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hope to see the story continue

Why are story text fields so narrow now? It's like we're back in the 90s when monitor resolutions were in the 800x600 to 1024x768 range.

An option to allow the text to occupy the width of the monitor would be really appreciated.

This is fun, hope you continue it

I was tempted to give Tiffany a new daughter to match the age progression, another newcomer like the manifestation of the school in Lacy, but I couldn’t figure out how to do it. And we needed the Loli Sister (as horrible as it is), so Mikey got the hit because Zoe’s previously accepted personality just didn’t work. I decided to also change the school to be a Japanese high school in appearance and possibly function, otherwise the wish wouldn’t be complete. I’m tempted to have Jon get a new male friend who is a bit more genre savvy to fit the “4th wall Aware comedy sidekick” character, but I’m not sure I could have him do anything besides quote Mother’s Basement “How to survive a Harem Anime” video.

So, including the ones from the previous page, we have:

1. Karyn: Childhood Friend
2. Sarah: Most Popular Girl in School
3. Athena: The Tsundere Witch
4. Mikey (now Michelle): The Little Sister (Why is that a thing?!)
5. Mike Matthews (New name possible?): The Athlete
6. Tiffany: The Hot Teacher
7. Nadine: The Stalker
8. Leonard (Now Leo): The Geek Girl
9. Yuki: The Maid/Foreign Exchange Student
10. Newcomer Lacy Penn: The Ghost Girl

Alright then, we have ourselves a Harem.

interesting.

She should be a reluctant nudist!

Oooh, cant wait to see what comes out of this one... perhaps some of the girls will use the male filter which transforms them as well

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So... this is a parody of Westworld, right? Like, not the TV show, which came out 8 years after this was written, but the original movie? Why not call it Breastworld? The joke is right there!

I did the same thing, made it hard to figure out what was happening, on the other branch and A51 retconned the next piece because it was pre editing.

I have a habit of making swaps and reality alterations a bit of a Shell Game, so the confusion in my version was intentional. I wanted it like the magic wasn’t quote sure who was supposed to be who. But I can see how 3rd Person Omniscient was probably not the best choice.

Yes, I went through that as well, it isn't fun

Scarlett raven id love it if you’d add to the reaction part. I want to know how you’d write Lonna’s feeling about being a student and Lauren’s having Lonna’s life.

What a class act Biff's dad is, no wonder Biff became such a jerk with that asshat as a role model.

The reaction I described was actually one we ended up doing in my old school. We had a small scorch mark on the ceiling for a while after that.

More, More More!

Great twist over Brianna transmission. I loved the addition! I can't wait for the next chapters

This is a lovely surprise! It's really good, too. Like the direction!

I wanted to, as mentioned, have one branch where we follow Biff and the other where we only hear about Biff's day from him after the fact.

Or are we just wanting to write out the events of Day 3 in the other branch with the understanding that exactly the same thing happened here, and you're wanting Biff to relay the info from that branch?

(Btw, for readers that have no idea what we're talking about, read the Reassignment branch instead of Diplomacy branch after the second gurney dream)

Hang on, what day do we think it is? Biff's family and Jon were kidnapped on night 2 and I figured Jon would be returned on night 3, so we'd have to detail what Biff was doing in the meantime on day 3, in between Jon's kidnap and return, most significantly a possible confused Meetup between Biff and Karyn. If we want Biff and Jon to interact on Day 3, I think it'd make most sense on the other branch, right? There it's not set that Jon had to leave for a full day.

@bryan but thats kind of exactly what the site is in the current method. its full of stories most people wont touch or see cause they are in such a big blob.

It's been discussed, the original site design limited the number of "parent" stories deliberately to avoid Writing.com style plagues of a large number of interactives with only one or two episodes. The idea we were working on was large interactives that eventually took off would be promoted to root level wtih YAWYW, FOG and AF.

We just don't want the site overloaded with junk content either.

AS for ANFCD, at the moment the site is still being developed, the ability to "promote" stories is being worked on still.

the And Now for Something Completely Different! branch for example at the very least needs to be on the front page.

its really sloppy that the site just piles all of the stories into one story. just let people post new branch stories so they arent all hidden away in some sub story never to be updated. if this site just had a feed of new branches like how writing.com is it be way more active.

they need to make it possible to sort by date when you search.

Love it! I’d love to see how Lonna feels being in Lauren’s life and vise versa how Lauren feels about having Lonna’s life before I add. I just want to see what direction you want

Admittedly I’m unsure when I wrote this. I just wanted to add to the catworld and this cat spirit popped in my head. I might try to think of another idea.

My first question of the spirit is how do they know if they have met someone.

If they are looking in the memories then Jon and Karyn would have no memories pf the spirit and will be getting a visit.

Really looking forward to the next chapter. I want to add on after I see where you go with Lauren and Lonna’s interaction with each other and those new lives!

Ah well, understandable. Not really up to date on that stuff, but crossing my fingers for you. Education comes first

Yes, it's the end of term so I'm a bit scrambled.

Curious to see where it diverts from here!

You okay dude? Just busy or...?

Paragon Branch
Seems to be taking the archetype/role of each candidate, and pushing them to become an idealized, attractive female version of that. Names drawn directly from versions of the original names. The results also tend to be some of the most forwardly seeking Ronald's attention.
Randy the Jock has become Ranae - a statuesque, amazonian volleyball player with a fantastic physique and a confident idea of what she wants from Ronald.
Leonard the Nerd has become Laine - a voluptious, short haired chic geek whose nerddom largely manifests as sexy cosplay.
Jon the protagonist has become Journey - a petite hippie with an affinity for the supernatural (and other alternative things) and an enormous mane of curly brown locks.
Jay the otaku has become Ji-Yu - a beautiful and shy Korean girl with a hidden wild side and talent for drawing explicit art.

Femme Branch
Branch seems to push its candidates to hybridize between their old archetypes and a new one, with a prevailing theme of femininity. Progress is less individualized here, with attention spread out among four ongoing characters in addition to the completed two.
Randy the Jock has become Mandy - a graceful and willowy dancer involved with student leadership.
Leonard the Nerd has become Hallie - a soft, shy girl whose retains geeky interests while also benefiting from a pampered, possibly sheltered lifestyle.
Currently changing are Karyn (who has shifted to become a twin of Sarah McMillian), Kyla (a nerd who has become more put together, professional, and poised), Jon (who has become smaller with distinctly expressive blue eyes), and Jay (who has also grown smaller, and developed a fiery, spunky personality).
Also notable is that Ronald, the perpetrator, is in a class group with the latter three changing and Biff Meadows, the school bully. Much to Ronald's consternation, Biff's bullying has shifted into flirtation, which Kyla, Jon, and Jay are all coming around on. This is likely due to the fact that Ronald wished his potential girlfriends to become attracted to guys like him, and Biff's selfish and manipulative personality actually isn't too far off from a guy secretly manipulating his classmates into a harem.

Radical Branch
Seems to be about making the characters contrast from their former selves in major ways. Also seem to be shifts in appearance type or heritage to accompany this. Names seem to extrapolate from the back half of the original names (ranDY - Dalia, leoNard - Nadelie).
Randy the Jock has become Dalia - a petite, biracial would be student politician
Leonard the Nerd has become Nadelie - a redheaded senior who serves as the school's sexy librarian assistant.

Man I hope we get a new chapter soon

I am imagining him gaining a tail and the magic transforming him at odd times.

thx for the chapter

Hope so, just waiting for the Muse to poke me again :)

Not bad, sorry I haven't added for a while, Inspiration depends on me not being stressed, I'm on holiday now so hopefully more will come

:D Awesome. Pity he isn't a girl with a figure like his moms but I'll take what I can get. X3 This is a fun start to the story Code, keep up the good work. Thought his sisters new form was particularly funny. Gotta wonder what his dad is like. As for Sarah, succubus maybe? Or a cerberus or hydra girl so she can admire her own superiority?

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hope you continue it code

How's it going Great Sage?

Going to be continuing this Great Sage?

Oh ho, now this is perfect. A sexy kitsune mother, and best of all a sexy dullahan Karyn. Perfect choices so far in monsters to use Code. Love it! Personally I'm hoping Jon's own change takes particularly well after his mother.

I like the direction you are going with this; however I feel that changing the name of the main character for no real reason and changing the point of view from second to third person in your narrative is a bit grating. I feel that it takes away from the merits of your contribution.