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Great job with the story. I hope Jon/Allaria is in the book long enough to consummate her wedding. And I do think it is better when they are forced to act and talk totally in character. Great ob everyone!

I have to say that this is probably my most favorite story to read on FB. I hope you all will continue with this amazing tale. And I hope Jon/Allaria winds up in bed with the human knight - or at least getting to second base. Gotta make the best use of those breasts. Please, please, please.

I have to say that this is probably my most favorite story to read on FB. I hope you all will continue with this amazing tale. And I hope Jon/Allaria winds up in bed with the human knight - or at least getting to second base. Gotta make the best use of those breasts. Please, please, please.

I have to say that this is probably my most favorite story to read on FB. I hope you all will continue with this amazing tale. And I hope Jon/Allaria winds up in bed with the human knight - or at least getting to second base. Gotta make the best use of those breasts. Please, please, please.

I have to say that this is probably my most favorite story to read on FB. I hope you all will continue with this amazing tale. And I hope Jon/Allaria winds up in bed with the human knight - or at least getting to second base. Gotta make the best use of those breasts. Please, please, please.

Nice

Thanks!

Ohh the cliff!

That works better :)

hilarious and brilliant as always.

Great!!

Bunnie: Next to last paragraph of the previous entry, starting with "Jack Struggled..."

interested to see where you plan to take one of my favourite branches ^^

How did he get under 3ft? I missed something.

Lelouch what is your favorite type of FTF swaps? Is there any you’ve wanted me to write about and if so describe what they look like, their attitudes and their names. Maybe I could write something then others could add too

Can’t wait for the next add!

What a historic episode this was for FB—introducing 13 characters! Several of these characters became classics used routinely.

Can't wait to see where this goes, hope Candi gets to make an errant wish about the girls. Great job!

You're alive! love your stories, and on FIctionmania! would love to see you write more or any other stories you've done!

Nice catch...I've decided to retcon that.

Interesting so far but be careful, I noticed that in the previous episode Zoey said she didn't have the stone with her and now she does - did she lie to her friend or did you just forget?

Cool epiaode. As always, I'll try to game-ify this with alternative branches once youre done with it

We love it tooo

I decided to continue it. Seems there is more interested then I thought. Thanks for the encouragement :)

As someone who identifies as a mult this is immensely relatable. Can't wait to see where this goes!

https://discord.gg/BTNR6F WARNING: there is currently politics in the channel entitled General Bullshit

Sure! How do I join?

Agreed. This chapter was a particularly great mix of funny and sexy. Bravo.

Fantastic episode. By the way I'm on the beaddventure discord if you ever want to talk in a more real time format about kink writing.

Damn man. You weren't kidding about stepping your game up. I mean, your previous entries were good, don't get me wrong. I enjoyed them a lot. But this is still way better. The prose is great, the characterization of Karyn vs. Seraphina is fun, and I love the play on how some old fantasy authors really sucked at writing female characters.

I think it still works. We're already close to but not quite at the edge of where that would go. Might be good to keep in mind for flexibility's sake.

If it's already mandated by the genre, then I'll leave it as is. There is a funny contrast between oversexed characters and fairly pg plotlines--which is all I was gonna pull out of the erotica, of course. Anything too sex-related is a definite no-go, especially when the characters aren't doing it willingly.

That would certainly make sense given where we're taking it so far. Though personally I found a lot of the fairly PG fantasy like Wheel of Time to be sexually charged in a subdued, circumspect way. Character's can't cuss and the women are all aloof but here's a loving description of how great all their tits look in this over-detailed dress design.

I didn't even think about how a potential romance between the two is ruined by their unwanted family dynamic. Crap, that could be hilarious. As for the bookmark, I treating it as taking on as many traits from the one book as possible (because that's all Jon and Karen used it on)... But with a twist. I'm not quite sure how to reveal it yet, but I'm thinking that the bookmark may have "remembered" a few traits from the book its last owner used it on: an erotica.

Hum, i'm curious to see the development.

And yeah love what you're doing with the contrast between Jon and Karyn's characters. And the excerpt from the awful fantasy novel. Personally I was never sure if the world the bookmark generated should match what it was used on 100% or just the essence of it. But I think you're getting a lot out of it being a specific setting.

I was always a sucker for the adolescent romance overtones of the first chapter between Jon and Karyn, to be honest. Although you could do a similar thing if Karyn was bi thus eliminating the choice for her while leaving that subplot open as a possibility. Alternatively, could just screw the both of them again. They're blessed by a fertility goddess right? Meaning, breeding. Maybe other elves are just fine with what anyone might get up to sexually, but the royal family is always 100% straight.

But really, I trust you to come up with something good. I'm quite eager.

Thanks! I'm pretty satisfied with this chapter; per the tell-not-show rule of all good-bad literature, none of the skills Edea was listed of having will ever be made relevant. As for Karyn, I'd thought I could make her a good contrast to Jon. If one’s gonna be the passive female protagonist with the agency of a lamp, the other’s gonna be a ridiculous self-insert with infuriatingly little personality. I’m also considering having Karyn be queer, just to bully her with the “only straight white people in fantasies” trope. What are your thoughts?

Which is not to say that you should rush to that scene. I'm enjoying what you're doing and this characterization of Karyn. If you have something more planned here I'm also eager to see it. Or if you want to continue Jon's romantic interlude. Great job.

Good stuff. Seraphina is a biiiit of a Mary Sue I see. Can't wait to see what you had in mind for the meeting with Jon.

I like where you seem to be going with the edits but it really wasn't necessary. And thanks for the praise.

Can’t wait to see how you write Lauren’s night in her new body and what you do with Lonna exploring her new boyfriend!

I submitted a few edits on the “day in the life of the Queen” episode to make it fall more in line with how you developed the story.

It's been an absolute delight reading your addition to the story. Especially how you turned my offhand remark on a human diplomat into a full on plot point; I can imagine this storyline turning into quite the headache for the two unwilling protagonists.

So yeah pulled out something here that used to be one of the most cringe-inducing "conflicts" in the worst examples of fantasy. Female lead that has a unique striking feature that she's convinced makes her ugly until the male lead proves with the approval of his dick that she's really beautiful all along.

I've got one more in me, this was just getting too long. Done in just a bit, sorry.

Ok make that three. I'm gonna go ahead and post two so I don't lose them then get the third out real quick, then it's all you.

Next bit will be two episodes with Jon, then I'm spent for now.

Next bit will be two episodes with Jon, then I'm spent for now.

Hell yeah! Go for it. I'm excited to see what you have planned.
EDIT: I didn't see your latest comment from last episode until now--I think you should write the next one. I have a few plans to further develop Karen's perspective, but they'd fit best in the lunch scene.