Area82's profile

It's okay, I was just curious.

Interesting. I previously thought it was mostly everyone, at least those who was living with someone else (human or otherwise) in Lake Point at the time that had this transformation. If it is possible, I would like to see someone bring this curiosity up (it doesn't have to be soon, just something in the near future). After all, I'm sure the characters in the story is probably just as curious to why not everyone was affected.

Why is Tiffany surprised at this news? I mean, shouldn't she be dealing with the something similar?

I'm enjoying this story so far, you're doing great. I'll admit, I wasn’t a big fan on a few things before the rewrite, like the out-of-place gods approach (the teacher’s transformation and the fact that Damion is playing online with others kinda defeated a few points) and a few characteristic oddities (Luke seems like a good kid just to act like that). But as for the rewrite, I’m loving the changes.

I do have one issue, though: I don’t think a short amount of time in Kindergarten would be enough to have caused the kind of impact they had on our protagonist to affect him as much as it did. You may want to increase the impact a bit more.

Okay, that's fair enough.

I don't know if it's a good idea to add a complex character like Miss Fine to an already complex story. It like trying to focus on two seperate giant plot points at the same time, which might complicate things a bit for both the readers and the people entering their entries.

One thing I must note about this post is that it introduced something that wasn't there in the previous posts: transformation. Despite everything, it just seems everything is mental for now and Miss Fine hasn't done anything physically (and I don't think she can, as far as I could see).