I guess the way I've been thinking about Jon/Jo's situation is that at some point you would become numb to it and just accept your fate. And at this point Jon/Jo has been fighting Sarah's wish for a full day and I would envision that as being super exhausting to deal with... So by the time Jon is Jo she would be worn out and likely numb to the situation. Plus it's not like she can do much without the stone... Anyways it is kind of weird to just accept your fate like that, but the last version of Jon had the weird gender bending puberty in it so it's probably nice to be normal again... Even if that means you're a different gender. Idk if any of that is coherent, but that's kind of what was clanking around in my brain when I wrote that.

Glad you're enjoy the story!

It still feels a bit... weird (like, uncomfotably weird, if that makes sense) to me that Jo is so quick to be OK with being female and - more importantly - view herself as separate from Jon, who she used to be (and it's not even subtle). I mean, it makes sense when you think about it and it's interesting to read, so I'm not really opposed to it (in fact, I really like how she doesn't have a "wow" moment when she sees her pussy for the "first" time). It just... gives me weird feelings. :/

Still, I'm curious where this story is gonna head to and I'm looking forward to more in the future.

But, enough talk. Have an upvote! :)

I’m just going to stop now but write a spoiler for how I would have ended it in case anyone cares. Jessie leaves her backpack at her former house, a man who lives there picks it up and catches up to her to give it back to her and taps on her shoulder from behind, but that’s too close and they can’t resist each other. They start making out and he grows a tail explosively out the back of his clothes and finds to his shock he’s turned into a catgirl and continues developing into a heavily-afflicted one and then her belly grows and rapidly progresses to the birthing stage and is astonished and reluctant to accept he’s a female giving birth. Then his wife runs out and says what did you fo to my husband and is upset at first but they were an infertile couple and anger turns to enthusiasm as the former husband gives birth to a litter of 5. Jon wishes to know information on the status of Karyn and Josh and just decides to merge everyone with their timeline 4 selves from a distance. Josh knows where she lives now and goes there to join her now large family- her parents are now both women as his own father was the 2nd victim of her power and as a result has to accept things are pretty messed up and in addition to having dozens of children, also has some inbred half-sibling daughters, but their family is rich because they get paid to use Josh’s power on rich men who want to be heavily-afflicted mothers, and it turns out that when used on women they just get pregnant the slow way and with no transformation to heavily-afflicted state, but with men the change is to heavily afflicted and ready to give birth immediately. Final scene is they’ve settled into their new lives and Josh/Jessie and Jon/Tiffany are cuddling together in bed watching a romance movie talking, and then Karyn joins the conversation indicating she’s there in the bed eith them and then finally Sarah tells them all to quiet because she’s trying to watch the movie, indicating all four of them are crowded together in bed. A bit ofblight-hearted affection and teasing and it’s the end

I don't know there's been this recent sitewide uptick in romance between Karyn and Jon (well, replacement-Jon here) but I am 100,000% here for it!

I really want to say, you may not have thought about this, but this also really goes against what was already established for Karyn in the first chapter. She was very negative about human male sexuality, showing contempt for and reducing all of them to just drooling over women's breasts. I find it hard to believe she'd do a 180 and be pleased and sex-positive with Jon doing sexual things, she'd be much more likely to react with contempt and something like "you're just like all the rest of them after all". In fact in light of what she does think of members of the male sex, I find it hard to understand how she could have ever have become friends with a boy in the first place. Maybe it would have been better to ditch Karyn as the target of Jon's interactions here. He's not Romeo and she's not Juliet. They are not soulmates and when one or both of them have power, they wouldn't be likely to get along for long, and I would expect Jon being anything more than a eunuch in front of her would set this off. He may think favorably about her but remember they're still "friends" after being childhood friends yet she's very ardently negative toward human male sexuality. It paints a picture to me. In most of my own stories I have pushed Karyn to being secondary or not good-intentioned for this reason.

Well, Storyflies are their own beings, think of like a more simple minded version of the characters they represent. Appeal to that being and they will give their power to you. You could appeal to a fly that has a character you have no connection to by putting on an act as well, however wether that works depends how well an actor you are. Honestly you could call this a "Theater's kid" Omnitrix haha.

Thanks. Well, I think Rebecca is being modest and just finding an ‘excuse’ for being confident, and turning into someone that knows almost everything is a surprising way to start feeling that confidence. She’s just very close to her character and she put a lot of thought before attempting it. I envision her as a special case since the locket was given to her, no doubt she was psychologically assessed and deemed stable and compatible… and her desire is surpassingly modest. It’s not outside human capability to do what she does… at least with a small group. She is following the mantra of helping others though I did want to make sure it was a place she could reasonably interact with people…

Though I’m a bit unsure on how the powers transfer. I imagine it would be the characters the owner feels close to not necessarily the new person … so … hopefully some shenanigans…

It’s an intriguing idea here but it’s just too many chapters for nothing really new happening with no conflict, no danger. Just 2 kids doing sexual stuff together normal people could never experience IMHO is good for a chapter or two, but not 20. It would be a much better story if they had lost control of the stone or a wish had gone wrong in a way that was possible but extremely inconvenient to fix and they were potentially going to be stuck that way forever, if they had to make some sacrifice, if they truly got stuck that way and had to cope, just for something different to happen in all this.

Oh wow this was a pleasant surprise, really flattered you decided to try out my branch, and I see you're really taking it places already. Sam being this knowledge seeker but firmly set in reality, completely unaware of anything internet makes for a pretty interesting protagonist for something that relies on fiction. Also Rebecca expressing herself through a character that boosts not only her abilities but her confidence is a really interesting plot point, wonder how that will develop. Admittedly, I never intended for the Locket to give access to the character's personality as I envisioned the "play into the role" aspect would form part into the storyflies appeal system, but I can't deny the idea of "voluntary access to a character's personality" is mighty interesting into it what it could also put on the table as well.

No worries, this wasn't really confusing.
(I tried phrasing it in a way that wouldn't sound sarcastic, though I might've ended up sounding weird/"ESL-y" instead)

It's not often that FtM gets the same treatment as MtF normally does in terms of writing. Usually it's either not really elaborated on or it feels like something to contrast the other transformation.

I'm not saying it's amazing or anything, but it's a nice little breath of freah air.

And that's why ultra-advanced, sentient AI is/will be a mistake, at least in terms of ethics.

"Pandora's box had been opened and it was for sale, as is.

Sleep tight Jon.

Your perfect wish has given us a garage sale for the ages."

That's a really creepy note to end a chapter on. o_o

Very interesting. I wonder how all this will play out.

"Jon’s penis sprung free, standing proud"

Me: (tries his hardest to resist singing "Stand Proud" from JoJo part 3) 😫

Thank you both! I didn't plan on taking a year break, but stepping away from it allowed me to reset my brain and I'm hoping to take the story further than I had originally had planned to take it. So we'll see where it goes. I will say writing a story that continually dips into the past which is constantly shifting and changing requires lots of notes... So many notes after each chapter...

Always look at the positives in your life! Now if only I listened to that advice, that would've been great...

What a Treat! This story never fails to impress, Jo has a great life, and once she realises that, she will understand what a gift Sarah has given her.

How the turn tables! Great chapter, loved to see that little dip into Jon's past after such a big change, a little hint of an emotional outburst, and Jon's realization that this step backwards may have just unlocked the ability to take some giant leaps forward. This is one of my favorite threads on the site and I'm so happy to see it return from its absence without missing a beat. Very excited to see what happens next!

These scenarios seem like they could be a lot more tricky than most of the writers realize, so I've included some of these thoughts into the storyline here.

cant wait for more of this story

Hey lifesmainantagonist.
I see you've been posting quite a bit in the past few months. That's really cool. I'll share a bit about this community. It's pretty old, literally being founded the summer of 2000. There's some really brilliant writers on here, and every now and then we strike a great synergy and start collaborating on bigger projects. Compared to other sites, the view to feedback ratio is really good, but as I'm sure you see, we don't get as many regular viewers.

Some things that might help you get more feedback is to collaborate with other authors on more recent branches. Give feedback of your own, but stay positive and bounce ideas around. People write for fun, not as a second job.

It seems like a lot of your posts are on chapters that are a decade old or older. Try adding few chapters to other peoples branches.

I can understand how it could be frustrating to feel like you're posting into a void, but if you're just looking for as many views as possible, this probably isn't the best site.

As for "upvoting" our own stuff. XD We all had a big chat about that a while ago when Phoenix updated the rating system. If we feel like we posted a banger, yeah, we'll upvote our own stuff as a self pat on the back, but we're not really a "like" driven community. Of course it's nice when we get feedback, but most of us write because we love it, plain and simple.

All right Lucus. You're lucky I checked back one last time because I was going to end my relationship with this website. But for your reference I came to that conclusion because when my stuff doesn't get any upvotes and everyone else's submissions submitted at about the same time does, my conclusion is no one cares. But most of them are probably just upvoting their own content and any real readers maybe don't bother even if they read something they like, or maybe save it to favorites instead.

Hey, I'm reading it.

well I’m stopping here, no one’s reading it or cares anyway

"I don't think I can wish her back to life,"

You sure? I don't see a reason why either you - the writer - or the charaters would think it wouldn't be possible. It's not like Jon directly wished for Sarah to die, it's just a consequence of his use of the swapping power. If he can wish to change the reason of her death, I'm sure he'd be able to wish her back to life/she never died at all... though I'm not sure how she'd react and/or if it's a good idea.

Point is: there's nothing in-universe that would suggest you can't wish people back to life.

Then again, this WAS made in 2009...

Thanks Zelo! Hope you enjoy!

WOAB WOAH WOAH that went from 0 to 100 really fast at the end. o_o Guess she is still a bitch after all.

"Then why does it feel so alien to me?"

And why do I find it SO hot? I mean, I know I'm apparently into unaware, body part swaps with sexual (under?)tones now after reading that one story on DeviantArt, but still - this much? Is it just because it's new and good?

A-anyway, really looking foward to next chapter, whenever that may be, though with how recent this one is, I'm having good hopes. 😄

Wow. That was a really nice "branch-opening" episode. Definitely got me interested for what's to come.

I guess "Pbly" could actually be either possibly or probably. Actually it could even be "impossibly" or "improbably" but maybe that would be better shortened to mply and it wouldn't fit the context. It could be tricky to write for this in a way that isn't ambiguous. Any long words stand to be a real problem. I did split newscaster into 2 words intentionally for that reason.

Hmm wonder how this would bode for data storage.

Really? I thought it was only the last sentence that wasn’t self-explanatory. Maybe “dmtd” for “admitted”. But here it is:

Just then, the phone rang. Jon picked it up.

“Jon. what did you do?!” It was Karyn.

“I don’t know!” Jon answered.

“Did you make every word four letters long Jon?!”

“Probably,” he admitted. He turned on the television.

The news caster was talking about total chaos. The nasdaq had fallen 9999 points, war was brewing as people thought it was a sign of the end times. No one could explain what was happening. It was a phenomenon without precedent.

Can we get a translation for the whole thing.

The last sentence is “It was a phenomenon without precedent” in case you’re wondering.

Swap with Jon's life. lol. Give Nadine the stone.

Yes, but sometimes they like to hang around Hot Topic at the mall...what corporate sellouts.

I think the Occult Shop has also turned up in other stories and branches patroned by the original Goths (Athena and the rest). It's good to see that the new Goths also believe in supporting local businesses. :)

Of course that whole 2 DNA pattern thing from "The Fly" doesn't make any sense when you consider humans are loaded with live bacteria, and the remnants of food they've eaten, if it doesn't need to be the DNA in live cells, and any invaders in their blood or tissues, and any microorganisms or mites on their skin.

The wholesomeness of the human arc here in contrast with the depravity of the demon arc here is actually absolutely wonderful. Fingers crossed that somehow they meet someday!

Poor Jasmine, her requests are so genuine.

Sorry you don't like it. I know this is easily the most kink or even offputting story I've written in a while. It's not a friendly drama or slice of life like stuff I've tried to write in the past.

Good luck with the story tho.

Yeah sorry Perri gonna have to hop off here, really not my thing.

Thanks. haha. Honestly I'm not sure where the inspiration is coming from.

Dude you're on FIRE lately. Keep up the good work!

If I were in this situation, I'd be looking for something I could use as a blindfold, so I could avoid seeing a group of people I don't want to be like. Of course, the drawback to that would be that people would be asking all sorts of questions about why I'm covering my eyes, and I'd be afraid that if I told them there were magic sticky notes that placed curses on the people who read them, they'd think I was crazy or something.

Okay, here's an 'in universe' comment from a fan of KS Chronicles.

KSFANGIRL30: This new revamped season (Junior Year take two?) is off to a great start. New girl Julia seems like she has the potential to shake up the dynamics a bit. Nice to see Karyn interacting with more people now, and I was pleasantly surprised to see her meet with Zoe in the hall. With Jon out of the picture, Zoe needs more people to interact with outside of Athena and the Goth crowd. (Don't get me wrong, Athena's awesome, but Zoe needs to do more than just give Athena another Goth to talk to - Zelda and Sabrina already fill that role). As for Rebecca, Karyn seems to be avoiding her, which makes me wonder just how big a role Rebecca's going to play: Maybe some people overhyped her importance? Oh, and it's good to see more of characters like Yuki who haven't had much screentime.

(out of universe now): All in all, pretty great stuff. Wondering what further twists will occur both in the KS Chronicles show and behind the scenes.

Haha. Yeah. That was the goal. I definitely borrowed a bit from the pulpy side of the metal scene. In the original concept, he was going to be summoned by a metal head, rather than a nerd. I thought the nerd gave more creative kink opportunities, while the metal head would just be more sexual.