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I decided to continue it. Seems there is more interested then I thought. Thanks for the encouragement :)

As someone who identifies as a mult this is immensely relatable. Can't wait to see where this goes!

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Sure! How do I join?

Agreed. This chapter was a particularly great mix of funny and sexy. Bravo.

Fantastic episode. By the way I'm on the beaddventure discord if you ever want to talk in a more real time format about kink writing.

Damn man. You weren't kidding about stepping your game up. I mean, your previous entries were good, don't get me wrong. I enjoyed them a lot. But this is still way better. The prose is great, the characterization of Karyn vs. Seraphina is fun, and I love the play on how some old fantasy authors really sucked at writing female characters.

I think it still works. We're already close to but not quite at the edge of where that would go. Might be good to keep in mind for flexibility's sake.

If it's already mandated by the genre, then I'll leave it as is. There is a funny contrast between oversexed characters and fairly pg plotlines--which is all I was gonna pull out of the erotica, of course. Anything too sex-related is a definite no-go, especially when the characters aren't doing it willingly.

That would certainly make sense given where we're taking it so far. Though personally I found a lot of the fairly PG fantasy like Wheel of Time to be sexually charged in a subdued, circumspect way. Character's can't cuss and the women are all aloof but here's a loving description of how great all their tits look in this over-detailed dress design.

I didn't even think about how a potential romance between the two is ruined by their unwanted family dynamic. Crap, that could be hilarious. As for the bookmark, I treating it as taking on as many traits from the one book as possible (because that's all Jon and Karen used it on)... But with a twist. I'm not quite sure how to reveal it yet, but I'm thinking that the bookmark may have "remembered" a few traits from the book its last owner used it on: an erotica.

Hum, i'm curious to see the development.

And yeah love what you're doing with the contrast between Jon and Karyn's characters. And the excerpt from the awful fantasy novel. Personally I was never sure if the world the bookmark generated should match what it was used on 100% or just the essence of it. But I think you're getting a lot out of it being a specific setting.

I was always a sucker for the adolescent romance overtones of the first chapter between Jon and Karyn, to be honest. Although you could do a similar thing if Karyn was bi thus eliminating the choice for her while leaving that subplot open as a possibility. Alternatively, could just screw the both of them again. They're blessed by a fertility goddess right? Meaning, breeding. Maybe other elves are just fine with what anyone might get up to sexually, but the royal family is always 100% straight.

But really, I trust you to come up with something good. I'm quite eager.

Thanks! I'm pretty satisfied with this chapter; per the tell-not-show rule of all good-bad literature, none of the skills Edea was listed of having will ever be made relevant. As for Karyn, I'd thought I could make her a good contrast to Jon. If one’s gonna be the passive female protagonist with the agency of a lamp, the other’s gonna be a ridiculous self-insert with infuriatingly little personality. I’m also considering having Karyn be queer, just to bully her with the “only straight white people in fantasies” trope. What are your thoughts?

Which is not to say that you should rush to that scene. I'm enjoying what you're doing and this characterization of Karyn. If you have something more planned here I'm also eager to see it. Or if you want to continue Jon's romantic interlude. Great job.

Good stuff. Seraphina is a biiiit of a Mary Sue I see. Can't wait to see what you had in mind for the meeting with Jon.

I like where you seem to be going with the edits but it really wasn't necessary. And thanks for the praise.

Can’t wait to see how you write Lauren’s night in her new body and what you do with Lonna exploring her new boyfriend!

I submitted a few edits on the “day in the life of the Queen” episode to make it fall more in line with how you developed the story.

It's been an absolute delight reading your addition to the story. Especially how you turned my offhand remark on a human diplomat into a full on plot point; I can imagine this storyline turning into quite the headache for the two unwilling protagonists.

So yeah pulled out something here that used to be one of the most cringe-inducing "conflicts" in the worst examples of fantasy. Female lead that has a unique striking feature that she's convinced makes her ugly until the male lead proves with the approval of his dick that she's really beautiful all along.

I've got one more in me, this was just getting too long. Done in just a bit, sorry.

Ok make that three. I'm gonna go ahead and post two so I don't lose them then get the third out real quick, then it's all you.

Next bit will be two episodes with Jon, then I'm spent for now.

Next bit will be two episodes with Jon, then I'm spent for now.

Hell yeah! Go for it. I'm excited to see what you have planned.
EDIT: I didn't see your latest comment from last episode until now--I think you should write the next one. I have a few plans to further develop Karen's perspective, but they'd fit best in the lunch scene.

Hell yeah! Go for it. I'm excited to see what you have planned.

Well I was actually planning to introduce the love interest and an old bad-fantasy cliché about female leads when I first started writing.

Well geez. This is, quite frankly, amazing. Looks like I'll have to step up my writing game to maintain this level of quality. May I ask what scene you were hoping to do next? I just got started with writing Allaria's romantic rendez-vous, but will gladly hand the reigns over to you if you have something in mind. The only scene I feel particularly attached to writing is the initial interaction between Jon and Karen--I have some fun plans for that one.

Posted. I dunno if you want to do the next one or if I should.

Alright I should have something in a bit. Here's hoping it works. It's been awhile.

Thanks Unity! @ThePro, I have a vague idea for Jon, but by all means, please feel free to post whatever you want to post. Not only would I very much like to see what you have to write, but this IS fiction branches. The plot either goes as expected, or there's a fun new route to work with.

I think I might actually have something here but I don't want to derail you too much if you've already got a Jon/Allaria ep coming up or in progress.

I’m LOVING this idea so far! I think the way they are forced to speak yet keeping what they want to say above it is perfect! Along with that, how they control their body, yet can’t do anything out of character, it’s a very enjoyable concept ^^ Keep up the good work!

You're dead on. It's a weird feeling, trying to make something both clichéd and predictable, yet somehow not boring. I'm not gonna lie, I'm having a lot more fun writing this than I expected. If I get too invested, I just might have to make a full-fledged story out of it for some other platform.

I'm enjoying that this appears to indeed be a tedious and clichéd book. Following from that, I get the feeling that this version of the Princess is probably a carefree little sprite that likes to cavort in the gardens and dream of far-off places in contrast to her ice queen mother. And of course, probably a forbidden romance coming up.

I’d like to have Jon and Karen realize that since elves don’t have weeks in their calendar, they’d be stuck there quite a bit more indefinitely than originally anticipated. They’d try to figure some other way to make it out, which might be possible, considering they’re in a magic setting. Problem is, the story keeps pushing them into different directions then what they’d need to do, and they’re stuck acting as characters who—while caring about one another other—REALLY don’t get along. (Please feel free to contribute; I only have this general idea, and would love to work with other people and their own takes on the story)

Well you're doing a better job than I did back in the day. Would you be interesting in sharing your plans, if you have any in particular?

It's funny that you say that, because I was honestly trying to follow your writing style! The bookmark/fantasy world storyline has been my favorite on the site for years, and I've always been bummed to see it receive as little attention as it does.

Not only did someone add to one of my ancient poorly written episodes, it was the one with my favorite concept; and the episode was far better than what preceded it.

I love it. Can't wait to see where you're going with it.

The easiest way out of this would be hair. That would be the easiest to disguise, and I would love not have to ever shave again.

Thanks Denkkar I believe I have corrected all of the name errors.

Good addition but the "Kathryn" vs "Karyn" mixup was very distracting.

Always a fan of these 2 turning into cheerleaders. Excited to see where the story goes.

Count me in as well as to help contributing, love these ideas...but this site doesnt have the traffic it used to have

Love the drafting board, absolutely.

Chompy I'll continue this story if you won't. I love The Mist...

I did enjoy it.

Due to lack of interest I am discontinuing this story. Thanks for enjoying it if you did.