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Pretty much what Ziggu said, although in this story I'm going for a slightly more subdued, big sis teases younger sis ecchi sort of thing for Karyn (at least for now). And yeah, the girl is Akeno from Highschool DxD.

“Ara Ara” is a nonsense phrase used in a lot of anime, especially hentai, to basically mean “I’m going to molest you”.

Could someone explain the reference? I don't quite recognise it

Is that Akeno? Nice!

Sounds interesting, let's see if you can deliver on the potential of the premise :)

Always refreshing to start from the beginning in another character's POV! Keep it up!

This is really good and should be continued.

It'll be explained in the next chapter, I just wanted to keep it a mystery for a bit. I kind of like the stories where unexplained changes happen so I wanted to do something similar (but there is a reason!)

Why does becoming a Tsundere make Karyn Jon's sister? I'm not seeing the connection between those...

Aww thanks cork!

I love the juxtaposition in those last two lines. It's a small thing, but it's just a very well put-together set of sentences.

keep up the good work, like most of your branches, especially the monster world Branch

I decided that if there are moments where Jon or someone is thinking about changing their shirt, to make that a natural stopping point in case someone wants to hop on, add a new shirt for more chaos, or just keep everything unchanged. I have my own ideas still for now, though.

Interesting, please continue

It's a shame this wasn't continued, it was shaping up to be really interesting

Oooh, hoping for some fun stuff with the twins shirt. No idea what Code intends but I know I am equally torn on hoping it ends up hivemind style, or clone style. I think I always end up leaning more hivemind myself though.

agreed

This should be fun, a bit different to being a bimbo or a slut at least

Love the reactions to each individual shirt!

I'm enjoying this, I hope you continue

Love the shirts story lines a ton! I hope these catch on more!!!

hope to see the story continue

Why are story text fields so narrow now? It's like we're back in the 90s when monitor resolutions were in the 800x600 to 1024x768 range.

An option to allow the text to occupy the width of the monitor would be really appreciated.

This is fun, hope you continue it

I was tempted to give Tiffany a new daughter to match the age progression, another newcomer like the manifestation of the school in Lacy, but I couldn’t figure out how to do it. And we needed the Loli Sister (as horrible as it is), so Mikey got the hit because Zoe’s previously accepted personality just didn’t work. I decided to also change the school to be a Japanese high school in appearance and possibly function, otherwise the wish wouldn’t be complete. I’m tempted to have Jon get a new male friend who is a bit more genre savvy to fit the “4th wall Aware comedy sidekick” character, but I’m not sure I could have him do anything besides quote Mother’s Basement “How to survive a Harem Anime” video.

So, including the ones from the previous page, we have:

1. Karyn: Childhood Friend
2. Sarah: Most Popular Girl in School
3. Athena: The Tsundere Witch
4. Mikey (now Michelle): The Little Sister (Why is that a thing?!)
5. Mike Matthews (New name possible?): The Athlete
6. Tiffany: The Hot Teacher
7. Nadine: The Stalker
8. Leonard (Now Leo): The Geek Girl
9. Yuki: The Maid/Foreign Exchange Student
10. Newcomer Lacy Penn: The Ghost Girl

Alright then, we have ourselves a Harem.

interesting.

She should be a reluctant nudist!

Oooh, cant wait to see what comes out of this one... perhaps some of the girls will use the male filter which transforms them as well

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So... this is a parody of Westworld, right? Like, not the TV show, which came out 8 years after this was written, but the original movie? Why not call it Breastworld? The joke is right there!

I did the same thing, made it hard to figure out what was happening, on the other branch and A51 retconned the next piece because it was pre editing.

I have a habit of making swaps and reality alterations a bit of a Shell Game, so the confusion in my version was intentional. I wanted it like the magic wasn’t quote sure who was supposed to be who. But I can see how 3rd Person Omniscient was probably not the best choice.

Yes, I went through that as well, it isn't fun

Scarlett raven id love it if you’d add to the reaction part. I want to know how you’d write Lonna’s feeling about being a student and Lauren’s having Lonna’s life.

What a class act Biff's dad is, no wonder Biff became such a jerk with that asshat as a role model.

The reaction I described was actually one we ended up doing in my old school. We had a small scorch mark on the ceiling for a while after that.

More, More More!

Great twist over Brianna transmission. I loved the addition! I can't wait for the next chapters

This is a lovely surprise! It's really good, too. Like the direction!

I wanted to, as mentioned, have one branch where we follow Biff and the other where we only hear about Biff's day from him after the fact.

Or are we just wanting to write out the events of Day 3 in the other branch with the understanding that exactly the same thing happened here, and you're wanting Biff to relay the info from that branch?

(Btw, for readers that have no idea what we're talking about, read the Reassignment branch instead of Diplomacy branch after the second gurney dream)

Hang on, what day do we think it is? Biff's family and Jon were kidnapped on night 2 and I figured Jon would be returned on night 3, so we'd have to detail what Biff was doing in the meantime on day 3, in between Jon's kidnap and return, most significantly a possible confused Meetup between Biff and Karyn. If we want Biff and Jon to interact on Day 3, I think it'd make most sense on the other branch, right? There it's not set that Jon had to leave for a full day.

@bryan but thats kind of exactly what the site is in the current method. its full of stories most people wont touch or see cause they are in such a big blob.

It's been discussed, the original site design limited the number of "parent" stories deliberately to avoid Writing.com style plagues of a large number of interactives with only one or two episodes. The idea we were working on was large interactives that eventually took off would be promoted to root level wtih YAWYW, FOG and AF.

We just don't want the site overloaded with junk content either.

AS for ANFCD, at the moment the site is still being developed, the ability to "promote" stories is being worked on still.

the And Now for Something Completely Different! branch for example at the very least needs to be on the front page.

its really sloppy that the site just piles all of the stories into one story. just let people post new branch stories so they arent all hidden away in some sub story never to be updated. if this site just had a feed of new branches like how writing.com is it be way more active.

they need to make it possible to sort by date when you search.

Love it! I’d love to see how Lonna feels being in Lauren’s life and vise versa how Lauren feels about having Lonna’s life before I add. I just want to see what direction you want

Admittedly I’m unsure when I wrote this. I just wanted to add to the catworld and this cat spirit popped in my head. I might try to think of another idea.