No. David didn't get an age boost, he got regressed several years, they said that repeatedly. Seriously you've got to do a better job of reading and understanding previous chapters.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Funny how all these male characters change sex and it's always permanent, when the odds are supposed to be only 20% of changing, much less of a sex change, and even then it's supposed to be temporary at least half of the time. But deus ex machina I guess.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On Matt's turn
Another inconsistency. In an early episode, they said there were several other sphinxes just in Jon's state alone. It was I think in the first 10 pages of this story. I think they said there were 4. That would imply there are at least several hundred on Earth. Of course, you can use the stone to turn regular humans into more, and it probably wouldn't be hard to find willing volunteers. And of course there's no reason they shouldn't be able to just instantly wish an offspring into existence without actually gestating it inside her body.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Cutting it out of the statue's grip with tools? That's the best they can think of? They can still touch it even if they can't pry it loose, just wish it to be teleported one foot to the side.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Please change all occurrences of the word wonder to wander in this page. Also, did you know, rabbits actually hate carrots. They'll eat the green leafy part but not the root. Also why it is implausible there wouldn't be food for the rabbit around, they typically literally live off of grass or almost any other green plants. The rabbit wouldn't be searching for food and asking for it, and offering it carrots would be the last thing it'd want.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Yikes. We have a new writer too. Well, the good news Jon is you're going to solve your problem. The bad news is that it is going to take a certain amount of time and you'll have to do some things you really don't want to do. Though if she's creative Jon could cheat in the intent of this wish: instantly materialize an offspring into existence without birthing it with the help of the stone, materialize that offspring's offspring, and materialize that offspring's offspring, and then fix the common cold issue. But it also kind of ruins the story, because now it removes all the important uncertainty in the future of the story. We now know Jon is going to successfully get the stone back and any further quest is now irrelevant because it is predestined she'll get the rock back. What room is there left for an actual story from here on out then? We already know the outcome, Jon gets the stone back. Well, maybe some other writers will be able to fix that mess and keep it interesting.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Oh it was so HARD for her to FORGIVE him, when he could have easily TURNED HER IN for bullying Jon the day before and said "well if you put this on my permanent record, make sure to put that down in David's". And Matt wasn't even bullying her, just spreading information she wanted to keep secret that he didn't know she wanted to keep secret because he's dense. David should consider herself in Matt's debt, not the other way around.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Ugh. Chompy really needs to read the previous material better. "What have I done Karyn," .... Karyn was the one that did this, wishing for the common cold to be replaced with something else. "a minor change, much like Karyn and Sarah" ... they just said in the previous page that Sarah was more animal-like than Jon is, and earlier they said she had a full fox muzzle. I skipped some slow going tedious school chapters but I'll bet Chompy is the one that accidentally rewrote Sarah as a foxgirl instead of a rabbitgirl too. Your inattentiveness to detail is screwing things up Chompy, and the other writers are trying to oblige you on it but you ain't making it easy for them.
By Thisisnota Realname -
nothingsp also obviously trying to work with Chompy's weak reading comprehension skills, awkwardly retconning it here into it being telepathic communication instead of the cat actually talking, kind of sad that he had to do that, and it's painfully obvious that's what happened here. Bet BroomB wouldn't have made that mistake, he seems to be the most talented one here.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On David squares off with Matt...
I just looked back and confirmed that David was the one antagonizing Jon for being changed into a female, just out of the blue, bullying someone who is already hurting and kicking them when they're down for fun. Suddenly 100% of my sympathy for David has evaporated. And here I was irked by David's mother so much. On second thought it's great that she changed this way and is getting a taste of her own medicine, she deserved every bit of it, couldn't happen to a more deserving individual, wish he'd changed even more after the experimental treatment failed than just getting a 3rd tit, wish he'd changed into a freaking pokemon or something. Though perhaps she'll get a meaningful confrontation with Jon now and break down and apologize and redeem herself just the tiniest bit.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On David squares off with Matt...
2nd to last paragraph, from #29 "Jon and the Cat" or "Catfight?" depending on which title you use, Karyn says "'Kitten' indeed". She was mocking Jon for reacting the way she did and agreeing with the cat. Jon at no point said "kitten", all Jon said after the cat started talking was "Y-you can talk!?" and "A-are you...are you changed?". So there's no way to interpret this any way other than Karyn having directly heard the cat's comment calling Jon a kitten. It also said the cat was being sarcastic in retorting "No, you're just imagining it." when Jon said "Y-you can talk!?". So yes, the cat was talking out loud in English, not telepathically.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Oopsies. Chompy, you have made a mistake in comprehending 2 episodes back. Karyn was replying directly to the cat without Jon having repeated it. So Jon isn't supposed to be telepathically understanding the cat from some sort of telepathic cat communication ability and just hearing the words in her mind, the cat is actually supposed to be talking for real. It's the cat that's magic, not Jon. Oh well. If your miscomprehension becomes canonical because future episodes rely on Jon having this ability, I guess that's fine, but then the previous episode ought to be edited you know.
By Thisisnota Realname -
I'm definitely planning on taking it further. Stay tuned!
By
ThisIsNoOne -
On Jon grows a pair of breasts
Any plans to continue this story?
By LoverOfChaos -
Well, the issue here is that one doesn’t want to make a bad situation worse. They can work through this sure.. it would be hard but as a parent why take an even bigger risk to one’s child? That’s sort of what I was trying to go for, though I didn’t convey it too well.
By Chompy -
Welcome to the town of terrible parents, where every parent is terrible. David's mom's like "being a girl is good enough for me so it's good enough for you, I am offended that you even be upset about it, and I'd rather have a daughter, why should I care about what YOU want for your own body".
By Thisisnota Realname -
Thank you BroomB, for rescuing this story from the jaws of doom and the stone from the trash collector. Though someone at some point was sloppy, they said earlier that Sarah was a rabbit, not a fox, and now everyone's saying she's a fox and it breaks consistency. I don't know, I skipped some chapters and went straight to last page at 19046 from 19040 I think. At some point in there, someone must have forgotten what Sarah was already established to be and started saying she was a fox.
By Thisisnota Realname -
This nothingsp guy...... this is some bullcrap right here. Jon's mom: "No, you can't have even one day off from school, even though I don't have any clothes ready that fits you, you must go to school today immediately and you must go NAKED! Not even with SHOES or anything to protect your paws, just totally naked to walk with your bare paws on sharp rocks and gravel and soil with hookworms and who knows what. Because I don't love you, son, I don't love you at all or care about your well being or mental health, to the extent I will force you to humiliate and endanger yourself in public like this just to serve as a very sketchy deus ex machina to keep you away from your magic stone for a few hours, but I'll give some BS excuse to justify it without pointing out how little it means I care about my own son. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to rush home to ruffle through your belongings and throw some of it in the trash without your permission on trash day before the pickup and before you get home so that the thing I throw out in your room will be gone forever, and it will also be the one thing you need that would fix all this, and I'll actually throw a rock in the trash instead of tossing it outside because that's a totally normal thing people do, throwing rocks out in the trash." Yeah, the number of coincidences and utter BS this requires are totally believable. It was bad enough when she did the same thing without forcing Jon to go to school shoeless and naked in that other branch. It makes me want to make another branch stemming off where Jon kills his mom.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Loving this story so far. Hoping you're planning to continue?
By Thewayodaworld -
On Jon grows a pair of breasts
Such a great premise it started with, and such squandered potential now.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On Bro hug
Oh this is the first one I've read that is truly a great premise. A disgrace that it has been up for over 6 years and it has no upvotes. Here, have mine.
By Thisisnota Realname -
Oh bigbustgazer oh you have a thing to learn about the fairer sex. Nothing that goes wrong is ever their fault, but rather the nearest male is all to blame.
By Thisisnota Realname -
👀
By
TheScienceWizard -
Glad you like it! This is a fun story to work on!
By
ThisIsNoOne -
.....ringgggggg....
.....ringgggggg....
Would someone answer that phone? Because I called it!
By Thisisnota Realname -
Sigh. I knew it. Him too. And it's gonna get made permanent now, isn't it. I'm calling it now. I would bet money it will end up being permanent in both of them and somehow they'll screw up fixing things with the rock. If that's what happens, I swear I will add to the story somewhere to change fate and steer it away from the deviantart furaffinity route.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On Dumb Luck
You're kidding me. Now after submitting one myself, I keep running into these. If I had known how dreadfully abundant catgirl transformation stories were in fiction branches, I wouldn't have written one myself. I haven't even been seeking them out, they're finding ME, I click on a link saying the cure for the common cold, and bam, catgirl transformation story, because of course.
By Thisisnota Realname -
I think you mean that the table is set for five, not four. And there's four of them there - Jon, his two siblings, and his mom.
By
Anonymous51 -
This is great. thanks for writing
By thisguy10101 -
Damn, did the Chad meme already exist in 2002, or was the author of this one just decades ahead of his time?
By Thisisnota Realname -
On Asking the Wisest Man I Know
To quote Chidi Anagonye: "If we goin' out, I'm goin' out with a belly full of warm pretzels. Yummy, yum, yum."
By
Ms. Cork -
Oh I get it now. It shows that as the title from the previous page, which is different from the title that appears at the top of the page the story I write appears on. You should have really made that clear. Hopefully I can edit it now.
By Thisisnota Realname -
What am I supposed to put in the "link" field? I have the title of my branch in the title, I have the story in the body, and the "link" field is supposed to be what exactly? I don't see a FAQ page here. Is it a link to the previous page that it is branching from? It seems to already know what it is, since the submit page has a whole section entitled "Previous episode". I'm just going to try putting in the link to this page, https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/4715 and see what happens I guess, since it just cryptically tells me that I can't submit it with the link text empty.
By Thisisnota Realname -
I'm inclined to think the point if it isn't to try to find "SOME way around it". I don't think you're supposed to find some way to fix the problem, but rather, it's a setup of "what would you do with your remaining time if the world was going to end?" I think you're just supposed to accept it and write a story with it being inevitable. By the way, this is describing vacuum decay. That's a real thing that may actually happen. There are youtube videos about it too, like one from kurzgesagt and at least one from sciencephile the AI.
By Thisisnota Realname -
On The Destruction of the Universe
Author's Commentary: This branch was inspired by a conversation on FB's Discord, discussing the lack of background or characterization for Karyn. I do have a few TFs planned ahead, but expect a lot of character building and not a lot of the usual smut.
By
Matisguy -
I think the big problem is that as things are now, one can't really delete an episode without seriously affecting all episodes further down the branch, and as all episodes need an author account, you can't delete an account without also messing with all the episodes authored by the account, and thereby all the episodes afterward. IDK if there's a TOS somewhere that spells this all out, but hey, that's the spirit of the law anyway.
By
Matisguy -
God, I love seeing more of this story... Keep up the good work!
By
Matisguy -
Just FYI you should really implement the option to delete accounts unless you want some rando to come along and sue you under some data protection and control law.
By Alojz -
Or starts swapping with someone else.
By Marazh-no -
Fantastic addition. Thank you for picking this story back up for me :)
By
Ms. Cork -
Thank you for reviving a few of my old stories. I'm suddenly inspired to keep them going. Hopefully I'll have some time this week to write.
By
Ms. Cork -
On Sarah Gibson Gets to Use Her Wishing Stone Again
I wish I was Trevor :(
By whitepantyhose9x -
I like the perspective of cat-girl.
By Elron -
On Catnip
>His baby instincts kicked in and he subconsciously started to paw at the front of Biff's dress, instinctively wanting to feed from Biff's breasts
That is so cute! ◕‿◕
By whitepantyhose9x -
I love this episode and hope to see more continuation on it. I'm wondering how this wish plays out, with some situations where Jon admires her mom more and wants to be like her? A change of scenery basically? She's a good mother and gives him the okay to take a little time off school to help adjust and give him some breathing room. Pretty mucha beach episode where Jon is free to embrace his inner woman without judgment instead of all the glares at school? And a chance for Jon and mom to make more ill advised wishes. Idk, it's great and really hope it continues.
By
MaryPear -
On Zoe Interprets: Lost & Found - physical transformation done
This was a fun read! Great work :D
By Unity -
I loooove the oblivious changes!!! Keep it up! :D
By Unity -
Just wanted to say. Love your continuation of various dropped story lines. Thanks for contributing so often.
By funfun74 -
On More changes
Please add more than one sentence when submitting new chapters.
By
Mira -
1)I thought it was at the end of the day
2)This is doubling up so he still has what he had before.
3)The collar is what the other person is using to appear to have pants.
By Catprog -
On Multi breast shirt and collar with diamond tiped cross charm.
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