GREAT addition! Really fun continuation!
By Wx2 -
Loving this! it's hilarious and sweet at the same time :)
By Great Sage -
On Now, what should I try today?
Thank you for the kind words! I was lurking for many years and now I'm trying to give something back. My goal is to add chapters on my favourite but aborted branches and (hopefully) that sparks further additions.
By Krystren -
On What's going on in the bedrooms?
I honestly thought this was a great addition! Photo chapters are certainly my favorite and I would love to see more of thos.
The English itself was great, better then most native writers!
By Wx2 -
On What's going on in the bedrooms?
This storyline is shaping up to be crazier than a bucket full of soapy frogs - I love it!
By Great Sage -
Maybe add hits/views/upvotes counts to the author profile page chapter listing so that you can see the hit count without incrementing it and see how your chapters are received without looking at all of them.
By bigbustgazer -
On Suggestions for site redesign
Nitpick on the first paragraph, "But this time he’d gone through with it, for sure!" Should probably read "But this time he’d have gone through with it, for sure!"
By bigbustgazer -
On Sarah likes her uneccessary love triangles
Thank you ! I hope you will continue enjoying it. I enjoy reading your work too.
By Soitu -
On Red Lipstick
Almost forgot to also mention how much I love stories that involve party games :D
By
Mira -
X3 Excited to have hit the idea on the head for sure. It's one of my favorites, but yeah going by your note you've built up quite the interesting premise. With the selection of girls you've gathered, the number of ways this can go for Jon is looking to be fun. Still loving that Tiffany story line from the sisters story, by the looks of things she is a good bit more of a party slut in this one so she has my vote for a Jon partner. Also curious what you mean by the twinning spreading, do more girls merge with Jon and look like him and the first girl, does the group amalgamate between the different girls, or does he spread it so the second girl twins with a third girl making hivemind pairs with Jon being the originator of this "infection"? Several different avenues my mind went when I read that comment.
By
Mira -
This is great fun,really like the subtle memory shifts
By Great Sage -
Pretty much what Ziggu said, although in this story I'm going for a slightly more subdued, big sis teases younger sis ecchi sort of thing for Karyn (at least for now). And yeah, the girl is Akeno from Highschool DxD.
By MorphoHex -
“Ara Ara” is a nonsense phrase used in a lot of anime, especially hentai, to basically mean “I’m going to molest you”.
By Ziggu45 -
Could someone explain the reference? I don't quite recognise it
By Great Sage -
Is that Akeno? Nice!
By Krystren -
Sounds interesting, let's see if you can deliver on the potential of the premise :)
By Great Sage -
Always refreshing to start from the beginning in another character's POV! Keep it up!
By
Mr. C -
On Karyn finds out more about her wish
This is really good and should be continued.
By Fionn -
It'll be explained in the next chapter, I just wanted to keep it a mystery for a bit. I kind of like the stories where unexplained changes happen so I wanted to do something similar (but there is a reason!)
By MorphoHex -
Why does becoming a Tsundere make Karyn Jon's sister? I'm not seeing the connection between those...
By bigbustgazer -
Aww thanks cork!
By Kylo -
On In another room, there sat a girl
I love the juxtaposition in those last two lines. It's a small thing, but it's just a very well put-together set of sentences.
By
Ms. Cork -
On In another room, there sat a girl
keep up the good work, like most of your branches, especially the monster world Branch
By Anonymor -
On Code
I decided that if there are moments where Jon or someone is thinking about changing their shirt, to make that a natural stopping point in case someone wants to hop on, add a new shirt for more chaos, or just keep everything unchanged. I have my own ideas still for now, though.
By MorphoHex -
Interesting, please continue
By Great Sage -
On Wake Up
It's a shame this wasn't continued, it was shaping up to be really interesting
By Great Sage -
Oooh, hoping for some fun stuff with the twins shirt. No idea what Code intends but I know I am equally torn on hoping it ends up hivemind style, or clone style. I think I always end up leaning more hivemind myself though.
By
Mira -
agreed
By Anonymor -
On Mean then Cute: 100% Tsundere
This should be fun, a bit different to being a bimbo or a slut at least
By Great Sage -
On Mean then Cute: 100% Tsundere
Love the reactions to each individual shirt!
By
Mr. C -
I'm enjoying this, I hope you continue
By Great Sage -
On Revelations and confrontations
Love the shirts story lines a ton! I hope these catch on more!!!
By
Mr. C -
hope to see the story continue
By Anonymor -
Why are story text fields so narrow now? It's like we're back in the 90s when monitor resolutions were in the 800x600 to 1024x768 range.
An option to allow the text to occupy the width of the monitor would be really appreciated.
By unilateral711 -
On Suggestions for site redesign
This is fun, hope you continue it
By Anonymor -
On Harem Anime Life: Filling out the Cast
I was tempted to give Tiffany a new daughter to match the age progression, another newcomer like the manifestation of the school in Lacy, but I couldn’t figure out how to do it. And we needed the Loli Sister (as horrible as it is), so Mikey got the hit because Zoe’s previously accepted personality just didn’t work. I decided to also change the school to be a Japanese high school in appearance and possibly function, otherwise the wish wouldn’t be complete. I’m tempted to have Jon get a new male friend who is a bit more genre savvy to fit the “4th wall Aware comedy sidekick” character, but I’m not sure I could have him do anything besides quote Mother’s Basement “How to survive a Harem Anime” video.
By Ziggu45 -
On Harem Anime Life: Filling out the Cast
So, including the ones from the previous page, we have:
Alright then, we have ourselves a Harem.
By
Tenkuu23 -
On Harem Anime Life: Filling out the Cast
interesting.
By lerch -
On Harem Anime Life: Filling out the Cast
She should be a reluctant nudist!
By abagel -
Oooh, cant wait to see what comes out of this one... perhaps some of the girls will use the male filter which transforms them as well
By
Nabruv2 -
👀
By
TheScienceWizard -
On Jon loses his head, and his body
So... this is a parody of Westworld, right? Like, not the TV show, which came out 8 years after this was written, but the original movie? Why not call it Breastworld? The joke is right there!
By Noble Six -
On Girl World
I did the same thing, made it hard to figure out what was happening, on the other branch and A51 retconned the next piece because it was pre editing.
By The Guest -
On Melony is Very Confused (Alt)
I have a habit of making swaps and reality alterations a bit of a Shell Game, so the confusion in my version was intentional. I wanted it like the magic wasn’t quote sure who was supposed to be who. But I can see how 3rd Person Omniscient was probably not the best choice.
By Ziggu45 -
On Melony is Very Confused (Alt)
Yes, I went through that as well, it isn't fun
By Great Sage -
On People Start Coming Together
Scarlett raven id love it if you’d add to the reaction part. I want to know how you’d write Lonna’s feeling about being a student and Lauren’s having Lonna’s life.
By Switcher -
What a class act Biff's dad is, no wonder Biff became such a jerk with that asshat as a role model.
By Great Sage -
On Biff returns home, no sign of dad.
The reaction I described was actually one we ended up doing in my old school. We had a small scorch mark on the ceiling for a while after that.
By
Tenkuu23 -
More, More More!
By Great Sage -
Great twist over Brianna transmission. I loved the addition! I can't wait for the next chapters
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