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So much worldbuilding. I applaud it, my man!

Fair enough, I'll add that in the next chapter as she gets a better look at herself. That chapter had a planned description of the genie version of Linda too, so that's easy enough to add in. Jon will also have a human passing form without the blue skin.

Interesting idea. However, I think it'd be good to have a written description of Jon's new form, instead of relying on a picture.That way, if the picture doesn't appear for whatever reason, we still know what the genie looks like.

Ugh, sometimes I feel my reach exceeds my grasp with this branch, doing five simultaneous swaps. Mostly I've been bouncing between the Alyssa/Jon stuff and the other four, but to a degree I kinda wish I'd done this branch as just those two swapping.

Current plan is for Jon to switch with Fiona, Leonard with Elaina, Karyn with Mr. McMillan, Kyla with Susan and Lily with Stu.

Ah no they do! I just didn’t make it clear. What I meant is they don’t remember what was going on in their new lives. I’ll revise it to make that clearer.

I personally don't like the fact that they don't remember their former lives, but this is a brilliant concept with a lot of potential!

Loved this episode!

Looks like between Gladys' stunning weight loss and the confrontation between Nadine and Sarah, the school's population is going to have a lot to talk about and gossip about between classes. And so much mystery here. What is this new church and the Cotierettes all about? We'll have to wait and see.

A good start to a potentially interesting storyline.

I mean, it isn't the direction I would have taken but it's cool, I had no intentions of getting involved with the crazy world of Bible bashers be my guest and have fun, I will be watching to see how this works out.

Love where you’re going with this

No other students, so basically any adult in Lakeview. Hopefully a few different types of people.

Does it have any restriction on who can swap?

I have a few ideas already, but I'm curious if anyone has any suggestions for who to pair with the students.

Thanks Mira, I will try to write more, I have the whole thing mapped out in my head up to a point, I have maybe two other girls I want to change Jon into as well, but I will have to think about this a bit more, do you have any suggestions?

Wow, this has been a roller coaster Sage. Honestly loving it. :D Keep em coming!

It's back at last!

Thanks, glad you’re enjoying. I’m glad the explanation came across well. Was struggling a bit with a way to put it into words. And yeah, I’ve been itching to get to this point, that’s why I’ve been worried about the previous chapters pacing.

Thanks, I thought it was a fun premise!

Wow, a bunch of chapters in a row :). That's really nice. I loved the scene with Jon and Karyn and also the nice use of pic to depict Laura's bath. Lydias transformation is also very interesting! This chapter, however, was arguably the most important one, because now you revealed to us, readers, what is really happening and what is you plan. And I think it was the most clever path to follow: making them switch roles, wih a full transformation, but keeping some aspects of their former selves is way more interesting than the full body swap that would return us to the status quo. The fact that they all will sleep "in the proper beds" will lead to some very hot scenes, right? ;) Can't wait :)

Sometimes I wish I could upvote an episode more than once... Just the usual stamp of approval doesn't always cut it, like here.

Nice! I like how you took my original story ball and ran with it.

I’m so glad someone is bringing back this branch.

It's only been twice so far, but I'd say bad luck?

Why does she keep missing?

Suspense...

Can't wait to see what happens in the morning...

I've got to be honest - until last night, I had no idea what a "Karen" was. It's kind of a funny weird story there. I saw that you posted this episode, but I didn't have a chance to read it, because I was heading into work. At work, a co-worker just happened to mention that someone was a "Karen" and I recalled back to this episode, that I hadn't read yet. She explained what it meant, finding it astonishing that I hadn't heard of it before. I just thought it was a weird coincidence that she was talking about something that had to do with your episode, without me even saying anything about it. I occasionally do talk about some of my stories to my co-workers, but I get the idea that they aren't too interested. They're far more interested in discussing whatever video game they're currently playing.

This pace certainly feels really good to me ;)

Ah thanks, means a lot, been doubting myself a bit recently, and I’ve been worried I’ve been moving things a little too slowly, or too fast at some points

It's one of my favorite too and what I love most about this site. And you are really talented in delivering that with your writing. Not everybody can pull it off and few can write them in such a high level, advancing the plot and delivering hot and subtle slow changes each chapter.

I wonder if Karyn and Simon are having similar struggles about not being able to relate with Laura and Jon. And also Simon/Zoe interactions in the bathtub. Either way, I guess this will be an interesting night for all of them :)

Very nice approach of highlighting Jon's maturity with his insight of "you have to find people who can relate to their situation", as it can be a nice way to develop the development of both houses, with John/Sarah, Linda/Susan. It might be a problem when cheerleader Biff starts to bully Zoe and Simon :)

Thanks, it’s one of my favourite types of transformation, especially when they don’t realise it happening

Ooooh... fun time for Laura and Jon. I can only imagine Zoe and Simon's interactions too, especially in the tub. Wonder if they will do awkward dance "will them, won't them" that original Jon and Karyn had, especially giving the fact that Zoe is apparently more confident and likely to use her new tool than the old John :)

Love the "removing wedding rings scenes". You are really nailing it in terms of slow, but sure, changes for everyone :)

I just love those branches. You two are awesome!!! Thanks so much for writing !

No problem with your way... just while I keep using inspiration from your branch, I think we'll continue to diverge.

Is that a good or a bad thing? I’m enjoying the direction you’re taking the story, I’ve just got a good plan of where I want this to go.

I think I'm going in a somewhat different direction than you are.

Good to see you back!

LOVE seeing how this is escalating for people. Really looking forward to seeing how Lydia is getting along with her playdate, lol.

Glad to have you back.

Excited to see who else John runs into

SimCity is one of my favorite games.

If the wolves got to have fangs, why didn't the bunny get bunny teeth?

Hey Dante, lost my password too! I hope to get back to writing with this account but I don't have the time I used to

Will do.

Damn I lost my password for almost two years, but I saw it, cool stuff!

This must have been back when I used pictures instead of descriptions. And now the pictures are gone, so no one (not even me - 2005 was a LONG time ago) knows how these characters look, now that they've become gothic versions of themselves. Oh well.

Id love to see an update