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And thus the world changed and became as it is right now, a world in which women can vote but are exempt from the draft, where women always get custody in a divorce, where the only reproductive choice a man has is the choice between paying child support or going to jail while women get endless choices, where men are forced to pay child support for children that aren’t even theirs, a world where if a woman drugs a man and rapes him while he’s unconscious the courts will still side with her and make him pay child support if she chooses to have his child, a world where domestic violence against men is not taken seriously and all domestic violence shelters accept in only women, where if a man calls the police and tells them he is being attacked by a woman, they will come by and arrest him, while she gets free legal assistance from feminist organizations, and a world where it’s always women and children first and men are expected to sacrifice themselves, and a world where women are exempt from statutory rape laws, a world where a woman can destroy a man’s whole future with one wild accusation with no evidence, where all scholarships that are available to one sex and not the other, are available only to women, where all of STEM industries give preferential hiring to women, and yet after all this, women control the public narrative and have everyone convinced they are oppressed and that men are the privileged ones.

Thanks a lot Karyn, such a good friend of Jon’s you turned out to be.

Catmageddon. I thought about calling it that in the title but decided not to since the plot was a little serious and not entirely inane.

Big fan of this branch, looking forward to more

I miss the story so much :( If possible don't abandon it, it could go through so many paths, so many things could be explored :)

Sometimes you just have to eat perfectly cooked faces and hands together Mary, for the sake of a friendship.

Well thanks Noy2222 for fixing the misspelled Sarahs and changing carful into careful and two of the three “were”s spelled “where”, but note you still missed one in the first paragraph.

Yeah, because becoming a girl is a horrible fate.

Caaaarl!

so I’ve kind of set it up with a situation like the video “Llamas With Hats” where there’s the incredibly evil llama who’s for some reason friends with the sensible llama and does terrible things to others, just never to his friend. Jon and Karyn now find themselves in the eye of the hurricane with unique special status, but no one else is safe.

not buying the premise that she’d want to do that to him given the premise she’s not a nasty woman after all

Maybe one day. Feel free to add or suggest an idea. Just been writing elsewhere

Ah but it's a paradox. The fact that he wished for that proved that he was responsible and therefore worthy of it, while if the stone found someone else to use it, they would be less worthy than Jon.

Well this is probably the most underrated thing on fictionbranches. 25 views after 5 years and it was better than well over 90% of the things on here.....

I love how the hole Allison is in just keeps getting deeper and deeper. I'm really curious to see how this all plays out. Thanks for writing these chapters.

Well, obviously Allison as a beautiful and sexy girl. And pregnant. And that she is powerless to escape her situation.

based on the title, I was expecting a world where time worked differently, like maybe a “Groundhog Day” world so everyone literally had no concept of such a thing as “tomorrow” even existing

Maybe I should stop having them both use the word “then” so much. I want them to sound like different people after all, and not just both following scripts of the same writer. Probably I should reread the original introduction chapter to see how they talk and if there is anything distinguishing them from each other.

She’s the one unworthy of friendship. If he had done this to her, he wouldn’t have shone the stone to her at all in the first place, he would just have wished for her body to have been changed and she’d not only not know he was the cause, she’d never have known she wasn’t always that way. If she’s that toxic who needs a friendship with her.

Glad you're enjoying. Hoping to keep pumping these out a bit more quickly than I have been.

Dude... I am drooling. Soooo good!

“the most intense”, sounds like it will simply be instantly fatal. This could easily turn into a horror story despite its original intent.

Did it maybe mean to say “that when the conditions of the following wish are satisfied ”? I feel like an “are satisfied” was meant to be in there or else the sentence doesn’t make sense.

Unless of course we specify Madison is Jon’s mother’s maiden name and last name of his grandfather. Then it could technically be the Madison house.

Even so, no one’s reading the thing I put so much time into, which I posted 2 hours earlier. I guess they don’t want to spend the time investment to read all the stuff before it.

Sometimes, man, ya just gotta roll with the glorious stupidity.

I just realized a potential dilemma for Jon. I'm not sure how it could be put into the storyline, but if Jon is fully-encased in latex, then he can't use the stone. Because he has to be able to touch the stone to use it. Of course, it wouldn't be a problem if he could somehow take the latex off, but what if he can't, for some reason?

@Thisisnota_Realname: Cool interpretation. If that's how you want to write the story, then you can add that chapter. There's a million different ways any story can go, which is part of what's so great about this format. Not every story has to follow strict rules, and sometimes they're written with multiple possible interpretations on purpose, to allow for more ideas. As long as the reader can follow what's going on, it's still fun. Heck, if you see something that you think it inconsistent, you can even add a chapter that plays up that inconsistency. See where it takes you.

But most of all, remember: this is a place for fun writing, nobody's getting a Pulitzer or a Hugo out of this website. Take it easy, try not to be so negative, and show your fellow writers some support. and you'll be amazed at how much your experience here improves :)

pretty sure this was written by a prepubescent girl

But if someone else comes along and wishes on the stone, their wish almost certainly will not apply to either Jon or Karyn. So it won’t affect them both since it won’t affect either one of them. Jon also wished for any wish affecting one if them to affect the other. That is still not asking for it to be the same effect. So for instance if he wished to go to Cornell, she would still not be forced to go to Cornell, she would merely be affected by his departure for Cornell, which she would be anyway. I don’t know but maybe you ought to reword this a bit.

this is so stupid I don’t have any idea how to continue the story, but still, I couldn’t resist.

#fundamentallymissingthepoint

You get notified for comments on your own writing, but not comments on other's writing. I just have a habit of keeping an eye on the "Recent Comments" page to see new comments/replies as they're posted.

Are you able to monitor others’ comments on others’ writing or is it a coincidence you seem to keep leaving comments within minutes of me leaving comments of my own?

A pity this seems to be getting less attention than most of the other things I’ve been writing.

You also use the Madison name here. You only corrected the first one. It’s a pity since Madison is a much better name than Gibson, but they already called him Gibson earlier. It’s like the stone itself, once specified in a branch, that is the way it is, and the stuff that is written in the future stemming from that branch must conform to it and can’t go back on what was written earlier in that branch.

Ok. So what. If I encounter such a branch and I add a chapter to it, I will use the name that was established in direct descendant branches, no matter what the name is. It doesn’t seem hard to me. It’s like the stone itself, once specified in a branch, that is the way it is, and the stuff that is written in the future stemming from that branch must conform to it and can’t go back on what was written earlier in that branch.

I suspected as much. But it keeps telling me I have 7 new notifications so even though they appear to be from the site itself, I was holding out hope.

Aw stop it, I'm blushing 😅

It still says his last name is Madison in this one. It wasn’t just the previous page.

When chronologically is this taking place? Because the first few pages are from 2000. This thing has apparently existed for so long, that it makes a difference contextualizing it. Like I don’t know if phone booths still even exist in 2022 for instance.

The big danger would be if he sees a woman he finds attractive despite something horribly and visibly wrong with her and therefore her most eye catching attribute was not what he found attractive about her.

It seems like with his condition now, he’ll eventually simply be transformed into an extremely attractive woman, as his body parts get replaced one at a time by the best parts of every woman he sees. Possibly. Is it possible for a woman’s most eye catching feature to be her genitals? There’s a possible discrepancy between eye catching and attractive but the precondition is that Jon finds her attractive so he shouldn’t be changed by looking at her at all if she was eye catching in the freakish sense and not the attractive sense.

The Return of the King

Not much happens in the two additions tbh, mostly setting the scene for things happening 🙃

Oh cool! Great add, I'll have to read through it more thoroughly and follow up!

I've written this in first person, past tense, as Jon/Allison just because I personally find that kind of writing easiest to get immersed to. I don't mind if any follow up stories are written differently - whatever works for you!

Also, I was hoping to word Ryder's wishes quite carefully to make sure that their outcome isn't Jon/Allison loosing her trepidation of the situation or just becoming blindly obedient to his whims. Hopefully there's still plenty of scope for internal conflict with the effects of the wish!

It seemed to me that the previous page was a pretty good standalone story but not much of a setup for additions at the end. So here goes a page just to facilitate that.

Another interesting concept. If I weren't busy with other projects of my own I might adopt this branch to develop.

2 possible follow up plots come to mind for this one, to anyone reading this if I never get around to writing them myself. One is a flashback to the event 6 months earlier, possibly it was all natural or possibly they were using some new drug or quack aphrodisiac. The other is, they decide to link 2 other people like themselves so as to have them as lovers, unable to agree with each other as to whether to have a single male or female lover they decide it would be better anyway to have a linked pair like themselves. fter all it also seems to me that “cheating” on each other would have no meaning since they both would be experiencing it and participating in the act.

Believe me, man, I know; most of the elbow grease that went into that episode was devoted to keeping it feeling grounded and connected to the real world instead of the obvious supernatural shenanigans that would have to accompany an origin story for the Stone. I actually did a shitton of Research on Incan history and culture specifically because of that; I figured the best way to keep things tied to the believable was to have the events of the episode more or less mirror what actually historically happened in the closing years of the Incan Empire's downfall. Actually, I'm honestly super happy with how that particular episode turned out, NGL. The problem was that I couldn't really find the inspiration to follow it up, y'know? I was going to write out the shenanigans Jon's grandpa got up to in the days immediately following the stone's discovery, but anything I came up just kinda felt like the same old same old for FB, and on top of that I was working under the restriction that everything had to turn out more less the way Jon remembered it in the end. FB kinda gets you in this trap where all you think about are individual episodes and not the whole story arc, y'know? With obviously myopic results. Makes it doubly hard to write these Past-Story things since you kinda have to have it all planned out before you even begin writing.

But whatever. Here's the episode I was talking about in question, if you're interested.
https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/3486539