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Check out the book, The Lord of the Flies by William Golding. There is a character that has visions, though it's associated with epilepsy.

I'm also hoping the story continues in this direction. So many times the author treats the magic as a flowing force that takes the aware individual and, either removes them from the story or melds them into the new reality removing the conflict.

Actually, since the curse was on John and now she's Jo, it should have stopped working at that point. You didn't do that, but maybe you can reconsider something.

Have you thought about brining Mackenzie/Jon into this? The Jon part of the character matrix still cares about his sister and Zoe, knowing he's still around, will be less chaotic.

Hey, I'm reading it.

This is showing a lot of promise. There are multiple directions the story could go from here. We could end up with all the rifts between the 3 girls ended or become even wider through competition and secrets coming out unexpectedly. Have you decided yet if one or more of the magical races represented allow for multiple life partners?

While Karyn is an expected pairing, perhaps switching Karyn's and Sarah's dislike for each other to stem from a competition over an attraction to Jasmine would open up more plot possibilities. Particularly if Sarah was also trying to hide this from her circle to maintain her position at school and her parents who wouldn't approve for whatever reasons you decided to come up with.

I'm thinking "fearless leader" from Rocky and Bullwinkel had some effect on the chief's description. Also, finding the Batman / Catwoman setup interesting. Or am I giving away the direction this story is headed?

Like your direction also. Hadn't thought about making mom and dad competitive.