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Just throwing some ideas out there in the hopes of inspiring another chapter!

-Higher pitched, younger sounding voice - the incongruence of being so much older but sounding young would certainly be uncomfortable for Sue.

-Further Height Reduction - she's already pretty short, but it would still be funny.

Incongruent memories - Ex. Keep his 100% straight male mind until the end, but give Sue an interest in say, giving blowjobs
Age Reminders - anything that would remind Sue that while she's hot, she's still much older. Switch her generational knowledge, give her the back pain of a lifetime of large breasts, give her bad eyesight.

Hope this ends up helping at least a little!

Sad to see a potential update got lost with a crash :(

Hope the bug bites you to come back to this at some point! I'm really looking forward to the awkward husband scene. In fact, the whole family would be interesting - Sure struggling to make dinner for the family while simultaneously trying to stay in character waiting for mental changes that seem to be taking forever to kick in. I'd also love to see the foreshadowed bigger, more awkwardly uncomfortable breasts wish too.

Always glad to see more of your work. Looking forward to see what other branches get a bump from you

I think there's plenty of room to write still before that even becomes an issue. And I feel like the best way to handle that is in some form of the compulsions he's already under - the inability to show frustration, swear, etc. in front of others. Can't complain about the way he's being treated while he's with someone, and may quickly run out of time alone being a mother / housewife / what have you. And I would certainly consider wishing away someone's behavior to be a form of complaining about it.

I mean things like the wish to be shorter going so far as to make him 5'1", kinda getting off on the thought of dealing with it, without actually dealing with the reality of it yet. The potential for things to go farther than he originally intended are super prevalent in the latest wish, as well as in wishes about his husband. What he means to ask for and what he gets are likely to be different things.

I did assume, in hindsight I shouldn't have done that and I apologize.

As far as what I enjoyed, and I kinda suspect I now know why, this writing doesn't fit the bill for r/menwritingwomen. It's descriptive in a way that lets you feel and understand what the character is going through.

Also, the premise it starts with is much more realistic than many of the other paths you see on Fiction Branches in terms of what someone here might actually do with a magic rock. John has his fantasy, he knows what he wants to experience. However he's also letting his hormones take control and doing things that, while he is enjoying them now, deep down he knows he's really throwing himself for a loop. I can't wait to see the consequences come crashing down.

I'm also enjoying the misinterpretations along the way. Shrugging off the 'little' mistakes that will turn into life changing consequences without really thinking it all through is great.

I second that. I would love to see him continue the work

Sure hope you come back and continue this some day Alojz, it's been great!

Also just a note: I noticed you've given the new MILF two names. Jon refers to get as Auntie Sue but then her new memories refer to get as Laura.

First off, I think those personal fantasies probably coincide with a lot of other people that read this site, so I wouldn't worry about it too much.

As far as ideas go, a few things that would be neat to see -
Jon continues with the tweaks, but realizes shortly after meeting David that he is in over his head, despite being so firmly stuck.

being trapped is still a turn on, but it's awfully inconvenient when you're y'know, trapped
The method of changing Jon could cross over into David's hands.

Though I think Jon probably needs to go on a bit longer 'enjoying' himself before he really realizes the consequences of his actions