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<3 Fusion, Conjoinment, and Multiple Bodyparts with reality alteration even all rolled into one simple device. Love it! I hope we can get to see a lot of what this device can do.

Sorry about the wait! Writer's block and life's been hell lately.

Very intriguing concept, I'm curious to see where you go with this but hope you don't engage in too much identity death. It's also very well written.

I'm curious with this aproach.

Nice.
An alternative I could see is that the wish made Jon instantly swap everything that was left to change. Since everything was swapped, it would stop the swapping

Hi there and welcome! Some consider it an honour for their story to be added upon. ;)

Lions are not endurance runners, only sprinters.

Dogs do have color vision. They just don't see as many as we do. You should definitely Google dog vision. It's pretty cool.

I tried to delete and re-enter the comment to fix the typo (Fo vs Go), but got a: "javax.persistence.PersistenceException: org.hibernate.exception.ConstraintViolationException: could not execute statement"

Don't be concerned about adding to existing stories. The branch you create is entirely independent. It doesn't commit to a direction or theme and can be followed or not at whim. The same is true for branches that may be added to yours. Fo for it!

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very cute, love it.

Yay for at least friends again.

Can’t wait for next episode

I don't know. Seems WAY too easy an 'out'.

Excellent back-to-back posts!

I like the premise and quality of writing, Well done!

Moved from the You Are What You Wish branch.

I can move it. It would fit better over there.

Excellent back-to-back posts!

I just saw this branch. It seems like it should be in the "Drafting Board".

Nevertheless I like the premise and quality of writing, Well done!

Yay for more changed.

I really like the core idea behind this branch, and it's very well written! Great chapter!

I particularly like a storyline that allows for leveraging of restrictions.

I won't be adding regularly to it, I think, but every now and then I'll do some work on it.

always liked this branch, hope it continues

Please keep this going!

Thank you for the feedback!!!! I'll try to improve as I go, and plan on writing more!!!

Really curious to see where this could go.

Loving these!

Well done. Interesting twist with the mother loving it and the father hating it. Makes sense and can add a lot I think. The writing itself is quite good as well, shows a lot of potential. There's some issues with tenses here and there but that's just down to obsessive editing. Also the perspective and exposition could maybe use a bit of polish, since it took me awhile to figure out what was a Real Karyn thought and what was a Sarah Karyn thought. Although it may have been meant to be deliberately ambiguous and I'm just pretty stupid at the moment.

In any case,I really enjoyed this. Thanks for adding. I'd love to see more.

<3 This is a story line that could happily be picked back up. Thanks for giving it another chapter.

Fantastic addittion, cant wait for more.

"Holy son of fucking a biscuit maker!"
10/10

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Far past time for me to complinment your concept and execution. Thank you.

Love it! Hope you continue

Love this one! Can’t wait for next update!

Even on these side stories!!

Looking forward to the next episode.

First post here!
Decided to keep Alex's gender and sex vague so that other authors can choose as it becomes relevant.

Awesome episode!

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love the thread, keep it up

Better than Sarah Silvana, how about Black Sarah and Biff controlled by Mr Mind

Thank you. I'm trying to make the characters more realistic than in most other branches, the slow burn is more a consequence of that than something I planned.
For the mind change, it's mostly a personal preference. It's not something I enjoy very much and I couldn't justifie the characters not using it unless it was explicitly forbidden. But as I said before, if you still want to add your own chapters, you're more than welcome to do so.

I love the slow burn, and how Jon, Karyn, and Sarah are behaving realistically for the ridiculous situation they're in. A lot of other branches might just jump into the changes without stopping to think through the ramifications of each event, or just let Jon meekly submit without fighting back like a normal person. Keep up the great work

I second that this is a great story. The only thing I wish was different was that mental changes were not explicitly disallowed in one of the first original wishes. I'm tempted to circumuent it by writing an episode where Sarah makes some changes to Jon's brain - I guess it's something that's physical. It wouldn't overwrite who Jon is, but might give him some new thoughts or feelings - which works for me cause I'm not a fan of identity death anyway.

I did have a sense that this story was moving in a more deliberate direction than many interactive stories. I may contribute a chapter or two, but feel no obligation to add to it. Very interested to see what you have planned!

Thank you, I am glad you like it. I have to say I never considered someone would want to contribute to this story. I always thought of it as something I would write alone, and I planned a lot of things I want to do with it that I don't think would work if I had to adapt to what other people write.
You can still make another branch and I might add to it if I have some ideas, but I think I'll keep making my own story at the same time.