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@Christine L.
Wouldn't most of those issues be solved just by having a bigger version of the star map, or even just creative use of the existing one? Simply look at the spherical bite it's taken out of the milky way and measure it's curvature, then you can work out where the center of the sphere is (and thus the location of the World-Destroying aliens), and the radius of the sphere (and thus how long ago the aliens destroyed the universe, once you divide by the speed of light) to within some nice margin of error. Of course that doesn't solve the issue of actually getting back there and fixing it, which the stone may or may not actually be capable of; but anyway the point is the star map they already have can already solve a lot of problems if they decide on time travel.

Pretty good. I added a few bits of information.

In this case, it'd require a LOT of complicated wishes to pull off a 'time travel' solution. It'd require knowledge of both space and time, and knowing just when and where to time travel to, how to reach the alien civilization that set off the universe-destroying weapon in the first place, and all sorts of other things. I might add more to that story along those lines, along with exploring the viability of another solution Zoe mentions when she learns of the full scale of the impending disaster.

Holy fuck, man.
Sarah's story, man, it just gets me. This branch is phenomenal!

Hi thanks for the comments. I am starting to feel more inspired to write again. I've always felt nothingsp is the true genius and inspiration. I'm working on a new story at the moment so hopefully once ice settled on the plot I'll write it up. Magic ring was an attempt to set up a magic girl story but it didn't quite work for me.

I don't plan on stopping, but there have been a lot of change in my life right now and I have less time to write. I'll try to get the next episode ready soon, but I can't promise anything.

Don't stop please!

This is so emotional seriously I'm impressed.

It is so cathartic seeing Jen, normally in most stories undecisive and kinda self loathing, yell "you idiot!" to evil Luc- aherm i mean, mean goddess fox Michelle.

Ok I really wasn't expecting Iridiscent Sun Jon and Arcade Anomaly Jon to friggin form a multiversal council. Where's the fairy from tho?

Must say, really interesting story so far, I had seen your writing through your collaborations with Nothingsp but this is actually my first time seeing you take the lead of the story and I must say, quite pleased. You really have quite a creative approach to how transformations operate, If you could recommend any other recommendable works from your catalogue I'd be glad to look into them. Thus far I have read Iridiscent Sun, Iridiscent Stars, Arcade Anomaly, Adaptive Adoption, D.I.Y. Dullahan and up to this page of the Mist.

Hmm do we mayhaps have a "Main Villain" on this story now?

OH HELL YEAH, COUCH FRIGGIN' CURTIS!

Hmm Zoe being interested in Biff's Sphinx form is really ironic considering what happened in that one special Arcade hehe.

"Magic". Actually I guess its more interesting. And also Athena kind of wished for it with the slip. So at least she would know. I think you could chalk it up as part of the parameters of the wish Athena was forced to make. We never see the full parameters because she only notices it when its 70% burned. Everyone is magically forced not to realize who the exchange student is so there is precedent for it being able to do that. Also its fictionbranches, do you honestly expect people to be consistent on here.

Thanks ;)

The more things change...

Enjoying the this story so far. Thanks for sharing it

"The Wishing Stone" Real classy there.

Mind. Blown!!!!!
Now it all makes sense, fantastic chapter.

How come Zoe and Athena don't recognize Jen but the mother does?

I have a couple ideas. But I wrote it for people to write on.

A really great concept with a really great execution! Do you have any plans for it?

Good to see this continue. this is well thought out, the characterizations
are brilliant

SIgh.
This is great.
and you got me.

Thank you. I replaced brittle by fragile, but I'm not sure if it's better.

English fixes

"Even the glass on the windows were clean" should be "was clean"

"carved directly in an enormous block" would usually be phrased as "carved directly from a single enormous block"

"What do you think make this light?" I think should be "What do you think is making this light?" or "What do you think made this light?" not sure depends on what you want to convey.

"thing that make the magic." should be "thing that made the magic."

"I forgot you never played video games before" probably should be "you've never" or "you have never"

"he generally need the master" should be "needs"

"Had Karyn not called the wrong name at the beginning. She might have heard her in time, but she didn't." This is confusing, it's not clear who "she" refers to until you're half way through the second sentence. Maybe rephrase to use Emily/Jon's name in the first part. Maybe "Had Karyn not called the wrong name at the beginning Emily might have heard her in time, but she didn't." There's a couple other places where it's not obvious when you get to which person a pronoun is referring to, mainly because you most recently mention the other person by name then switch who you're talking about. It is easy to figure out but it's like a little speed bump as you read.

"already stepping in a giant spiderweb" should be "stepping into"

"thankfully brittle enough" not sure "brittle" is the right word for spider silk, it really only applies to things that don't give or stretch, like glass. I can't think of a suitable word to just drop in and replace it though, "weak" would fit but I don't think it would sound good... downplays the spider too much.

"He shouted as he ran" did you mean "She" it's the only time in this chapter you use a male pronoun for Emily/Jon.

"Are you mad?!" is a bit British English, and at least in my head Jon and Karyn are American and would more likely use "insane" rather than "mad". This one is fine as is, but as I said, Americans are more likely to use "insane", at least in current American English, it would be different 100 years ago.

thanks for adding

welcome back

Just discovered this branch. Holy shit, man, you're doing good work! Keep it up!

Yay! new episode!

A little of both. I still plan on continuing, but I don't think I'll be able to make a new chapter every day like I did before.

Are you planning on continuing this or have you run out of steam?

Honestly, I completely forgot that I was even writing this with Ice. Good to see you're curious about it all. It's always fun to see readers asking questions and theorizing.

You're right. Thank you for pointing it out

More a question than a correction "thickening mist was present on her screen" should this be "mist wasn't present"?

Honestly, having read this whole story from the start and up to now recently, I cannot put into words how special this feels to me. Change in general, the feeling of one's self drifting to something else in real life, is still a sobering thought. And to think that a Furry(non derogatory) 900+ pages collective effort that branched from a CYOA was able to express that and endear me so much to these characters is a first for me to say the least. Realising as a teen that I was interested in the prospect of feeling the experience of being of another anatomy was called a kink(little after discovering i had such interest in the first place) and not in the most socially endearing terms lead me to believe there could be little more to the idea. Over time it just became that, from idea to kink, I never scratched that itch I wanted from the start until i found this fascinating world. Thank you.

Caught another typo! "She reported her attention" I guess you meant "returned" rather than "reported"

English fix: "sort out her feeling for a long" should be "feelings"

Storylover, you need to post episodes with content in them. You can't just keep posting one sentence prompts.

Caught a typo! "relly" should be "really"

English was pretty good in this chapter, just one little thing

"was able to take in my inventory" sounds a bit off, grammatically it's correct but I would have gone with "take into my inventory" or "put into my inventory".

Thank you ! :)

Absolutely love this storyline, great work! Looking forward to more!

I'd like to join in on the praise. Really enjoying this branch.

Thank you! I'm trying to do the best I can and I'm glad you like it! :)

"Jon was the boy who wished this game into existence, and Emily is the main character of this game. It doesn't matter if one became the other, they are not considered the same as long as Emily is part of the game."

I guess that explains why the wish confirmation didn't work. ;)

Wonderful story by the way. You've really made something special here.

I even asked on the discord for the plurial of AI before posting, but I guess it would be better to just make it singular whenever I can, thanks.

(Also, I think you placed the "the" in the wrong place in your first correction)

"No. They have normal AIs." This one too. Consider either "No. They have the normal AI." or "No. They are normal AIs." I would say both of these are unambiguously correct.

English nitpick!

"Do they have advanced AIs?" the plural here depends on exactly what you mean, though I think in this case it should be singular since you're talking about the type of AI not an instance. Phrasing it as "Do they have advanced the AI?" makes it unambiguously not the plural.

"like them got advanced AIs, but" Same thing here, probably should be singular, consider adding "the".

"Advanced AI will be able to see the player" this one is also tricky, but should probably be plural, since you're talking about the instances of the AI... Maybe rephrasing as "An advanced AI would be able to see the player and interact with them" which removes the trickyness by changing the subject of the sentence to a single hypothetical instance.

(Another area this sort of trickyness shows up in English is code/codes for software source code. In my experience programmers/software engineers almost never pluralize "code" while scientist who program as part of their work in another field do, treating the word as referring to a program as a whole, where programmers view is that it's a collective noun. So basically don't take my version as the absolute truth above, other native speakers might disagree with me. Consider rephrasing to avoid the debatable instances if you don't want to think about it too much.)

product is both singular and plural. :P @bigbustgazer