It's not often that FtM gets the same treatment as MtF normally does in terms of writing. Usually it's either not really elaborated on or it feels like something to contrast the other transformation.

I'm not saying it's amazing or anything, but it's a nice little breath of freah air.

And that's why ultra-advanced, sentient AI is/will be a mistake, at least in terms of ethics.

"Pandora's box had been opened and it was for sale, as is.

Sleep tight Jon.

Your perfect wish has given us a garage sale for the ages."

That's a really creepy note to end a chapter on. o_o

Very interesting. I wonder how all this will play out.

"Jon’s penis sprung free, standing proud"

Me: (tries his hardest to resist singing "Stand Proud" from JoJo part 3) 😫

Thank you both! I didn't plan on taking a year break, but stepping away from it allowed me to reset my brain and I'm hoping to take the story further than I had originally had planned to take it. So we'll see where it goes. I will say writing a story that continually dips into the past which is constantly shifting and changing requires lots of notes... So many notes after each chapter...

Always look at the positives in your life! Now if only I listened to that advice, that would've been great...

What a Treat! This story never fails to impress, Jo has a great life, and once she realises that, she will understand what a gift Sarah has given her.

How the turn tables! Great chapter, loved to see that little dip into Jon's past after such a big change, a little hint of an emotional outburst, and Jon's realization that this step backwards may have just unlocked the ability to take some giant leaps forward. This is one of my favorite threads on the site and I'm so happy to see it return from its absence without missing a beat. Very excited to see what happens next!

These scenarios seem like they could be a lot more tricky than most of the writers realize, so I've included some of these thoughts into the storyline here.

cant wait for more of this story

Hey lifesmainantagonist.
I see you've been posting quite a bit in the past few months. That's really cool. I'll share a bit about this community. It's pretty old, literally being founded the summer of 2000. There's some really brilliant writers on here, and every now and then we strike a great synergy and start collaborating on bigger projects. Compared to other sites, the view to feedback ratio is really good, but as I'm sure you see, we don't get as many regular viewers.

Some things that might help you get more feedback is to collaborate with other authors on more recent branches. Give feedback of your own, but stay positive and bounce ideas around. People write for fun, not as a second job.

It seems like a lot of your posts are on chapters that are a decade old or older. Try adding few chapters to other peoples branches.

I can understand how it could be frustrating to feel like you're posting into a void, but if you're just looking for as many views as possible, this probably isn't the best site.

As for "upvoting" our own stuff. XD We all had a big chat about that a while ago when Phoenix updated the rating system. If we feel like we posted a banger, yeah, we'll upvote our own stuff as a self pat on the back, but we're not really a "like" driven community. Of course it's nice when we get feedback, but most of us write because we love it, plain and simple.

All right Lucus. You're lucky I checked back one last time because I was going to end my relationship with this website. But for your reference I came to that conclusion because when my stuff doesn't get any upvotes and everyone else's submissions submitted at about the same time does, my conclusion is no one cares. But most of them are probably just upvoting their own content and any real readers maybe don't bother even if they read something they like, or maybe save it to favorites instead.

Hey, I'm reading it.

well I’m stopping here, no one’s reading it or cares anyway

"I don't think I can wish her back to life,"

You sure? I don't see a reason why either you - the writer - or the charaters would think it wouldn't be possible. It's not like Jon directly wished for Sarah to die, it's just a consequence of his use of the swapping power. If he can wish to change the reason of her death, I'm sure he'd be able to wish her back to life/she never died at all... though I'm not sure how she'd react and/or if it's a good idea.

Point is: there's nothing in-universe that would suggest you can't wish people back to life.

Then again, this WAS made in 2009...

Thanks Zelo! Hope you enjoy!

WOAB WOAH WOAH that went from 0 to 100 really fast at the end. o_o Guess she is still a bitch after all.

"Then why does it feel so alien to me?"

And why do I find it SO hot? I mean, I know I'm apparently into unaware, body part swaps with sexual (under?)tones now after reading that one story on DeviantArt, but still - this much? Is it just because it's new and good?

A-anyway, really looking foward to next chapter, whenever that may be, though with how recent this one is, I'm having good hopes. 😄

Wow. That was a really nice "branch-opening" episode. Definitely got me interested for what's to come.

I guess "Pbly" could actually be either possibly or probably. Actually it could even be "impossibly" or "improbably" but maybe that would be better shortened to mply and it wouldn't fit the context. It could be tricky to write for this in a way that isn't ambiguous. Any long words stand to be a real problem. I did split newscaster into 2 words intentionally for that reason.

Hmm wonder how this would bode for data storage.

Really? I thought it was only the last sentence that wasn’t self-explanatory. Maybe “dmtd” for “admitted”. But here it is:

Just then, the phone rang. Jon picked it up.

“Jon. what did you do?!” It was Karyn.

“I don’t know!” Jon answered.

“Did you make every word four letters long Jon?!”

“Probably,” he admitted. He turned on the television.

The news caster was talking about total chaos. The nasdaq had fallen 9999 points, war was brewing as people thought it was a sign of the end times. No one could explain what was happening. It was a phenomenon without precedent.

Can we get a translation for the whole thing.

The last sentence is “It was a phenomenon without precedent” in case you’re wondering.

Swap with Jon's life. lol. Give Nadine the stone.

Yes, but sometimes they like to hang around Hot Topic at the mall...what corporate sellouts.

I think the Occult Shop has also turned up in other stories and branches patroned by the original Goths (Athena and the rest). It's good to see that the new Goths also believe in supporting local businesses. :)

Of course that whole 2 DNA pattern thing from "The Fly" doesn't make any sense when you consider humans are loaded with live bacteria, and the remnants of food they've eaten, if it doesn't need to be the DNA in live cells, and any invaders in their blood or tissues, and any microorganisms or mites on their skin.

The wholesomeness of the human arc here in contrast with the depravity of the demon arc here is actually absolutely wonderful. Fingers crossed that somehow they meet someday!

Poor Jasmine, her requests are so genuine.

Sorry you don't like it. I know this is easily the most kink or even offputting story I've written in a while. It's not a friendly drama or slice of life like stuff I've tried to write in the past.

Good luck with the story tho.

Yeah sorry Perri gonna have to hop off here, really not my thing.

Thanks. haha. Honestly I'm not sure where the inspiration is coming from.

Dude you're on FIRE lately. Keep up the good work!

If I were in this situation, I'd be looking for something I could use as a blindfold, so I could avoid seeing a group of people I don't want to be like. Of course, the drawback to that would be that people would be asking all sorts of questions about why I'm covering my eyes, and I'd be afraid that if I told them there were magic sticky notes that placed curses on the people who read them, they'd think I was crazy or something.

Okay, here's an 'in universe' comment from a fan of KS Chronicles.

KSFANGIRL30: This new revamped season (Junior Year take two?) is off to a great start. New girl Julia seems like she has the potential to shake up the dynamics a bit. Nice to see Karyn interacting with more people now, and I was pleasantly surprised to see her meet with Zoe in the hall. With Jon out of the picture, Zoe needs more people to interact with outside of Athena and the Goth crowd. (Don't get me wrong, Athena's awesome, but Zoe needs to do more than just give Athena another Goth to talk to - Zelda and Sabrina already fill that role). As for Rebecca, Karyn seems to be avoiding her, which makes me wonder just how big a role Rebecca's going to play: Maybe some people overhyped her importance? Oh, and it's good to see more of characters like Yuki who haven't had much screentime.

(out of universe now): All in all, pretty great stuff. Wondering what further twists will occur both in the KS Chronicles show and behind the scenes.

Haha. Yeah. That was the goal. I definitely borrowed a bit from the pulpy side of the metal scene. In the original concept, he was going to be summoned by a metal head, rather than a nerd. I thought the nerd gave more creative kink opportunities, while the metal head would just be more sexual.

Welp, so that guy is outta his head, so there is now the handicap that the protag can't directly refute being a succubus. Hope she can figure out something to get him to understand before things get worse.

Gotta say, the idea of a black hole pentagram is rather "metal".

Okay, let me see if I can do an 'in-universe' review, writing from the perspective of one of the audience members.

KSFANGIRL30: Loving the revamp! New characters and some interesting new dynamics. Looking forward to seeing Karyn interact with the rest of the cast, but for now the Sarah portions are a lot of fun. The new girl MacKenzie is awesome! The scene where she one-upped Sarah telling everyone about her mother and the famous people she met made me LOL! I'm looking forward to seeing more of how the new girl interacts with both of our leads. One thing is strange, though: What's the story with Lexi's twin? Is it just me, or does she seem vaguely reminiscent of someone else? I'm not sure who right now, but it does seem kind of strange. Maybe it'll be made clear if she gets more screentime in the episodes.

(Out of universe now). Seriously, this is great stuff. One of my favorite FB stories in quite a while.

LOVING this storyline! This episode was especially fun seeing Sarah's reactions to MacKenzie's stories about her mother and the famous people she's met. Great stuff!

Thank you. Yeah I had been thinking I was wrong to put so many parallels to drugs… but in the end after much thought and feedback I just embraced it and accepted it’s a bit of a walk on the dark side.

Gotta say, surprisingly good use of the pun, never saw the "high" pun this wittily implemented. Then again, the fact that this were enforced and the way others bypass it is similar with drugs in our world. Altough it is distinct in the fact that is no so much addictive or harmful quimically as much as just life-changing. IRL drugs tend to result in these downward spirals of worsening of the ones addicted, while this, while you may get idk addicted to the rush, there's the threshold of full transformation that just leaves you with very benign consecuences considering the mentioned alternative. Altough i do guess the fact this could easily force large masses of people into an unwanted transformation, it makes sense to be a strict control on them. Either way, really interesting worldbuilding.

I liked the concept, please keep on :)

This is kind of like playing a game like mortal kombat repeatedly, in some games one character wins, in others, it's a different one. There is no real ending to it because there are so many, the only thing they have in common is the beginning.

@Chompy Heh, a potential third niquel then.

It's clear that Sturm_DragonLord was trying to give Sarah more depth than just being a psychopath and actually foster a more meaningful relationship with Jon but merely have it with a rocky start. And then other writers had to come along and ruin it. Well, the "who will make the wish" branch was headed in that direction, but I didn't feel comfortable with continuing that one because I just didn't feel like I had a grip on the situation or the characters or how to reasonably continue.

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Can we get a translation for the whole thing.