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Maybe I should stop having them both use the word “then” so much. I want them to sound like different people after all, and not just both following scripts of the same writer. Probably I should reread the original introduction chapter to see how they talk and if there is anything distinguishing them from each other.

She’s the one unworthy of friendship. If he had done this to her, he wouldn’t have shone the stone to her at all in the first place, he would just have wished for her body to have been changed and she’d not only not know he was the cause, she’d never have known she wasn’t always that way. If she’s that toxic who needs a friendship with her.

Glad you're enjoying. Hoping to keep pumping these out a bit more quickly than I have been.

Dude... I am drooling. Soooo good!

“the most intense”, sounds like it will simply be instantly fatal. This could easily turn into a horror story despite its original intent.

Did it maybe mean to say “that when the conditions of the following wish are satisfied ”? I feel like an “are satisfied” was meant to be in there or else the sentence doesn’t make sense.

Unless of course we specify Madison is Jon’s mother’s maiden name and last name of his grandfather. Then it could technically be the Madison house.

Even so, no one’s reading the thing I put so much time into, which I posted 2 hours earlier. I guess they don’t want to spend the time investment to read all the stuff before it.

Sometimes, man, ya just gotta roll with the glorious stupidity.

I just realized a potential dilemma for Jon. I'm not sure how it could be put into the storyline, but if Jon is fully-encased in latex, then he can't use the stone. Because he has to be able to touch the stone to use it. Of course, it wouldn't be a problem if he could somehow take the latex off, but what if he can't, for some reason?

@Thisisnota_Realname: Cool interpretation. If that's how you want to write the story, then you can add that chapter. There's a million different ways any story can go, which is part of what's so great about this format. Not every story has to follow strict rules, and sometimes they're written with multiple possible interpretations on purpose, to allow for more ideas. As long as the reader can follow what's going on, it's still fun. Heck, if you see something that you think it inconsistent, you can even add a chapter that plays up that inconsistency. See where it takes you.

But most of all, remember: this is a place for fun writing, nobody's getting a Pulitzer or a Hugo out of this website. Take it easy, try not to be so negative, and show your fellow writers some support. and you'll be amazed at how much your experience here improves :)

pretty sure this was written by a prepubescent girl

But if someone else comes along and wishes on the stone, their wish almost certainly will not apply to either Jon or Karyn. So it won’t affect them both since it won’t affect either one of them. Jon also wished for any wish affecting one if them to affect the other. That is still not asking for it to be the same effect. So for instance if he wished to go to Cornell, she would still not be forced to go to Cornell, she would merely be affected by his departure for Cornell, which she would be anyway. I don’t know but maybe you ought to reword this a bit.

this is so stupid I don’t have any idea how to continue the story, but still, I couldn’t resist.

#fundamentallymissingthepoint

You get notified for comments on your own writing, but not comments on other's writing. I just have a habit of keeping an eye on the "Recent Comments" page to see new comments/replies as they're posted.

Are you able to monitor others’ comments on others’ writing or is it a coincidence you seem to keep leaving comments within minutes of me leaving comments of my own?

A pity this seems to be getting less attention than most of the other things I’ve been writing.

You also use the Madison name here. You only corrected the first one. It’s a pity since Madison is a much better name than Gibson, but they already called him Gibson earlier. It’s like the stone itself, once specified in a branch, that is the way it is, and the stuff that is written in the future stemming from that branch must conform to it and can’t go back on what was written earlier in that branch.

Ok. So what. If I encounter such a branch and I add a chapter to it, I will use the name that was established in direct descendant branches, no matter what the name is. It doesn’t seem hard to me. It’s like the stone itself, once specified in a branch, that is the way it is, and the stuff that is written in the future stemming from that branch must conform to it and can’t go back on what was written earlier in that branch.

I suspected as much. But it keeps telling me I have 7 new notifications so even though they appear to be from the site itself, I was holding out hope.

Aw stop it, I'm blushing 😅

It still says his last name is Madison in this one. It wasn’t just the previous page.

When chronologically is this taking place? Because the first few pages are from 2000. This thing has apparently existed for so long, that it makes a difference contextualizing it. Like I don’t know if phone booths still even exist in 2022 for instance.

The big danger would be if he sees a woman he finds attractive despite something horribly and visibly wrong with her and therefore her most eye catching attribute was not what he found attractive about her.

It seems like with his condition now, he’ll eventually simply be transformed into an extremely attractive woman, as his body parts get replaced one at a time by the best parts of every woman he sees. Possibly. Is it possible for a woman’s most eye catching feature to be her genitals? There’s a possible discrepancy between eye catching and attractive but the precondition is that Jon finds her attractive so he shouldn’t be changed by looking at her at all if she was eye catching in the freakish sense and not the attractive sense.

The Return of the King

Not much happens in the two additions tbh, mostly setting the scene for things happening 🙃

Oh cool! Great add, I'll have to read through it more thoroughly and follow up!

I've written this in first person, past tense, as Jon/Allison just because I personally find that kind of writing easiest to get immersed to. I don't mind if any follow up stories are written differently - whatever works for you!

Also, I was hoping to word Ryder's wishes quite carefully to make sure that their outcome isn't Jon/Allison loosing her trepidation of the situation or just becoming blindly obedient to his whims. Hopefully there's still plenty of scope for internal conflict with the effects of the wish!

It seemed to me that the previous page was a pretty good standalone story but not much of a setup for additions at the end. So here goes a page just to facilitate that.

Another interesting concept. If I weren't busy with other projects of my own I might adopt this branch to develop.

2 possible follow up plots come to mind for this one, to anyone reading this if I never get around to writing them myself. One is a flashback to the event 6 months earlier, possibly it was all natural or possibly they were using some new drug or quack aphrodisiac. The other is, they decide to link 2 other people like themselves so as to have them as lovers, unable to agree with each other as to whether to have a single male or female lover they decide it would be better anyway to have a linked pair like themselves. fter all it also seems to me that “cheating” on each other would have no meaning since they both would be experiencing it and participating in the act.

Believe me, man, I know; most of the elbow grease that went into that episode was devoted to keeping it feeling grounded and connected to the real world instead of the obvious supernatural shenanigans that would have to accompany an origin story for the Stone. I actually did a shitton of Research on Incan history and culture specifically because of that; I figured the best way to keep things tied to the believable was to have the events of the episode more or less mirror what actually historically happened in the closing years of the Incan Empire's downfall. Actually, I'm honestly super happy with how that particular episode turned out, NGL. The problem was that I couldn't really find the inspiration to follow it up, y'know? I was going to write out the shenanigans Jon's grandpa got up to in the days immediately following the stone's discovery, but anything I came up just kinda felt like the same old same old for FB, and on top of that I was working under the restriction that everything had to turn out more less the way Jon remembered it in the end. FB kinda gets you in this trap where all you think about are individual episodes and not the whole story arc, y'know? With obviously myopic results. Makes it doubly hard to write these Past-Story things since you kinda have to have it all planned out before you even begin writing.

But whatever. Here's the episode I was talking about in question, if you're interested.
https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/3486539

Well that would work for the stone itself, but the difference is, it is inevitable that the extraordinary stone would have an extraordinary origin story. There is no surprise factor there and therefore no interesting new information in that. It’s like a good joke, it needs to have something very unexpected as its punchline. So ironically the better choice than the origin story of the stone, which everyone already knows must be extraordinary, is an unexpected origin story of Jon and Karyn’s friendship unexpectedly turning out to be extraordinary, you see? Of course it needs to not cross the line from unexpected to needlessly bizarre and implausible or else it just won’t be a story anyone can swallow and take seriously and that could be a difficult demarcation here.

The "Link" field is the text that will be shown in any links to that episode. For example, if an episode ends with "What does Jon do next?", and you're writing a followup episode, you might want the link on the existing episode to say "Jon gets on the bus", but then you might want the actual Title, displayed in large text at the top of your episode, to say "Jon's Bus Adventure".

Just a bit of extra customization for users who want it. You're free to use identical text for both the Link and Title if you choose.

At this time there are no plans to support a wiki. We did actually have one in the early days of FB 3.0, back in ~2017, but it was quickly forgotten about, and got nuked when I had to migrate the server to a new host. Since then, it hasn't felt worth my time to stand up another wiki, given the lack of apparent interest the last time I did so.

@Thisisnota_Realname - It doesn't take very much to be respectful of your fellow writers, but that little bit of effort improves everyone's experience on this website. Let's all try and support one another, without bringing anyone down unnecessarily, yeah?

Up next- Holy shit you guys!!

Completely skipped over the 2010s between chapters on this one. But now it has headway on an actual story after all that time.

Nope. I have just this one account. That would be so much work for fake internet points that I know would mean nothing since they came from me.

To the people who have liked it though I do thank you. It really does mean a lot that you like what I'm doing and it does inspire me to write more.

Oh I see what’s going on now. You’re simply upvoting your own stories with multiple alt accounts. 6 upvotes with only 96 views lol, sure. I thought it was weird when I looked at recent active writers and one had massive amounts of upvotes more than all the others combined. A pity they don’t list who upvotes things in a list. Well I don’t care, whatever gets you through the day.

What kind of a girl’s name is Jonnie

Actually of all the branches from “Karyn borrows”, Changing Mario and Luigi to be crossdressers may have been the literal only one that was harmless and therefore not a betrayal of his trust in her so it’s kind of ironic he’s overreacting like this. But I have a feeling she’s going to actually betray his trust from here on.

Well if there’s one thing all the story branches on this page prove, it’s that he was very wrong to think she was trustworthy after all.

oh my god of course a rick and morty fanfic, yuck. And based on a specific episode no less. I’m reminded of when I was in grade school art class and all the other kids would just produce tracings of popular cartoon characters instead of creating something themselves, and in 1989 when asked to produce creative writing, half the class just replicated the first scene of the batman movie that came out that year. “you tell your friends about me”

I have a plan for M2F but it's coming later in the story.

Here's hoping Jon and Biff become hot girls too LOL

I'm just trying to point out that the way Jon dealt with the situation is completely out of character for him. Is he now going to make more wishes like that, to other people, some of which have done worse, like actually committing murder? If you want to go down that road, I'm not going to stop you (well, actually I can't, since I have no control over other people's episodes), but don't expect me to just go along with it, unless there's a good explanation for why Jon is suddenly acting that way.

The dude literally took a girl off the street, and had her assault her friend, that is violence first of all. And yes the shovel was her only means to knock him out. She’s a teenaged girl. She can’t knock out a guy by punching him. Who do you think she is, Chun Li? And what does he do with his persuasion power? He forces her to have an incestuous threesome with himself and her own mother. That’s pretty fucked up. That proves he doesn’t give a shit about other people. Can you imagine being forced to have sex with one of YOUR parents? You think Jon should give him the benefit of the doubt after that? To just say “I’ll trust him to be alone in a room with my best friend and her mom, now that he can no longer speak I’m sure he’ll live and let live ”? No sir it would have been completely reasonable for Jon to have killed him right there, Cecil is lucky he only got maimed.