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I copied and pasted the last paragraph from the previous episode, to give this continuation a bit of context. Since this cliffhanger had been there for over a decade teasing how Athena might be the key to making things better for those affected by the horrific outcome of the Charity Stone's wishes, I thought it okay to write my take on where the story might go from there.

I couldn't resist including references to McMillan Tech Industries characters I introduced in my Transformation Guns stories (just about everyone except Richard McMillan and Samantha Duncan made their first Fiction Branches appearances there. Lake Point High School's drama club student and critic Starla Stanfield also debuted there, and has gone on to play a significant role in my Wishing Coins episodes). And it made sense to me that Samantha Duncan and her friends from Research and Development would be among those trying to stop the disaster before it happened.

I also managed to work in a way for both the Gibson and Madison surnames for Jon and Zoe's family to co-exist.

Anyway, I'll probably get back to this soon, as I already have an idea as to who Athena could contact to find out more about how the current situation came to be. That person is another already existing quasi-canon character who we don't see very often.

There are 3 things here now that I think about it that may be seen as errors. Jon should get two changes if he makes the wish and he is one of the objects of the wish. The bicycle was just a bicycle and though it was theoretically for him he was just creating a bicycle and it wasn’t affecting his person. The second thing is, what “stone” is “from the time we both saw the stone” referring to? The animal stone? If so, Karyn shouldn’t remember him not having a pouch because that was before she first saw it. He didn’t say “the first stone”, he just said “the stone” and the animal stone should have taken it to be referring to itself, but it had apparently interpreted it to mean the first stone for some reason. Of course Jon didn’t know there were 2 stones at the time but if making a wish about “the stone” without being specific the current stone should assume it’s referring to itself. And the third thing is that he wished for a brand new bicycle. So it shouldn’t have retconned the bicycle into his life 3 months earlier. It may have been new 3 months ago but if he wishes for a new bicycle it should be a new bicycle when he wishes for it. I guess these may seem like nitpicky things but if I see something well written otherwise but missing on such details I just wanted to leave a note for the writer should he by any chance ever see it.

A recipe for disaster? I think so, too. After reading a lot of the branches involving the Obvious Stone and the Proximity Stone and seeing the trouble THOSE stones cause, I was wondering what would happen if you had a combination of those stones. This episode is the starting point for many possibilities as to what could happen as a result of someone using the Obvious Proximity Stone.

A recipe for disaster for sure.

What, no one got the idea of him making a wish, it going wrong and him wishing that he knew what was happening and then forgetting all about the stone. Or at least that’s what happened in a similar situation here: https://www.deviantart.com/samusemblem/art/The-Opposite-Day-Genie-183720189

How do shoes make him shorter?

Why would changing someone's shoe size do anything to their height?

I guess it made her more evil and less intelligent since the most likely explanation (even if it’s incorrect) is that he had her in his room to fix her problems as a pleasant surprise when she woke up.

all 3 of them are the same thing and this one has turned into pure cancer

@lifesmainantagonist Indeed, this is one of the darker scenarios within Fiction Branches. As far as the Charity Stone goes, its function is to give a free wish to whoever was a target of a wish someone made while holding the Charity Stone (free wish meaning they don't have to be holding the Charity Stone, or know it exists, or be anywhere in its immediate vicinity, for their wish to be granted). So even though the name of this particular imitation of the wishing stone might SOUND nice, wishes made from it don't necessarily have to have nice outcomes. Like the regular wishing stone, poorly thought out wishes can lead to dangerous consequences.

Let's hope so... Jo seems like a good person, with a surprisingly horrible curse.
Btw when I started writing this in 2022, I had no idea that things would work out this way. But the more I write and think about Jo's situation the more this turns into a Monkey's Paw story.

very brutal continual rewriting of history; the charity stone wasn’t very charitable

Will she ever find happiness? 😭

@lifesmainantagonist I suppose, since he specifically used the word "wish", the stone could've interpreted it as "wishing with the stone" - normally you can't make contradictory wishes, but this would allow you to bypass thar limitation. At least that's the only explainaition I could think of that would prevent what you said from happening.

On a semi-related note, I'm surprised how well-written and entertaining this is, considering the strange, (most likely) fetish-fueled concept. I guess it's the execution that counts, not the idea.

"Bizarre punishment" indeed. 😳

Has Jon completely just forgotten that he can just end this at any time by wishing it was over without even being in contact with the stone? Because that’s what he wished for in part 3 of this chain. Or does he know this all too well and he just is playing Karyn? What we need is some additional thing to anchor him to this reality so that he can’t just end it when he gets bored with it, or at least strongly motivates him not to do so.

I knew it!

I absolutely love this! A small novel in length and really about nothing super dramatic but sweet and endearing and Slice-of-life, wel done, after you have recovered I look forward to more of the same

An idea if someone continued it - the shadowy figure wishes that any animal parts wished back to the human counterparts would revert after 20 days; so the next morning Jon gets his kangaroo ears back (pretty hard to believe he supposedly looked at them and said “those are kangaroo ears” but ok) and Karyn gets her hoofs back, and they decide to take action.

Yet another one from the first week of June 2008. It’s probably all one guy with a lot of different aliases.

Anyone here on this page, I recommend you go with the second branch, “Animal Stone: The next day, and onwards”, it’s written by the same guy and much better than the first one.

Look at that, over two years later and the same guy comes back to write the next chapter. I guess that’s kind of dedication, but he didn’t really resolve it, though he left it in a position that would be good for someone else to come along and write it. It’s a nice set up.

Mystichobo sure does have a one track mind doesn’t he. As a standalone piece his stuff is intriguing, but only one of them, because they’re all pretty much identical, at least all the ones I’ve run into haven’t had a lot of variety.

The problem is you just completely erased the character one bit at a time, it makes the beginning of the story weak when taken as a whole. It’s almost like you had this thing written and you just modified it as little as possible to fit it in here with the story with Jon and the wishing rock. It’s rather hard to believe that he would do this to be honest, to casually permanently and completely overwrite himself with a female jewel thief with fox ears and a tail and a crippling accent without at any point having a shred of doubt in the process.

Well this was a weird adventure. And I found it just by randomly searching “licorice”.

Anyway anyone here, you might be interested in this:

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shorts_(2009_film)

It’s basically this, but made into a movie. By that I don’t mean it is directly this; it doesn’t have these characters but the premise is the same, a wishing stone with godlike power that is used in the same way (except I think it doesn't even have any limitations at all, wishes can be undone), and the same sort of things happen from wishes gone wrong, like at one point two people get conjoined to each other, at another, they summon tiny aliens. It’s all set in a gated community run by a company run by a totalitarian tyrannical madman, that makes all-in-one devices (so basically next generation iphone) but of course with the wishing stone that literally is an everything in one device, there is a mad scramble and battle over control of the stone. I don’t remember it that well because I saw it in 2010 but it was definitely the best movie I saw that year. Not that it had a lot of competition.

Hi The Guest , Can you continue to write about what happened to Tomi? I love what you write

Bruh moment

I like how this is truly an ending and a shitpost and the creator of this page only made this one thing and nothing else and probably spent a total of 10 minutes on this website ever and yet it got 63 replies so far (though starting from one of the names I’m really trying to avoid). So here you go BonoboMonkey, your first and only upvote, from me to you.

Once again, excellent job on the writing. Reading about Jon's new, girly (and occasionally pleasant) experiences... it actually made me feel a little warm inside! I even tried putting my legs together like s/he was told to.

Uh, I swear I'm not trans! 😳 Just curious!

A-anyway, looking forward to the next chapter, whenever that will be!

Added a few chapters

I wonder how much of "being in collage" Jon copied. Did it just take "Jon is now a college student" and go from there, based on how Jon would act? Or did it also take other aspects from the girl he copied it from, like where he studied and who his roommate is? Obviously, as time went on, his life became more and more different from "now" due to all of the changes stacking on top of eachother, but at the time of this chapter, how much of Jon's new life is his own?

hello? testing comments

A real class act guy, his first inclination on first contact with another sentient species being kidnapping and slavery. I wonder what his plan is here, does he just think that he can just sell her or does he have his own circus or what?

I think since then, Gibson seems to be the preferred last name for Jon. Madison is still used only in continuations of branches/stories where it was previously established to be his surname. In most branches these days, it's Gibson.

I think maybe this should be broken up into 2 parts. Where it says:

I picked up the stone. “I wish that the revised version of what is on this paper would become real, without modifying history, it just would be true from this point on with her new abilities and the gullibility condition.”

That could have very well created another android right then and there for Jon, because he isn't saying that it would apply to Stephanie. I don't know though. It would need a new title, and then the next chapter would be everything after that and that would get the title of "Being Fair to Karyn", and then there would be the opportunity to have 2 versions, one where it generates a new android girl right then and there, and one where it proceeds with the story as originally written, and it really wouldn't be fair to the 3 who upvoted (wow 3 upvotes that's rare for my stories) it as it is.

If someone else eventually wants to just copy the story of this chapter up to that point to then have it separate into the possibility where the stone creates another android girl for Jon and have it as a chapter parallel to this one, you have my permission.

I too am curious. At first I thought this would be a normal-ish world but I’m kinda glad there is the implication of some exotic biology out there, at least I certainly hope so. I wonder about Sarah too …

Girl Jon is cute. Knight in shining armor indeed. Hope to see more.

Would be neat to see Fiona grew a duplicate of her waist up in place of a would-be cock. Having the limbs and dexterity to move around and all but instead of being normal, the entire torso is just sensitive and is practically a giant penis.

Would be neat to see Fiona grew a duplicate of her waist up in place of a would-be cock. Having the limbs and dexterity to move around and all but instead of being normal, the entire torso is just sensitive and is practically a giant penis.

Jon Madison. That’s terrible. Might as well name him George Washington or Ronald Reagan if you’re going to name him Jon Madison. I don’t think I like any of them tbh.

It is better to take the time to make wishes to fix things then rush into them.

@Bunnie I assume they meant "fetal position".

What's a feral position?

I have a feeling I might know what's going on here...
But on the other hand, the physical evidence I'd expect seems absent so far, so maybe not...
Dang it, looks like I have no choice but to keep reading!

Gooose, any chance that we might see any more from this story? Was thoroughly enjoying it as you were writing it a few months ago

Well, the jury's still out... ;)

Hey, that was pretty nicely written for a simple MTF. 👍

(though I will admit it took me an embarrassingly long time to realise what "that time of the month" meant :/)

I hope this isn't an Alive situation...

So I guess cause of Jane new age of 29, she is actually Linda's stepmom, I wonder who is Linda's mom in this new reality and what happened to her.

Now I am curious on where the Kylo will take this, also where future authors will go from here and how that will differentiate from Kylo take.