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Just a random side note, Zoe was supposed to mention noticing that Karyn was super into Jon's boobs at dinner... but I wrote the thing realised I hadn't included that and couldn't find a good way to insert it without disrupting the flow. It wasn't super important, just sort of Zoe teasing Jon.

Maybe at some point she'll have a chance to ask Karyn about that directly. That seems more interesting anyway, though I have no idea when a conversation between Zoe and Karyn might happen before the wish ends. Karyn's gotten off lightly when it comes to the consequences of the time limited wishes and some awkward conversations would be fitting.

Their is very much a reason why it works for the sister but not for Mephi or Karen.

Happy there is more to this story line!

Thanks. I admit I wasn't sure, felt like the pacing is too fast in some areas here. There is a bit more to it but this is from what Terry saw, and how a demon terrified him... not just that of course, but made him feel negative about himself.

@Mary
If ya got a good idea and are in the mood, always feel free to write a continuation of my stuff! It means way more to me than just upvotes or anything like that.

Ok this adds a much appreciated depth to Terry's character, Also, could the motive of this flashback be Terry turning into a demon himself and being more vulnerable to dark emotions?

Hey, I might try and add to this soon if you guys don't mind! Love your work! My idea is to have Jon wish that his new husband, mother, Karyn, and Zoe know he really was Jon and not Sue, either from some imagined accident or intentionally. I think it adds to the humiliation if people know Jon isn't a horny milf, but can't help but act like one. And it gives him some directive as his family might try and help them out but judge him for being so lewd. I think this would establish the husband as the antagonist, who has the stone, who isn't willing to give up his amazing life and wonderfully, sexy wife. I think Karyn should be the friend who wants to help, mom be the type of person who secretly enjoys it since she has a new friend, and Zoe who just finds it hilarious after the full effects kick in. What do yall think?

16yrs old, 6'6" and 300lbs of muscle. Is Mikey fucking Jotaro Joestar?

Comments have only existed for like a year IIRC, two at the most.

Thanks. Yes Terry is a bit cliche, but what isn't these days ;)

It is nice seeing you writing again, this must likely be what you told me you were working on. I must say, even though Terry can be a bit on the cliché type on his disdain for the other world, you have really outdone yourself in the writing department. There's a really nice sense of flow that really enhances the intricancies of this new setting as they're shown off. I also see a lot of focus on a duality between magic and electricity, as each the main element of each world. In short, I'm really looking forward to what is to come from this new plotline, I'll be on the lookout for any new chapters.

Absolutely where I was going—just taking my time getting there. :)

The more Karyn-bulge the better. Love it. If you have a different vision keep going. :)

thanks :) Never left, was always lurking

Welcome back to the site

Awesome! What did you enjoy about it in particular?

BG has been one of my favorite stories on FB. I do hope you decide to continue it. Thanks.

Keep the good work, continue writing •ᴗ•

I did mention that Jon's boobs are noticeably bigger than softballs right after the wish that brought them into existence, though I guess I've never given context for how big that looks on Jon. The intent is that yes they are notably large, though not out of proportion. That is they look bigger than Karyn's in addition to actually being bigger.

The main thing hiding Karyn's boobs is intended to be how she carries herself and her sweater obviously, my intention was that the sweater is very long, almost covering down to where a short miniskirt would end, and it's all fairly loose so if she hunched slightly it would very effectively hide her entire upper body's shape.

Ignoring clothes sizing, a lot of being big is about proportion. Karyn's body being curvier then Sarah's means that while she's bigger her breasts are more in proportion to the rest of her body and they won't stand out as much. It makes sense she's happy with how they look. How big is Jim? I don't know if that's been said in most of these episodes.

It's intentional, Bra size systems vary around the English speaking world and aren't exactly precise in any place they're used, a cup size doesn't actually tell you much. I'd rather just compare to some real world object, or just describe the character's experience.

Not even women really know what bra sizes mean, something like 60 to 80 percent of women are wearing the wrong size depending on which bra manufacturer's study you believe. Part of this is that people tend to think DD means massive melons, but it doesn't really.

Basically I at one point read up on bra sizes, found it's a stupid rabbit hole and using realistic sizes would give a lot of readers the wrong impression and I don't want to go with reader expectations and be wrong, so I just avoid mentioning bra sizes. I could justify it by the characters being wrong, but I prefer to avoid it.

So to Jon his boobs are massive and they are fairly large, but they feel a lot bigger to him, at least in terms of the weight and movement. Obviously he can see their actual size in the mirror and by feeling them in his hand, though they are substantially more than a handful, but his subjective experience of them is where I want to focus, that and Karyn's adaptation to being attracted to boobs, plus them transitioning from a platonic to a romantic and physical relationship.

I don't plan to write a shopping scene during the week, since Jon already owns bras and I'd expect him to be resistant to the idea.

I've noticed that the story avoids bra sizes. Is this intentionally vague or is it being saved for an episode where they go shopping?

This has been an interesting and nicely detailed story. I'd love to see where this goes. Please keep writing.

I’m glad someone is bringing this story back

Not sure how intentional it was, but it seems to me the mental command of "you need to tell me what happens today. Everything." might be relevant...

On a side note, it had been a long time since I read the root of the story... re-read it and noticed there was a line about Jon not really being able to tell that Karyn's boobs had changed. So we got this chapter where Karyn has in fact been hiding how curvy she is. The idea is that, the root mentions them coming back from spring break, so Karyn filled out a fair bit over summer, hid under her sweater constantly, continued to fill out over the past several months up to spring break.

Oh hey, thanks for adding!

God, why do I find this so hot? I want to be Morgana…

I'm liking this story lot. Curious to how will Biff encounter with Karyn will play out.

Ok, so the busyness has piled up way higher than I anticipated. I will get to this though!

I enjoyed all the pantyhose mentions XD

urgh yeah I got the names wrong initially here and had to edit it.. clearly missed some entries.

There were some wrong names in there, Lucy instead of Samantha... I'm not sure what was going on in the hand holding part at all. Also who is Jennifer?

This is one of my favourite old branches.

I really like this branch, it's the only one I can think of that made me want Jon to end up in a romantic relationship with someone other than Karyn!

I'm enjoying Steve's development as Abigail and I'm rooting for him to become a better person and end up with Jon.

I'm also curious about who has Karyn's name.

Also the branch gimmick is really cool and has so many places it can go.

Man, I'm really liking this story so freaking bad. I just loved the thing, of Jon "father" being actually a girl. If I may, here are some suggestions (please, don't feel compel to add them though, they are just ideas, maybe some of them aren't even that good).

More scenes describing the character clothing, especially Jon? Maybe he complaining about wearing tights? XD
Until this moment Jon hasn't been, like, physically confronted with his utter helplessness, like, a scene showing him not wanting to do something and just being FORCED, like physically forced into doing it. Maybe he throwing a tantrum or something and being spanked or so?
Maybe describing Biff day at work as well? He struggling with his new found womanhood?
When you described Karyn it would have been interesting to have mentioned that her body was hairy, since she doesn't shave her legs since she believes she is a man. Maybe a scene of her shaving her face (despite the fact that she will never have a beard, obviously)?
Also, maybe in the same way Jon is being forced into being a little girl, maybe some character should be put into the role of a dog or cat? Although, I don't know what character would that be? Like his father, or mother, or, I don't know, maybe his little sister (although this last one might be a little controversial... although it would have been so interesting). Maybe Jon "father" could decide to go there and adopt a cat or dog and then Jon realises the pet is one of his family members. And, much like him, every time that person trapped in the role of an animal speaks no one can't understand anything, but Jon and Biff can. Maybe the person is like "I have been here on this dog kennel for the last 2 weeks, and no one could understand me, I was going crazy!!!"

Yeah I'll do it. I'm just a bit short on time lately but might get to it on Sunday.

Alright... Thanks for all that, actually, with that it now seems like we have a pretty solid plan moving forward. The second phase slice-of-life might be tough or present some unexpected difficulties, but I'm sure we can roll with it. Do you wanna do the honors of writing that sister episode or should I?

So it does. I’ll get that sorted shortly!

Would other stats get added to the card? (i.e species)

Seems like there's some missing text in the second last paragraph, it just cuts off abruptly.

You are on fire! I'm loving this stuff XD Keep up the nice work.

As for the stone - I'm well aware that if Jon keeps the stone with him, the moment the 20 mins pass he will try to remedy his situation. So I was thinking that his plan is, as you also mentioned, to wish the stone away to his 'nephew' the new Jon. Maybe even with a proviso that Sue is excluded from the blanket memory adjustment happening when wishes are made, just so that he can stay aware of anything the new Jon might be up to with the stone. This way, "the way out" would be simultaneously close enough to give Jon/Sue some direction to their actions while also not being so close it's too easy for them to find a way out.

And while I do see the appeal of David getting the hold of the stone I honestly feel like that might remove the attention from Jon really sinking into Sue's life. Instead we'd just keep escalating things instead of really exploring the emotional and practical landscape of how things have worked out. Sure, wishing is fun, but it's the consequences of those wishes that are the interesting bit! Ultimately, what I'd ideally like to see is Jon getting defeated in a "Fuck. I guess this is my life now." way. Shit but stable.

Lot's of interesting thoughts there! And I'm really enjoying having this discussion - it's getting me even more hyped to see where things will go with this story.

> NGL, I actually have quite a few uncertainties and reservations about writing through what said end state actually is in all its gory detail. In the abstract, as it is now, it's great, mostly defined by a vague feeling of impending regrets, lowkey sexual abuse, and that sweet TG angst, buuuut when that sort of thing becomes concrete and we actually have to have Sue living it I'm not convinced its actually gonna be quite like that.

It's fair enough that you have your hesitations about the post-masochist-stage of the story. I can totally see how just writing Sue's Slice-of-Life might be not that fun if we're deprived of the novelty of the experience of Jon putting himself on a trajectory to being her. Not only that but I can totally see how it could get depressing and boring. So in that way, similarly to you I also thought that once Jon is completely replaced by Sue we can just drop the curtain and say "And so he/she lived kinda unhappily ever after"..

That said, imho, Jon doesn't become Sue at the moment he passes the 20 minute mark. At that point he only gains two of her characteristics - not being interested in masochistically designing a regretful life for himself/herself and not finding the female body sexually attractive. There'd be still plenty of other elements of 'Sueness' that Jon needs to acquire. And one of his previous wishes made sure it would happen at various points over the next 24 hours. Also, he still retains his own memories as his main memory set, so for full intents and purposes I consider him Jon, albeit with an increasing number of Sue's mental characteristics that he has to get used to.

The way I see the story go, could be essentially split into two phases: the remainder of the wishtravaganza 20 minutes, and then a day or so of Jon's journey of descending into Sue, the horror and struggle of trying to come to terms with the kind of fate he foolishly choose, as different aspects of her life start manifesting in him one by one. Kinda like a roller-coaster which starts with being pulled to the highest point, and then launches you into the wild experience of the unknown of the ride.

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If you ask me, the obvious and probably sexiest direction to go with this sort of masochistic fantasy is to give David the stone and rework him into being the central antagonist of the branch. We already have a masochistic, submissive wife, so why not a sadistic, dominant husband? It's already established that he has a handful of wish-induced boundary issues with Sue, particularly in regards to her tits, ass, and height, so it seems natural to take that and go even further with him as a character that way. If he has the stone, he absolutely could trap Jon hopelessly into Sue's life, forever, and pile effect after wish-induced effect onto his wife even after she's lost all masochistic interest in taking that fantasy any further. Sue, in effect, might become his unwilling sexual plaything through and through, depending on how far we want David's conscience to allow him to go. I dunno about you, but that's a thought that definitely gets my blood pumping. If you're comfortable writing villains this path is pretty solidly my first choice of direction for the branch, I'll say.

My solid second choice of direction for the stone in the branch is a lot more off-the-wall: have it end up in the hands of Jon the Nephew, the clone of Jon's original self (maybe by way of Karyn, whom I note was not included in the wish to have no recollection of the stone). This is probably the most narratively intriguing possible future for the branch in that it gives Jon an outsider's perspective on his own changes, and via the bodyswap trick I mentioned above a partial way out for Sue and partial way in for Jon the Nephew. It would certainly be the most philosophically interesting and could lead naturally to the most introspection Jon's going to have in any of the futures if that's what we're wanting... oooor we could just make it a case of a horny teenage boy having a crush on his hot but oddly relatable aunt in town. Or both. Or we start the madness all over again with a different-yet-same TF masochistic at the helm. I don't know what exactly the details here would even be, but honestly that's what makes it all the more fun to contemplate, says I.

And I guess there's some fun to be had if the stone ends up in someone else's hands, like one of Sue's daughters (Amber or Lucy) or Sue's sister/Jon's mother Linda, or someone else even farther afield, but, meh... I can't really think of a way to handle that which wouldn't be like starting a whole new branch from scratch. The possibility is there if you see something fun there, though. Ofc we could have the stone trading hands around even more, but the only use case I can think for this at present would be if we wanted some consensual TF shenanigans between David and Sue.

That's about it in terms of possible destinations for the stone. And the thing is, that's kinda just one detail that determines how the story's going to play out, with each possibility needing some forethought and advance planning if the story's going to go as well as it can. It isn't a problem yet, and it won't be until the 20 minute safety valve kicks in, when the stone really needs to be away from a lucid Sue imo. But the thing is, like it or not, we do have an arc in progress, which we do want to steer to its best natural conclusion from here, even if Jon really doesn't. You get me, man? Plans can (and probably should) change as things go on, but that doesn't mean we just shouldn't have one, right?