get no ending at all, they just go into hell of Sarah endlessly torturing others or something else with no resolution. But I don't think that it should end right here because so little has happened so far in the plot. So with Sarah written out of the role of villain, it needs a setup for conflict. It needs a villain. What other sources of conflict are there? An innocent wish gone wrong? We've already had that now. It would be too redundant to have it twice. And though I think there should be lots of nodes to continue the story from and so not too much should be crammed into any one chapter making it a package deal of things that the next writer would want and things that the next writer doesn't want, I think this is actually just the right amount.

After more than 10 years, I don't think the true author JaycieLane is coming back. I tried my very hardest to write it in the same style she did, to make it almost as if she had written it herself. I hope it is worthy. But it's one of the few stories I have found here that I truly thought deserved to be continued, and I thought it was maybe worthwhile to write a serious thing. After writing so many things with 2-headed catgirls and whatnot. Though the thing where Jon was Sarah's pet fox was actually kind of serious. But not this serious.

but what he did to her was for like 30 seconds and she just ruined his life

just make it not painful or life threatening or traumatic for Jon to give birth, isn’t that much easier?

Except if it worked that way, wishing the branch would be red would have worked in the introductory chapter.

What, so he wishes to fix Karyn’s bloody nose but not to restore his sister’s body’s virginity? She’s probably pregnant with Biff’s dog-limbed child now ffs. Should have also made Sarah only able to make dog sounds when within 20 feet of the stone or when she tries to tell anyone else about it while they’re at it (and to prevent her from telling anyone by other means such as typing), to be sure she can never steal the stone and use it.

He refers to his legs as "his legs"? So he talks about himself in the 3rd person?

Giving another reminder of “why the hell are Jon and Karyn even friends in the first place”. Why would he be friends with a girl that is constantly spouting off sexist crap about boys right in front of him and why would she be friends with one of those boys that she has such contempt for and thinks only is motivated by one thing? This doesn’t seem to be something that is commonly being considered. I keep coming back to the same thought that there are things that must have happened before the initial story, that they weren’t friends to begin with but only are now because of a wish gone wrong.

What I don’t understand is how this fulfills the wish "I wish you would understand how I feel!". Jon is being given quite a different experience than anything Sarah has ever lived through. There are a number of possible plot hooks for that choice of words that do fulfill the actual wish but this really isn’t one of them. I mean it’s a premise that’s certainly interesting but it’s in no way with Sarah asked for.

To anyone at this crossroads, know that the correct and canonical path is the 2nd one, entitled Jon isn’t quite gone, even though it has far fewer chapters from it. It was written by the creator of parts 4 through 7 and is much better written with Sarah not just a completely flat psychopath character as usual in this section, while the first one is just anonymous51... content... with others stemming off from it.

oh, I thought it would go horribly wrong because Jon has been demented but that was actually not a disaster of a wish after all.

No Karyn, even was about 9 chapters ago.

After complaining about it not being "fair", the only thing she should be able to do is to see him naked, so yes she absolutely is going too far by torturing him. I hope he takes back control because I hate it when they turn out like this.

A fitting end, but the wishes totally contradict, especially when the victim is specified by name, but then again maybe Sarah was just renamed to have many names and the subject of all the wishes made in 2nd person, I guess that’s maybe plausible. But I like the end with the lab where they are studying her as an alien specimen.

So weak. A bad dream? This is the appropriate time to literally send Sarah to hell for all eternity.

Well that was a crummy ending! And I guess after this much time, probably neither wokka nor hyral will come back to finish it. Either one of them I could accept as a canonical authority.

The problem is that all the ‘writers’ don’t have any ambition to actually have the story reach a resolution, they just have whatever conflict is in progress continue for another chapter and have Sarah torturing everyone and then they leave and someone else comes along and does the same thing and it drags on and on and on. This thing needs an ending and honestly I think the best way for it to end is for someone to take her by surprise, like someone who survived their ordeal and knows she’s a monster but has freedom of action, maybe one of the students from the first class after giving the teacher-turned dog a command, leaves school and returns with a gun and then shoots her in the head from behind. And then, after she’s dead, then everyone has to make sense of things and pick up the pieces and to figure out the situation they eventually go to her home and find Jon and Karyn, Jon being mentally incapacitated, but Karyn shrunken but able to tell them what is going on, and then they can finally resolve things with the stone taken off of Sarah’s corpse, the end. The story needs an ending and it needs someone with the ambition to actually do it. I’m tired of almost all of them ending like this, just this indefinite status quo of Sarah torturing everyone or some other horrible situation of some sort that never ends because new people just come along and all they do is just continue what’s already happening with more of the same.

12 views since Feb 2001, wow in the low traffic region of this website now

That's a very petty suggestion. Very small-minded premise. Gender role reversal, please. That's extremely specific and it's your interest personally, obviously. The reason the "you are what you wish" story is an intriguing starting point (and better than your plan) is because it could be anything, do anything. It has unlimited potential, not constrained to be one thing. Now it's not the only possible thing that could be like that. The beginning of Futurama also comes to mind. Guy gets frozen, wakes up in the distant future and things are very different. Again, unlimited potential, with no specific plot hook required. I don't know, maybe someone should put that in the drafting board? Call it "Butcherama" or something in deference as a head nod to the fact that it's not a new idea but goes in a completely different direction? But that's the direction that any such template seed story should take. It should allow for the part 2 to be anything. I mean there's also vast displacement in space premise, not just time. So the "Farscape" template in addition to the Futurama one, not that it's actually fundamentally different. And the Japanese "isekai" premise, but they make it horrible by always making it exactly the same thing, namely always a swords and sorcery universe which behaves exactly like a video game (though there's no reason it needs to be that, just a completely other reality with no constraints like that). But almost anything else, would be so provincial, so specific and inevitably would be too constraining people lacking that particular interest/fetish to write about something they don't want to write about.

Also has Jon been walking around naked in the bottom half of his body all this time? And he’s just ok with that? It kind of didn’t mention that little detail but it seems kind of important now.

There are 3 things here now that I think about it that may be seen as errors. Jon should get two changes if he makes the wish and he is one of the objects of the wish. The bicycle was just a bicycle and though it was theoretically for him he was just creating a bicycle and it wasn’t affecting his person. The second thing is, what “stone” is “from the time we both saw the stone” referring to? The animal stone? If so, Karyn shouldn’t remember him not having a pouch because that was before she first saw it. He didn’t say “the first stone”, he just said “the stone” and the animal stone should have taken it to be referring to itself, but it had apparently interpreted it to mean the first stone for some reason. Of course Jon didn’t know there were 2 stones at the time but if making a wish about “the stone” without being specific the current stone should assume it’s referring to itself. And the third thing is that he wished for a brand new bicycle. So it shouldn’t have retconned the bicycle into his life 3 months earlier. It may have been new 3 months ago but if he wishes for a new bicycle it should be a new bicycle when he wishes for it. I guess these may seem like nitpicky things but if I see something well written otherwise but missing on such details I just wanted to leave a note for the writer should he by any chance ever see it.

What, no one got the idea of him making a wish, it going wrong and him wishing that he knew what was happening and then forgetting all about the stone. Or at least that’s what happened in a similar situation here: https://www.deviantart.com/samusemblem/art/The-Opposite-Day-Genie-183720189

I guess it made her more evil and less intelligent since the most likely explanation (even if it’s incorrect) is that he had her in his room to fix her problems as a pleasant surprise when she woke up.

all 3 of them are the same thing and this one has turned into pure cancer

very brutal continual rewriting of history; the charity stone wasn’t very charitable

Has Jon completely just forgotten that he can just end this at any time by wishing it was over without even being in contact with the stone? Because that’s what he wished for in part 3 of this chain. Or does he know this all too well and he just is playing Karyn? What we need is some additional thing to anchor him to this reality so that he can’t just end it when he gets bored with it, or at least strongly motivates him not to do so.

An idea if someone continued it - the shadowy figure wishes that any animal parts wished back to the human counterparts would revert after 20 days; so the next morning Jon gets his kangaroo ears back (pretty hard to believe he supposedly looked at them and said “those are kangaroo ears” but ok) and Karyn gets her hoofs back, and they decide to take action.

Yet another one from the first week of June 2008. It’s probably all one guy with a lot of different aliases.

Anyone here on this page, I recommend you go with the second branch, “Animal Stone: The next day, and onwards”, it’s written by the same guy and much better than the first one.

Look at that, over two years later and the same guy comes back to write the next chapter. I guess that’s kind of dedication, but he didn’t really resolve it, though he left it in a position that would be good for someone else to come along and write it. It’s a nice set up.

Mystichobo sure does have a one track mind doesn’t he. As a standalone piece his stuff is intriguing, but only one of them, because they’re all pretty much identical, at least all the ones I’ve run into haven’t had a lot of variety.

The problem is you just completely erased the character one bit at a time, it makes the beginning of the story weak when taken as a whole. It’s almost like you had this thing written and you just modified it as little as possible to fit it in here with the story with Jon and the wishing rock. It’s rather hard to believe that he would do this to be honest, to casually permanently and completely overwrite himself with a female jewel thief with fox ears and a tail and a crippling accent without at any point having a shred of doubt in the process.

Well this was a weird adventure. And I found it just by randomly searching “licorice”.

Anyway anyone here, you might be interested in this:

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shorts_(2009_film)

It’s basically this, but made into a movie. By that I don’t mean it is directly this; it doesn’t have these characters but the premise is the same, a wishing stone with godlike power that is used in the same way (except I think it doesn't even have any limitations at all, wishes can be undone), and the same sort of things happen from wishes gone wrong, like at one point two people get conjoined to each other, at another, they summon tiny aliens. It’s all set in a gated community run by a company run by a totalitarian tyrannical madman, that makes all-in-one devices (so basically next generation iphone) but of course with the wishing stone that literally is an everything in one device, there is a mad scramble and battle over control of the stone. I don’t remember it that well because I saw it in 2010 but it was definitely the best movie I saw that year. Not that it had a lot of competition.

I like how this is truly an ending and a shitpost and the creator of this page only made this one thing and nothing else and probably spent a total of 10 minutes on this website ever and yet it got 63 replies so far (though starting from one of the names I’m really trying to avoid). So here you go BonoboMonkey, your first and only upvote, from me to you.

A real class act guy, his first inclination on first contact with another sentient species being kidnapping and slavery. I wonder what his plan is here, does he just think that he can just sell her or does he have his own circus or what?

I think maybe this should be broken up into 2 parts. Where it says:

I picked up the stone. “I wish that the revised version of what is on this paper would become real, without modifying history, it just would be true from this point on with her new abilities and the gullibility condition.”

That could have very well created another android right then and there for Jon, because he isn't saying that it would apply to Stephanie. I don't know though. It would need a new title, and then the next chapter would be everything after that and that would get the title of "Being Fair to Karyn", and then there would be the opportunity to have 2 versions, one where it generates a new android girl right then and there, and one where it proceeds with the story as originally written, and it really wouldn't be fair to the 3 who upvoted (wow 3 upvotes that's rare for my stories) it as it is.

If someone else eventually wants to just copy the story of this chapter up to that point to then have it separate into the possibility where the stone creates another android girl for Jon and have it as a chapter parallel to this one, you have my permission.

Jon Madison. That’s terrible. Might as well name him George Washington or Ronald Reagan if you’re going to name him Jon Madison. I don’t think I like any of them tbh.

Actually this should be easy to fix, they’re just not being creative enough. For example, if she’s just constrained to be half pig, she could be changed to have a complete human body but with a complete pig body growing out of her belly button with the pig’s tail as an umbilical cord and none of her nervous system in the pig part and then simply amputate the pig portion from the rest of her body. With the stone unable to do it with magic, you could wish for an advanced technological device that operates purely on science, that can splice genes and mutate living things into any other genetically engineered organism. You could also note that humans and pigs already share more than 50% of their DNA, and the half of her that is pig could be made part of the DNA which is exactly the same between pigs and humans anyway, and then the other 50% would be whatever she was missing from her original genetics. This would fix her DNA but not necessarily her body, until they wished for her injuries to be healed and her body therefore reset to what her DNA codes for. If she’s half pig, you could also make the other half be a shapeshifter life form, making her not half pig half human but a hybrid pig shapeshifter with the shapeshifter ability a dominant ability. She could also wish for a cyborg body like a terminator, which would look like whatever she wanted but just have her brain contained in it, like Robocop or Nuku Nuku or Metallo. And if none of those are any good, then also just because she's a pig, doesn't mean she needs to have so much body fat, any animal can have any level of obesity, it wouldn't take away her pigness to decrease the body fat, so he could wish away all her body fat except 20% of that found in her breasts. Also, being half pig, could just be the biochemistry. She could still physically look like she did originally, and not be forced to have pig mannerisms, but on a cellular level, if she needs a blood transfusion would need pig blood or if she needed an organ transplant would need a pig heart or kidneys or something, she doesn't need to physically have her body changed to be half pig. Perhaps none of these would fix her other problem that everyone but herself and Jon perceives her as a pig, but actually the robocop body one probably would, since their line of sight wouldn’t be any part of her original biological material but rather the robot.

Karyn could also wish for Jon to feel no pain while touching the stone, and for his body to become invulnerable while touching it, and for it to undergo rapid healing while touching it, then he could hold it even though it is red hot.

Of course for dramatic and story purposes, it perhaps is no good for things to just be fixed and necessarily get a happy ending, there's value in her reaction to and coping with this scenario. I'm just saying. They could be of use in some sort of final confrontation with the evil brother Mikey. But Mikey absolutely needs an appropriate punishment. You just glossed over that. He's still there, living with them in the same house! And just happy to have no consequences for himself? Turn him into a pig and give him the compulsion to eat shit all day long and release him into the wilderness. Or literally send him to hell. And what about the gun? He can't use the stone any more but there was the shapeshifting gun. Considering how irreversible I'm expected to accept things as being in this version of the story, I am not so sure you can just wish for the gun's powers to go away because that would be undoing a wish, and she didn't wish for its powers to go away, she wished for its effects to wear off, which could just mean that everyone who had been changed so far changed back to normal, but with the gun still functioning into the future.

As Doc Brown would say, “Stop thinking so 3-dimensionally Marty!” Ok, Sarah is redeemable… in some branches. I have written her that way myself most of the time. In fact I have more often made her that way and made Karyn evil. But not here. In the path to here, she has been too malicious for too long, too stubborn. At the very least she has done too much all in one step on too little motivation after how solidly she stood her ground earlier. I could accept her not apologizing, not having an emotional breakdown, and just quietly handing Jon the stone and just saying “fix it if you can”. But this is just inconsistent. But even if she can be redeemed in some timelines, doesn’t mean she can be, or should be, in all of them. It’s your creation, you do with it what you want. As for the cork thing, it looked like well-deserved sarcasm to me. You don’t want to call it plagiarism? Ok, should we invent a new word for copying someone else’s exact words without accreditation? But a rose by any other name.

Thanks for alerting to the plagiarism from cork. I just thought what the hell didn’t I just read this. I don’t think this is a fitting change for Sarah at this point though. I can’t accept her at this juncture actually apologizing and saying she’s a terrible person and returning the stone, too much in this version of her has already established her as a narcissistic psychopath. I can’t accept this chapter because she’s done too much to redefine her this much. She’s a villain that needs to be defeated, not a person to give sympathy.

This would have been a great time for him to point out to her that she’s going to have to live with them too. If there’s any type of person that has a low tolerance of unpleasant people, it’s other unpleasant people. Does she think that if everyone is acting like her, they’re all just going to get along?

Sarah is going to hate herself by the end of this, as she loses patience with everyone else acting exactly as she asked for, like her. She’s unintentionally setting herself up for a character growing experience, if any of the writers thought of it at least.

I’m just going to stop now but write a spoiler for how I would have ended it in case anyone cares. Jessie leaves her backpack at her former house, a man who lives there picks it up and catches up to her to give it back to her and taps on her shoulder from behind, but that’s too close and they can’t resist each other. They start making out and he grows a tail explosively out the back of his clothes and finds to his shock he’s turned into a catgirl and continues developing into a heavily-afflicted one and then her belly grows and rapidly progresses to the birthing stage and is astonished and reluctant to accept he’s a female giving birth. Then his wife runs out and says what did you fo to my husband and is upset at first but they were an infertile couple and anger turns to enthusiasm as the former husband gives birth to a litter of 5. Jon wishes to know information on the status of Karyn and Josh and just decides to merge everyone with their timeline 4 selves from a distance. Josh knows where she lives now and goes there to join her now large family- her parents are now both women as his own father was the 2nd victim of her power and as a result has to accept things are pretty messed up and in addition to having dozens of children, also has some inbred half-sibling daughters, but their family is rich because they get paid to use Josh’s power on rich men who want to be heavily-afflicted mothers, and it turns out that when used on women they just get pregnant the slow way and with no transformation to heavily-afflicted state, but with men the change is to heavily afflicted and ready to give birth immediately. Final scene is they’ve settled into their new lives and Josh/Jessie and Jon/Tiffany are cuddling together in bed watching a romance movie talking, and then Karyn joins the conversation indicating she’s there in the bed eith them and then finally Sarah tells them all to quiet because she’s trying to watch the movie, indicating all four of them are crowded together in bed. A bit ofblight-hearted affection and teasing and it’s the end

I really want to say, you may not have thought about this, but this also really goes against what was already established for Karyn in the first chapter. She was very negative about human male sexuality, showing contempt for and reducing all of them to just drooling over women's breasts. I find it hard to believe she'd do a 180 and be pleased and sex-positive with Jon doing sexual things, she'd be much more likely to react with contempt and something like "you're just like all the rest of them after all". In fact in light of what she does think of members of the male sex, I find it hard to understand how she could have ever have become friends with a boy in the first place. Maybe it would have been better to ditch Karyn as the target of Jon's interactions here. He's not Romeo and she's not Juliet. They are not soulmates and when one or both of them have power, they wouldn't be likely to get along for long, and I would expect Jon being anything more than a eunuch in front of her would set this off. He may think favorably about her but remember they're still "friends" after being childhood friends yet she's very ardently negative toward human male sexuality. It paints a picture to me. In most of my own stories I have pushed Karyn to being secondary or not good-intentioned for this reason.

It’s an intriguing idea here but it’s just too many chapters for nothing really new happening with no conflict, no danger. Just 2 kids doing sexual stuff together normal people could never experience IMHO is good for a chapter or two, but not 20. It would be a much better story if they had lost control of the stone or a wish had gone wrong in a way that was possible but extremely inconvenient to fix and they were potentially going to be stuck that way forever, if they had to make some sacrifice, if they truly got stuck that way and had to cope, just for something different to happen in all this.

These scenarios seem like they could be a lot more tricky than most of the writers realize, so I've included some of these thoughts into the storyline here.

All right Lucus. You're lucky I checked back one last time because I was going to end my relationship with this website. But for your reference I came to that conclusion because when my stuff doesn't get any upvotes and everyone else's submissions submitted at about the same time does, my conclusion is no one cares. But most of them are probably just upvoting their own content and any real readers maybe don't bother even if they read something they like, or maybe save it to favorites instead.

well I’m stopping here, no one’s reading it or cares anyway

I guess "Pbly" could actually be either possibly or probably. Actually it could even be "impossibly" or "improbably" but maybe that would be better shortened to mply and it wouldn't fit the context. It could be tricky to write for this in a way that isn't ambiguous. Any long words stand to be a real problem. I did split newscaster into 2 words intentionally for that reason.

Really? I thought it was only the last sentence that wasn’t self-explanatory. Maybe “dmtd” for “admitted”. But here it is:

Just then, the phone rang. Jon picked it up.

“Jon. what did you do?!” It was Karyn.

“I don’t know!” Jon answered.

“Did you make every word four letters long Jon?!”

“Probably,” he admitted. He turned on the television.

The news caster was talking about total chaos. The nasdaq had fallen 9999 points, war was brewing as people thought it was a sign of the end times. No one could explain what was happening. It was a phenomenon without precedent.