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This story is really interesting.

Great job on this! Please continue

Add another please

Yes. It's really weird...

Would you mind adding?

Nice pack of chapters too.

Wow, nice "pack" of chapters.

I’m gonna try and add more in a bit too.

That’s fine, I’ll add more when I can

Apologies for the short one readers.

Slight continuity error her mind was copied in last, but I’m willing to run with this error as it makes things go a bit more interestingly.

Keep it coming!

I thought it would be interesting if someone just stayed put and called. And if someone else couldn't change.

Great chapter.

Great job! Keep adding please.

To be honest, this is set in the spring, so many people will have had a birthday in the year. But I think we're on the same page.

Yeah, where I live, it's K-5 for Elementary, 6-8 for Middle School, and 9-12 for High School too.

I'm not sure you can trust your friend to know how to count properly. He does have a Florida education, after all.

(I can make that joke, I lived in Florida for all of K-12)

It depends if you are going from starting to ending age. Elementary here is Grades K-5, Middle 6-8, High School 9-12. So, a 12 year old in the Spring, which is supposed to be, would be 11 at the start of the year. I asked a friend of mine in Florida, and he said Middle School in his area is 5-8. So, it may vary. Someone once set Lake Point near PIttsburgh. I checked. In the suburbs of Pennsylvania, it is also 6-8.

HMM curious.

For me, middle school (or junior high school) was 12 to 14 years old. Then high school was 15 to 18. But ages could vary.

Haven't I been punished enough?

That was me. I didn't do the cheerleader branch though, that was churl.

Please continue!

I guess you'll have to be punished.

Oops, that's my fault.

Actually, Linda already got inside the house in a previous episode, using a spare key. (Musical Closets Variation: Yes, Jon is Stephanie's Friend)

It might take me a while but I will get there eventually. Work permitting, which I still have to go to in the middle of everything that is going on.

Bunnies or rabbits? Those are the same thing.

Normally, I don't think a person affected by the wish would be able to reach their destination so quickly, so I just figured that Zelda must live very close to the school.

With a little surprise that I was thinking that Mary had set up for her friend. It might get Lauren a little distracted and before they do go back.

Lauren might have a reason for not wanting to be a teenager again.

Sorry, I guess I missed that.

I said 'Ms. Wright' in the last branch. Can change it though.

I tried my best to look up the word Elutian, but I can't find it anywhere.

I added a few more chapters and look forward on where you take it. If there is something you’d want to happen let me know. Can’t wait to read what you add

Famous last words.

Hey i know this story, was you then Wokka who post this one and the cheerleader?

Thank you for the critique and the kind words.
I shared the feeling that the intro was too long. I had a shorter one already written up, but wasn't sure how to make alternate intros work with he structure of this site.
Did some rearranging that will hopefully offer a smoother experience.
I'll go over the long intro in the next few days and see what belongs on the cutting room floor.

LOL! This has much potential for hilarity

Really interesting stuff in here! Lots of fun ideas to explore, and I love how you described the reality changes in the early chapters. If I could offer some criticism - I found myself starting to get lost by this point. This is the 5th really long chapter of introduction. The characters are great and very well drawn, but there's just so much back & forth, and so much description, that it became truly hard to follow. I don't really understand what the actual bargain is at this point. Is Dave trying to keep Jake from being possessed by demons? And why is Dave also bargaining away his first-born, and Jake giving up his body when he dies? A lot of it feels a bit extraneous. And the descriptions of the objects in this episode were good at first but started to feel murky as it went on. Are there 3 artifacts or 4? Then the demon adds coins and other objects that do... something? I had a hard time following what's what. I'm interested in seeing where this goes, but I think you'd do well to pare things down and simplify a bit. Don't let your ideas get weighed down by your writing, if that makes sense...

This is a great branch! I hope to see more writing from you soon

No I like it. I wonder what trouble we can get them into on day two between us. ;) ;)

If you want me to change what Lauren’s wearing in Lonna’s body please let me know

Poor Biff.

10 years on, I can still think of some new twists ;)

I'm trying to rationalize how the clothes sizes changed in this wish compard to previous chapters when Jon ended up with mis-sized clothes. The only reasoning i can come up with is that in the case of Karyn's bikini, it's a bikini and has adjustable straps (Jon's tshirt was not accommodating his new breasts).

In the case of Mickey and Linda, I was just too lazy to repeat myself again by making a 2nd swap wish for clothes sizes, so perhaps the fact that neither of the two were aware of the swap is the reason that the clothes sizes are right. If neither knew any difference in size, then they would have naturally grown up and bought those sizes that approriately fit their body all their lives. But i could change that. Who knows. It's an interactive :)

hello swapping power shortcut 👀

Have to admit, I was a little bored with this episode myself. Trying to force myself to write shorter ones so they don't feel like novels.

I know that in a previous episode, Mikey's last name was said to be Matthews, but I changed it to Gibson, because ... well, I prefer that last name.

Nice to see you back, and thanks for adding onto my episode.

Wow, you really are good in twinning theme.