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I'm trying to start a side story that will be in shorter chunks to my tsundere story, maybe it'll convince some people to jump in while I work on it. I'm also planning to actually use different points of view and switch between characters in this one like a lot of other branches do. Here's the maid outfit in question.

Thanks!

I always intended to continue it, looking back on this one now, a lot of what i wrote was flat out embarrassing in that I could write it so much better, but I appreciate the sentiment.

One day i'll finish the story.

while i love the branch, i quite dislike Roland and am happy to see stuff go even more wrong

Curious to see more of this.

Lawl, I expected as much of a reaction. I'd say don't lose hope yet...

That seems like such a crappy existence for Zoe. Poor Zoe. :(

Enjoyed Krystren's branch off this, and love to see this storyline revived, but was curious to see what would happen if, rather than being able to simply use the stone to reassert control of the situation, thing's got even more awry for Ronald. So I pitted the popular, overt jerk against the unpopular, secret jerk.

Sherry is being an utter bitch in this episode, how could any mother be this horrible to her own child?

So now what? You might have written yourself into a corner

I REALLY enjoyed this branch, twice now.

Thank you for the great additions!

You can't add a sister without losing one. That is the law of sibling conservation.

Intriguing, this could get very interesting.

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Now I REALLY want to know what's up with Zoe? Is she deformed? Is she mentally ill?

Look forward to seeing some of that. I quite enjoy the potential of this story, but I'm terrible at advancing story branches solo.

You do realise she is now well into the range of being mentally handicapped now? Not a big fan of destroying people's intelligence to this extent. Well, it's your story so do what you like.

Oh Noes! Whatever could have happened to dear sweet little Zoe?!!

Yeah no definitely still has a way to go. We'll see how many more chapters her transformation lasts

fun branch

I think this might be my favourite shirts one so far, please continue this story. Curious as to when or if Gwen will remember her old life?

Can never get enough of Jon going goth-girl. May continue on this line soonish.

I love how this branch is going! Keep up the good work!

Interesting prompt. I'm curious to see how this turns out!

Shame this stopped, a very interesting premise

Glad this storyline got revisited!

Everyone has their own style and it may take some time to find one you truly enjoy. I for one have been enjoying it quite a bit so I have no complaints. A mix of well written verse and visual imagery makes for a happy me!

Thank you! I'm still a little unhappy about my writing style, it just does not feel ... organic(?) to me. It feels like a mix of passive scientific paper and casual talking style mixed together, but hey - I just started :-)

And because I hit submit too quick, you are doing a great job of breathing life into old storylines. I really love that idea and perhaps it will convince me to finally make an addition. Wish there was an easier way to collaborate on here.

GREAT addition! Really fun continuation!

Loving this! it's hilarious and sweet at the same time :)

Thank you for the kind words! I was lurking for many years and now I'm trying to give something back. My goal is to add chapters on my favourite but aborted branches and (hopefully) that sparks further additions.

I honestly thought this was a great addition! Photo chapters are certainly my favorite and I would love to see more of thos.

The English itself was great, better then most native writers!

This storyline is shaping up to be crazier than a bucket full of soapy frogs - I love it!

Maybe add hits/views/upvotes counts to the author profile page chapter listing so that you can see the hit count without incrementing it and see how your chapters are received without looking at all of them.

Nitpick on the first paragraph, "But this time he’d gone through with it, for sure!" Should probably read "But this time he’d have gone through with it, for sure!"

Thank you ! I hope you will continue enjoying it. I enjoy reading your work too.

Almost forgot to also mention how much I love stories that involve party games :D

X3 Excited to have hit the idea on the head for sure. It's one of my favorites, but yeah going by your note you've built up quite the interesting premise. With the selection of girls you've gathered, the number of ways this can go for Jon is looking to be fun. Still loving that Tiffany story line from the sisters story, by the looks of things she is a good bit more of a party slut in this one so she has my vote for a Jon partner. Also curious what you mean by the twinning spreading, do more girls merge with Jon and look like him and the first girl, does the group amalgamate between the different girls, or does he spread it so the second girl twins with a third girl making hivemind pairs with Jon being the originator of this "infection"? Several different avenues my mind went when I read that comment.

This is great fun,really like the subtle memory shifts

Pretty much what Ziggu said, although in this story I'm going for a slightly more subdued, big sis teases younger sis ecchi sort of thing for Karyn (at least for now). And yeah, the girl is Akeno from Highschool DxD.

“Ara Ara” is a nonsense phrase used in a lot of anime, especially hentai, to basically mean “I’m going to molest you”.

Could someone explain the reference? I don't quite recognise it

Is that Akeno? Nice!

Sounds interesting, let's see if you can deliver on the potential of the premise :)

Always refreshing to start from the beginning in another character's POV! Keep it up!

This is really good and should be continued.

It'll be explained in the next chapter, I just wanted to keep it a mystery for a bit. I kind of like the stories where unexplained changes happen so I wanted to do something similar (but there is a reason!)

Why does becoming a Tsundere make Karyn Jon's sister? I'm not seeing the connection between those...

Aww thanks cork!