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Anyway anyone here, you might be interested in this:

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shorts_(2009_film)

It’s basically this, but made into a movie. By that I don’t mean it is directly this; it doesn’t have these characters but the premise is the same, a wishing stone with godlike power that is used in the same way (except I think it doesn't even have any limitations at all, wishes can be undone), and the same sort of things happen from wishes gone wrong, like at one point two people get conjoined to each other, at another, they summon tiny aliens. It’s all set in a gated community run by a company run by a totalitarian tyrannical madman, that makes all-in-one devices (so basically next generation iphone) but of course with the wishing stone that literally is an everything in one device, there is a mad scramble and battle over control of the stone. I don’t remember it that well because I saw it in 2010 but it was definitely the best movie I saw that year. Not that it had a lot of competition.

Hi The Guest , Can you continue to write about what happened to Tomi? I love what you write

Bruh moment

I like how this is truly an ending and a shitpost and the creator of this page only made this one thing and nothing else and probably spent a total of 10 minutes on this website ever and yet it got 63 replies so far (though starting from one of the names I’m really trying to avoid). So here you go BonoboMonkey, your first and only upvote, from me to you.

Once again, excellent job on the writing. Reading about Jon's new, girly (and occasionally pleasant) experiences... it actually made me feel a little warm inside! I even tried putting my legs together like s/he was told to.

Uh, I swear I'm not trans! 😳 Just curious!

A-anyway, looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that will be!

Added a few chapters

I wonder how much of "being in collage" Jon copied. Did it just take "Jon is now a college student" and go from there, based on how Jon would act? Or did it also take other aspects from the girl he copied it from, like where he studied and who his roommate is? Obviously, as time went on, his life became more and more different from "now" due to all of the changes stacking on top of eachother, but at the time of this chapter, how much of Jon's new life is his own?

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A real class act guy, his first inclination on first contact with another sentient species being kidnapping and slavery. I wonder what his plan is here, does he just think that he can just sell her or does he have his own circus or what?

I think since then, Gibson seems to be the preferred last name for Jon. Madison is still used only in continuations of branches/stories where it was previously established to be his surname. In most branches these days, it's Gibson.

I think maybe this should be broken up into 2 parts. Where it says:

I picked up the stone. “I wish that the revised version of what is on this paper would become real, without modifying history, it just would be true from this point on with her new abilities and the gullibility condition.”

That could have very well created another android right then and there for Jon, because he isn't saying that it would apply to Stephanie. I don't know though. It would need a new title, and then the next chapter would be everything after that and that would get the title of "Being Fair to Karyn", and then there would be the opportunity to have 2 versions, one where it generates a new android girl right then and there, and one where it proceeds with the story as originally written, and it really wouldn't be fair to the 3 who upvoted (wow 3 upvotes that's rare for my stories) it as it is.

If someone else eventually wants to just copy the story of this chapter up to that point to then have it separate into the possibility where the stone creates another android girl for Jon and have it as a chapter parallel to this one, you have my permission.

I too am curious. At first I thought this would be a normal-ish world but I’m kinda glad there is the implication of some exotic biology out there, at least I certainly hope so. I wonder about Sarah too …

Girl Jon is cute. Knight in shining armor indeed. Hope to see more.

Would be neat to see Fiona grew a duplicate of her waist up in place of a would-be cock. Having the limbs and dexterity to move around and all but instead of being normal, the entire torso is just sensitive and is practically a giant penis.

Would be neat to see Fiona grew a duplicate of her waist up in place of a would-be cock. Having the limbs and dexterity to move around and all but instead of being normal, the entire torso is just sensitive and is practically a giant penis.

Jon Madison. That’s terrible. Might as well name him George Washington or Ronald Reagan if you’re going to name him Jon Madison. I don’t think I like any of them tbh.

It is better to take the time to make wishes to fix things then rush into them.

@Bunnie I assume they meant "fetal position".

What's a feral position?

I have a feeling I might know what's going on here...
But on the other hand, the physical evidence I'd expect seems absent so far, so maybe not...
Dang it, looks like I have no choice but to keep reading!

Gooose, any chance that we might see any more from this story? Was thoroughly enjoying it as you were writing it a few months ago

Well, the jury's still out... ;)

Hey, that was pretty nicely written for a simple MTF. 👍

(though I will admit it took me an embarrassingly long time to realise what "that time of the month" meant :/)

I hope this isn't an Alive situation...

So I guess cause of Jane new age of 29, she is actually Linda's stepmom, I wonder who is Linda's mom in this new reality and what happened to her.

Now I am curious on where the Kylo will take this, also where future authors will go from here and how that will differentiate from Kylo take.

"As someone with an amateur interest in Polish, I'm driven bonkers by a Polish-like name that's slightly off!"

As an actual Pole, female surnames not being "gendered" (like Skłodowska👩, as opposed to Skłodowski👨) is a big pet peeve of mine. Then again, my main teacher's (or whatever you'd call it in English) surname is "Cichy👨", not "Cicha👩", so I guess it's not a hard rule.

...uhh, sorry for necroposting. 😅

That was a very well-writter pair of transformations.

I had to reread to remember what was going on but it was totally worth it! This is a great branch with a cozy vibe.

That element might be part of why Linda and Jon are more on board with being Susan and Sarah/why Jon is insistent about continuing the McMillan's lifestyle. That is to say, they're being influenced not to be borish versions of Sarah and Susan.

I wonder if Sarah wish will only affect them physically or if will also affect them mentally, since there where two parts to her wish ("Ugh, I wish they knew what it was like to be us; maybe then they wouldn't be so boorish."), she wants them to know what it is to be like a McMillan and also to no be borish, so how did the stone interpret the borish part I wonder.

I've been wondering just what they were going to do about Zoe. Like Taylor, I was wondering whether or not them letting Zoe in on the whole thing the way they did with Program J would be a good idea, given Zoe's rebellious personality. With Program J, they were able to win her over with "We're giving you a better life than what you had before, and if everything goes well, then it could become even better than that, as long as you're a good supporting character in Sarah and/or Karyn's lives". With that in mind, I wondered what they could offer Zoe/Cici/Program Z that would get her to cooperate for the good of the show and everyone involved with it (both the in-show cast mostly unaware of their status as characters in a show, and the behind the scenes team like Elias Ellis, Taylor, Josephine and the rest).

As it turns out, they've got an idea, though it looks like it's going to be a bit hard on Taylor. Wondering whether or not it's going to work out, and if Mackenzie will have to be let in on what's going on as well, or if they can avoid it for now. In any case, the clear lesson we take from this is that regardless of how a show is made, problems that happen behind the scenes will almost certainly affect what goes on in the universe of the show itself.

Added Robot as a tag and applied it.

Have you thought about brining Mackenzie/Jon into this? The Jon part of the character matrix still cares about his sister and Zoe, knowing he's still around, will be less chaotic.

It's an interesting question. I think if you asked her, she'd say her name is Mackenzie, full stop, while the production staff is continuing to call her Program J and Zoe/Cici would probably call her Jon if she knew all the facts. They might give her a new designation down the line eventually, and Jam is a funny nickname if nothing else.

I wonder if they will rename Program J to something else now that Jon is named Mackenzie, I don't think Program M, maybe Program JM or Jam, since they needed to restart because of the jam Jon caused to the whole show by becoming Karyn friend?

This my favorite thread. Keep it up!

Interested to see where this goes!

Sure seems like Jon got the best of the trade. I hope he makes the best of this new opportunity.

I love your writing, especially your attention to detail.

Actually this should be easy to fix, they’re just not being creative enough. For example, if she’s just constrained to be half pig, she could be changed to have a complete human body but with a complete pig body growing out of her belly button with the pig’s tail as an umbilical cord and none of her nervous system in the pig part and then simply amputate the pig portion from the rest of her body. With the stone unable to do it with magic, you could wish for an advanced technological device that operates purely on science, that can splice genes and mutate living things into any other genetically engineered organism. You could also note that humans and pigs already share more than 50% of their DNA, and the half of her that is pig could be made part of the DNA which is exactly the same between pigs and humans anyway, and then the other 50% would be whatever she was missing from her original genetics. This would fix her DNA but not necessarily her body, until they wished for her injuries to be healed and her body therefore reset to what her DNA codes for. If she’s half pig, you could also make the other half be a shapeshifter life form, making her not half pig half human but a hybrid pig shapeshifter with the shapeshifter ability a dominant ability. She could also wish for a cyborg body like a terminator, which would look like whatever she wanted but just have her brain contained in it, like Robocop or Nuku Nuku or Metallo. And if none of those are any good, then also just because she's a pig, doesn't mean she needs to have so much body fat, any animal can have any level of obesity, it wouldn't take away her pigness to decrease the body fat, so he could wish away all her body fat except 20% of that found in her breasts. Also, being half pig, could just be the biochemistry. She could still physically look like she did originally, and not be forced to have pig mannerisms, but on a cellular level, if she needs a blood transfusion would need pig blood or if she needed an organ transplant would need a pig heart or kidneys or something, she doesn't need to physically have her body changed to be half pig. Perhaps none of these would fix her other problem that everyone but herself and Jon perceives her as a pig, but actually the robocop body one probably would, since their line of sight wouldn’t be any part of her original biological material but rather the robot.

Karyn could also wish for Jon to feel no pain while touching the stone, and for his body to become invulnerable while touching it, and for it to undergo rapid healing while touching it, then he could hold it even though it is red hot.

Of course for dramatic and story purposes, it perhaps is no good for things to just be fixed and necessarily get a happy ending, there's value in her reaction to and coping with this scenario. I'm just saying. They could be of use in some sort of final confrontation with the evil brother Mikey. But Mikey absolutely needs an appropriate punishment. You just glossed over that. He's still there, living with them in the same house! And just happy to have no consequences for himself? Turn him into a pig and give him the compulsion to eat shit all day long and release him into the wilderness. Or literally send him to hell. And what about the gun? He can't use the stone any more but there was the shapeshifting gun. Considering how irreversible I'm expected to accept things as being in this version of the story, I am not so sure you can just wish for the gun's powers to go away because that would be undoing a wish, and she didn't wish for its powers to go away, she wished for its effects to wear off, which could just mean that everyone who had been changed so far changed back to normal, but with the gun still functioning into the future.

I agree. One of the better threads by far. Hopefully it will inspire some additions.

As Doc Brown would say, “Stop thinking so 3-dimensionally Marty!” Ok, Sarah is redeemable… in some branches. I have written her that way myself most of the time. In fact I have more often made her that way and made Karyn evil. But not here. In the path to here, she has been too malicious for too long, too stubborn. At the very least she has done too much all in one step on too little motivation after how solidly she stood her ground earlier. I could accept her not apologizing, not having an emotional breakdown, and just quietly handing Jon the stone and just saying “fix it if you can”. But this is just inconsistent. But even if she can be redeemed in some timelines, doesn’t mean she can be, or should be, in all of them. It’s your creation, you do with it what you want. As for the cork thing, it looked like well-deserved sarcasm to me. You don’t want to call it plagiarism? Ok, should we invent a new word for copying someone else’s exact words without accreditation? But a rose by any other name.

I am in no way suggesting Plagiarism from Ms Cork, I did say I was flattered that she used my opening paragraph, and I meant it. As for the rest, you are entitled to your opinion, I've always portrayed Sarah as a redeemable character, I'm not going to apologise or alter that, it's what I feel like writing.

Thanks for alerting to the plagiarism from cork. I just thought what the hell didn’t I just read this. I don’t think this is a fitting change for Sarah at this point though. I can’t accept her at this juncture actually apologizing and saying she’s a terrible person and returning the stone, too much in this version of her has already established her as a narcissistic psychopath. I can’t accept this chapter because she’s done too much to redefine her this much. She’s a villain that needs to be defeated, not a person to give sympathy.

Glad the sister relationship came across well; I wanted the Black family and the McMillan family to really contrast one another here and help explain some of the differences between Sarah and Karyn in the process. Expanding on the idea that's present in several branches of Sarah being a latch key sort of kid, both of her parents are pretty absent/disinterested in her life. Before there friendship dissolved, Sarah spent a lot of time with the Black family and losing that has been really rough for her in addition to the direct conflict with Karyn. (Alyssa, Bethany and Kimberly don't have a grudge against Sarah like Karyn does, and would probably still welcome her into their house, but it's just too awkward with her current antagonism with Karyn for Sarah to approach them)

I have her in one other branch, that's only 2 chapters long, though in that she's three years older than Karyn instead of only one.

It's scary how invested I've become on this story thread.

Excellent work. I like the Karyn/Kimberly relationship. Not sure if Kim is from another thread or a new original character but the whole black family vibe right now is killing it.

This would have been a great time for him to point out to her that she’s going to have to live with them too. If there’s any type of person that has a low tolerance of unpleasant people, it’s other unpleasant people. Does she think that if everyone is acting like her, they’re all just going to get along?

So, the exact wish or wishes won't be revealed right away, but the reason Zoe remembers the old world, is she technically heard Jon wishing through the wall. She couldn't make out the words, so she hasn't made the connection, but it triggered the bit of the magic from the root branch where if you hear the wish you know reality's been changed, but everyone else thinks things have always been this way.

Sarah is going to hate herself by the end of this, as she loses patience with everyone else acting exactly as she asked for, like her. She’s unintentionally setting herself up for a character growing experience, if any of the writers thought of it at least.