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Oh wow, didn’t even spot that one. The joys of writing on a phone with an overeager autocorrect

I'm pretty new with writing those kind of story on public sites so i'm open to any help or suggestions that could help the writing. Ideas come and go with me so i try to keep the scenarios open ended so others may write their own spin for things.

I hope you don’t change ‘A warm feeling shit through her’ because that is very funny lmao

Curious to see what will happen after they undress. Will they return to normal or stay trapped in their new personas? If they return to normal, they will be aware of the experience and afraid but also excited to try on new clothes? So much potential here. Loving it.

Was wondering if someone would ever update this branch

Nice to see this one being updated

Very interesting turn, both ‘staff’ & ‘guests’ might be just a constantly rotated influx of people. Looking forward to how this goes :-).

Have a great weekend!
Sje

Great addition, can’t wait to see where you take this

Very interesting. I look forward to seeing where this goes

I am incredibly curious to see how Anna and this new Mikey interact with one another. Is she older than Anna? Everyone's ages seem to still be in flux. I wonder how this will influence how those changes settle in.

Another delicious storyline that you've created here. Already excited to see how far this one will go. Lot's of potential here and it gets even better since the Linda/Zoe taboo pairing is seldom explored. Maybe while they are adjusting themselves before doing it like rabbits we can see more of the cast checking in this hotel too. Thanks fkr writing

Efficiency is not just with the hotel accommodations I see, but even with the forces at work on Zoey with Linda seems to be getting her ‘turn’ next lol.

Heya, Mr J! Intrigued on how this path will progress. Happy belated New Years to you and hope all has been well with ya :-).

Take care & ttys,
Sje

You have my interest

Very kind. But I just spent years off and on trimming it down from novel-length...

Fucking brilliant. Can't wait to see more.

Good to see your writing again

not going to lie, by title, i expected a fusion device, the kind that goes 'boom'

@Gooose hopefully you can return to this branch and some of the older ones too

I was worried for a bit that the author may have left this project. Glad to see a new addition :)

This needs to be made into a novel, clearly a fantastic piece of writing.

Omg! I saw you had a chapter on the discord but didn’t realize it was for Royal Mistake until now! Great work!!!

This branch is apparently being revived, so I asked myself "Why not?"

Congratulations, you played yourself. :P

I must say, going into this story I didn't expect it to be so intrigueing. Looking forward to what comes next, even if logic and expectations would suggest that Carly will likely lose the challenge one way or another and become a true mannequin in the end. Still, we shall see if that proves to be true.

Awesome!!!

All Rise for the Return of Her Majesty

I really love this branch, it's one of my very favourites. I really like Steve/Abigail's slow character development. The entire hat of names gimmick is really neat too.

I finally had some time off and wanted to get back to this. Ended up doing something a little more chill after last chapter, but I do wanna keep escalating things for Jon and his mom moving forward

I wonder how the three Sarahs will react when they meet eachother. Will they act "normal", with only a nagging feeling that something's wrong? Will they freak out after seeing clones of themselves, followed by a concerning feeling that "it's how it's always been"? Will they keep their identical names or will two of them change after some time? Maybe just stick to using nicknames to tell them apart?

So many questions, so little to go off of for now!

Damn, I wish this was continued.

I am the original author, although I lost my original account a long time back. Nevertheless, I've collected all the segments together with edits to mesh more smoothly. I've changed the character names and finished the story.

It is now an E-Book titled "Shrink Racked"
by Jaime Sparkz

The book is published and available for FREE and can be found at https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/1090540
Or you can google for it.

I went this route to obtain a public copyright and ISBN. I have no intention of making money off of it, I just wanted to try to prevent others from ripping it off and selling it as their own, I've had that happen before.

I hope you enjoy it!

I have another E-book in the works. It could be awhile but it's looking to be about twice the size of this one. "Smashwords" has merged with another bigger service and I've yet to figure out if I can do FREE publishing through the merged entity.

Later!

There's a degree of repetition in this which leads me to believe you copied and pasted a lot of the earlier chapters, try not to do this in future it looks bad, other than that, an interesting premise

@Gooose do their powers work on each other?

Okay. You will need a translator to know what they're saying. I have removed the exact translation, but here's a summary. The two men realize that they have somehow lost contact with their agent, and they're not sure what's going on and what to do. At this point, they seem to know less about what's going on than the readers do. There's also Easter eggs for those who actually DO translate the text, and a reference to a meme that might be lost in translation.

tl;dr you don't have to know/translate Russian to get this episode. We aren't meant to know the evil scheme and Cork just hid a lot of Easter Eggs instead.

Yes, you know something's up when a bunch of boys recognize a Street Fighter II cabinet one minute but the next don't remember a prominent character from that game and instead get confused with a character from Taming of the Shrew. :) That conversation was hilarious, by the way.

You should check your opening quotes, a lot of them are combining with the character that comes next. Random accent marks on letters that should be an opening quote followed by the letter makes it weird to read.

This is a brilliant episode, in writing and direction.

The name Twyla was chosen in honor of Twyla Tharp, one of the most respected and accomplished dancers and choreographers of the 20th century.

I liked it until her name was Twyla. No it isn't. No one is that mean to their kids. Name reads like it's said with a speech impediment. (just wait, it's the authors real name and I am going to look like a jerk)

I love the work you're putting into this one. This set-up can go several very fun directions, and I can't wait to see where you're taking it. Please continue!

Not sure if this one is worth trying again. I didn’t like my last attempt but thought I’d give it another go, probably no appetite for a side story with Michelle and Trevor but thought it was worth a try

Technically (unless the terms are different in the US compared to Australia) the opening statements from the defence attorney sound like they're actually coming from a prosecutor. The defence attorney would represent the defendant who in this case is self representing.

That said... I look forward to reading the next few chapters as I like where this is going!

Haha very good pickup! I thought it was just displaying 2 comments for me, not everyone else!

Nice. So basically some of them have superpowers now

@buyerinternet Seems like Susan isn't the only being that got duplicated. :P

What an abstract and fun idea. I love it!

What an abstract and fun idea. I love it!

That was unexpected! Funny, though.