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Thanks for immediately picking up where my episode left off!

I was hoping this episode might reveal who the female director was and had once been, but perhaps that can come up later.

I hadn’t thought of diversity as a factor in the director’s mind. That, um, could set the stage for what happens next.

The director being irritated by the song “Tomorrow” cracked me up.

Three great things about Rachel:

a reminder that theater requires more than actors
first character mentioned who’s gone up and down a year

(probably a very common effect of the wish, but this episode is the first time that such little shifts have been explicitly pointed out)

first elderly character

I fixed a continuity error of mine: I originally made Connie tall, but neither Keun-hye nor Sophie were tall, so that made no sense, and I decided to have Keun-hye and Sophie have the same height and build.

A note on Keun-hye’s last name: Korean women keep their surnames after marriage. So she remains a Lee even after marrying Mr. Kim. However, her two daughters take their father’s surname.

I was considering writing an episode in which Jon said no, but this is even better!

Happy to see this branch resurrected after 16 months!

Having Tiffany belong to an unfamiliar family rather than having her join the family of an established character is a nice touch.

For reasons I don't really understand this is one of my favourite branches.

Author’s Note
Karyn at this point is still overall female in appearance (present hyper-dongs excepted) just super-jacked. Of course she still has her stone-imposed “big boobs and long blonde hair”.

But I might have a way to have some more fun with this later. ;-)

I love this storyline. Always happy to see it added to.

My spelling of John is all over the place, which is the canon one?

Thanks a lot. Glad to hear you're enjoying it.

This series is great, I absolutely love it. Probably best writing especially concerning their relationship I have read in a long long while. I am eagerly looking forward to the continuation.

I'm liking a lot. I think it's about time for Biff and Karyn meeting each other ◕‿◕ It will be pretty interesting when Biff realises that "his" ex husband is a girl that thinks she's a man.

Great idea! Can't wait to read more. Love how John will be at the mercy of David!

Glad you are back :) Happy new year.

Just a random side note, Zoe was supposed to mention noticing that Karyn was super into Jon's boobs at dinner... but I wrote the thing realised I hadn't included that and couldn't find a good way to insert it without disrupting the flow. It wasn't super important, just sort of Zoe teasing Jon.

Maybe at some point she'll have a chance to ask Karyn about that directly. That seems more interesting anyway, though I have no idea when a conversation between Zoe and Karyn might happen before the wish ends. Karyn's gotten off lightly when it comes to the consequences of the time limited wishes and some awkward conversations would be fitting.

Their is very much a reason why it works for the sister but not for Mephi or Karen.

Happy there is more to this story line!

Thanks. I admit I wasn't sure, felt like the pacing is too fast in some areas here. There is a bit more to it but this is from what Terry saw, and how a demon terrified him... not just that of course, but made him feel negative about himself.

@Mary
If ya got a good idea and are in the mood, always feel free to write a continuation of my stuff! It means way more to me than just upvotes or anything like that.

Ok this adds a much appreciated depth to Terry's character, Also, could the motive of this flashback be Terry turning into a demon himself and being more vulnerable to dark emotions?

Hey, I might try and add to this soon if you guys don't mind! Love your work! My idea is to have Jon wish that his new husband, mother, Karyn, and Zoe know he really was Jon and not Sue, either from some imagined accident or intentionally. I think it adds to the humiliation if people know Jon isn't a horny milf, but can't help but act like one. And it gives him some directive as his family might try and help them out but judge him for being so lewd. I think this would establish the husband as the antagonist, who has the stone, who isn't willing to give up his amazing life and wonderfully, sexy wife. I think Karyn should be the friend who wants to help, mom be the type of person who secretly enjoys it since she has a new friend, and Zoe who just finds it hilarious after the full effects kick in. What do yall think?

16yrs old, 6'6" and 300lbs of muscle. Is Mikey fucking Jotaro Joestar?

Comments have only existed for like a year IIRC, two at the most.

Thanks. Yes Terry is a bit cliche, but what isn't these days ;)

It is nice seeing you writing again, this must likely be what you told me you were working on. I must say, even though Terry can be a bit on the cliché type on his disdain for the other world, you have really outdone yourself in the writing department. There's a really nice sense of flow that really enhances the intricancies of this new setting as they're shown off. I also see a lot of focus on a duality between magic and electricity, as each the main element of each world. In short, I'm really looking forward to what is to come from this new plotline, I'll be on the lookout for any new chapters.

Absolutely where I was going—just taking my time getting there. :)

The more Karyn-bulge the better. Love it. If you have a different vision keep going. :)

thanks :) Never left, was always lurking

Welcome back to the site

Awesome! What did you enjoy about it in particular?

BG has been one of my favorite stories on FB. I do hope you decide to continue it. Thanks.

Keep the good work, continue writing •ᴗ•

I did mention that Jon's boobs are noticeably bigger than softballs right after the wish that brought them into existence, though I guess I've never given context for how big that looks on Jon. The intent is that yes they are notably large, though not out of proportion. That is they look bigger than Karyn's in addition to actually being bigger.

The main thing hiding Karyn's boobs is intended to be how she carries herself and her sweater obviously, my intention was that the sweater is very long, almost covering down to where a short miniskirt would end, and it's all fairly loose so if she hunched slightly it would very effectively hide her entire upper body's shape.

Ignoring clothes sizing, a lot of being big is about proportion. Karyn's body being curvier then Sarah's means that while she's bigger her breasts are more in proportion to the rest of her body and they won't stand out as much. It makes sense she's happy with how they look. How big is Jim? I don't know if that's been said in most of these episodes.

It's intentional, Bra size systems vary around the English speaking world and aren't exactly precise in any place they're used, a cup size doesn't actually tell you much. I'd rather just compare to some real world object, or just describe the character's experience.

Not even women really know what bra sizes mean, something like 60 to 80 percent of women are wearing the wrong size depending on which bra manufacturer's study you believe. Part of this is that people tend to think DD means massive melons, but it doesn't really.

Basically I at one point read up on bra sizes, found it's a stupid rabbit hole and using realistic sizes would give a lot of readers the wrong impression and I don't want to go with reader expectations and be wrong, so I just avoid mentioning bra sizes. I could justify it by the characters being wrong, but I prefer to avoid it.

So to Jon his boobs are massive and they are fairly large, but they feel a lot bigger to him, at least in terms of the weight and movement. Obviously he can see their actual size in the mirror and by feeling them in his hand, though they are substantially more than a handful, but his subjective experience of them is where I want to focus, that and Karyn's adaptation to being attracted to boobs, plus them transitioning from a platonic to a romantic and physical relationship.

I don't plan to write a shopping scene during the week, since Jon already owns bras and I'd expect him to be resistant to the idea.

I've noticed that the story avoids bra sizes. Is this intentionally vague or is it being saved for an episode where they go shopping?

This has been an interesting and nicely detailed story. I'd love to see where this goes. Please keep writing.

I’m glad someone is bringing this story back

Not sure how intentional it was, but it seems to me the mental command of "you need to tell me what happens today. Everything." might be relevant...

On a side note, it had been a long time since I read the root of the story... re-read it and noticed there was a line about Jon not really being able to tell that Karyn's boobs had changed. So we got this chapter where Karyn has in fact been hiding how curvy she is. The idea is that, the root mentions them coming back from spring break, so Karyn filled out a fair bit over summer, hid under her sweater constantly, continued to fill out over the past several months up to spring break.

Oh hey, thanks for adding!

God, why do I find this so hot? I want to be Morgana…

I'm liking this story lot. Curious to how will Biff encounter with Karyn will play out.

Ok, so the busyness has piled up way higher than I anticipated. I will get to this though!

I enjoyed all the pantyhose mentions XD

urgh yeah I got the names wrong initially here and had to edit it.. clearly missed some entries.

There were some wrong names in there, Lucy instead of Samantha... I'm not sure what was going on in the hand holding part at all. Also who is Jennifer?

This is one of my favourite old branches.

I really like this branch, it's the only one I can think of that made me want Jon to end up in a romantic relationship with someone other than Karyn!

I'm enjoying Steve's development as Abigail and I'm rooting for him to become a better person and end up with Jon.

I'm also curious about who has Karyn's name.

Also the branch gimmick is really cool and has so many places it can go.

Man, I'm really liking this story so freaking bad. I just loved the thing, of Jon "father" being actually a girl. If I may, here are some suggestions (please, don't feel compel to add them though, they are just ideas, maybe some of them aren't even that good).

More scenes describing the character clothing, especially Jon? Maybe he complaining about wearing tights? XD
Until this moment Jon hasn't been, like, physically confronted with his utter helplessness, like, a scene showing him not wanting to do something and just being FORCED, like physically forced into doing it. Maybe he throwing a tantrum or something and being spanked or so?
Maybe describing Biff day at work as well? He struggling with his new found womanhood?
When you described Karyn it would have been interesting to have mentioned that her body was hairy, since she doesn't shave her legs since she believes she is a man. Maybe a scene of her shaving her face (despite the fact that she will never have a beard, obviously)?
Also, maybe in the same way Jon is being forced into being a little girl, maybe some character should be put into the role of a dog or cat? Although, I don't know what character would that be? Like his father, or mother, or, I don't know, maybe his little sister (although this last one might be a little controversial... although it would have been so interesting). Maybe Jon "father" could decide to go there and adopt a cat or dog and then Jon realises the pet is one of his family members. And, much like him, every time that person trapped in the role of an animal speaks no one can't understand anything, but Jon and Biff can. Maybe the person is like "I have been here on this dog kennel for the last 2 weeks, and no one could understand me, I was going crazy!!!"