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Going to try some more mixed media stuff, so going to include a song to go with the reading. The chef recommends https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9Fwh7c6UT0U
Also trying out some AI art. I'll probably still use real life pics when necessary. The only thing I can promise is that I won't be consistent in the least bit.

This is about the extent of what I have planned concretely for now. Hopefully, it gets across everything y'all need to know about this concept, if anyone feels like running with it.

Been a long time, huh? Something big happened irl that's kept me away from writing for the past few months, but hopefully now I can start getting back in the habit. Starting off with something a lot lewder than normal for me, too.

Not sure where I'm going with this, just felt the desire to write.

True. Gooose’s branches are one of the best. Hope to see more from them

Great start! Can't wait to read more.

Thanks for the kind words. This was relatively early in the storyline. I thought it would be a great idea having multiple DTH Jons and Karyns have events play out differently based on butterfly effect/chaos theory. Unfortunately it gets too confusing keeping track. (At one point, I posted a diagram to discord). I managed to reintegrate them quite quickly and keep the storyline generally focused on the prime Jon and Karyn. I can still call on the alternate versions as required.

LOL. The 'flower petal' dimension is now an important part of DTH lore.

This was early days for the DTH and I hadn't quite settled on the mechanics of time travel. It is very easy to get yourself tied in knots with causality. I tend to keep it simple now and avoid paradoxes by creating a new dimension each time they go back up a timeline. That way nothing contradicts with Jon and Karyn's memories which are immutable.

Agreed another great chapter. Gooose's posts are always some of my favorite and this thread is no exception.

Creative honestly

NO! YOU CREATED AN INFINITE LOOP YOU FOOF-

I wonder if this is a case of a "stable time loop"? We shall see...

Great, the first choice ("Hop 3 - Jon is stumped") and I'm already confused 😵. Fantastic branch concept though, love how it sort of leans on the fourth wall (you're literally jumpping between other branches). Already looks like lots of fun.

I am still keen to continue the storyline. I have a few possible timelines in mind. I am trying to keep it kind of original without retreading old plot ideas. The extended multiverse is Chompy's Multi-dimension gun on the TDB. It starts here https://fictionbranches.net/fb/story/4858866 . I am keeping it open as an option for a possible multiverse to visit that is distinct from the magic stone timelines.

Sorry about the delay in my response, I've been busy IRL. Thank you for the kind words.

This is just a fantastic showcase of mindset through dialogue. I love how you wrote Jon here and can hear this conversation so crystal clear. Everything is I did this, I broke up with him, but Biff cheated on you. I'm betting if Jon got to expand on that statement, he'd be sure to let Sarah know there was no chance of that happening if he was in the driver seat sooner.

Another fantastic piece of writing, you always nail the little details. Can't wait for the next add!

Insane branch that I'd recommend reading. Lots of branching timeline stuff in weird ways. It's also not smut like most of the branches on the site, which is an interesting change of pace.

This is an interesting branch. Curious to see where it's going and what this extended multiverse from last chapter is.

This branch is absolutely insane and I love it

Thank you, lifesmainantagonist.

Your comment so perfectly sums up the vibe I was feeling when I wrote that chapter. For people of a certain age the mall was such a staple of life. You could shop, hang out with friends, watch a movie, get something to eat, etc... Seeing so many malls today that are on the brink of failure does make me pine for the good ole days. I'm sure that people who lived before the rise of the shopping mall feel the same way about city centers and "down towns". Vibrant down towns were slowly killed by the rise of the shopping mall, just like the internet is slowly killing the shopping mall.

I love blogs. And webrings. And guestbooks. I miss the classic web.

@Ms-Scarlett-Raven, Presumably everyone else who's in this particular Computer Science class, but I suppose anyone for whom having a blog might be convenient to the plot may have their own blog.

I started learning to write early days as Xyzzy then Xyzzy2 when I lost the account. Looking back some of it is quite cringe worthy. I have 3 old stories on Fictionmania (Virtual Vacation, Virtual Vacation 2, and The Inheritance). The first of which I didn't even understand starting a new paragraph for a speaker change.

I gathered together one of my long sequences of Altered Fates branches and reformatted and completed it as a short novel and e-book experiment. It's available as a free e-book from Smashwords: "Shrink Racked" by Jaime Sparkz.

Currently I'm working on another e-book and I'm in the worst stage for me, the wrap up. So far I'm around 160 pages. Maybe by year end?

At any rate, feel free to jump in anywhere!

Does anyone else in the school have blog of their own?

@The_Guest, honestly I just really wanted to write some Jocelynne in first-person without breaking the third-person narrative flow, and was like "how can I justify a giant monologue to nobody while she's still in school?" :-p

I'm happy to know in Lake Point, people still blog.

Great stuff. I saw one of your earlier comments that you use FB as an anti-block tool when you write other stories. Is your other work similar and if so, where can I find it?

Picture changed and text amended to reflect this. I must have missed it the first time round

Adding this comment just to say: the AI image could be better, because 3 arms

I'm going in another direction, but please continue this.

Thank you for the explanation on that.

Also I wanted to say, I thought about having “we” to include Jon and having it not count that he’s already a part of Karyn’s body and having Karyn grow 2 tails in place of her nipples in addition to a “normal” tail, but didn’t put that in because although that would be an interesting twist, I didn’t think it actually had any potential to any future plot to needlessly leave her with tentacle nipples. But in case anyone wants to make further chapters and might want to use that idea, the idea hasn’t necessarily been written out, Karyn could just be hiding it from Sarah who hasn’t actually looked up at her upper body or something.

Since I wrote this...a novel and a TV show are now named Dark Matter.

I can't wait to see what additional changes Nicole makes

@Ms. Cork - I'd wonder what normal people would make of that, but then I don't imagine normal people coming 'round my gallery in the first place XD

I love how, without any context, the title "Jon the Entirely Normal Girl" makes less and less sense for that picture with every word you read. But within the context of that branch, it works.

At the risk of gushing, what a wonderful use of parallelism as a method of narrative framing and storytelling -- it doesn't merely provide comparisons, or even continuity, but instead carries the theme and the story forward.

"Nicole's whimsical control."

I guess that's technically correct, since Nicole is just pursuing any whim she has at the moment without considering the consequences, but I'd call her cruel.

All hail this excellent story, turning themes familiar to these archetype characters on its head jn new and sexy ways.

So according to the ID card Jon would still be attracted to girls right?

Can't wait to see where you go with it! Recently been thinking about adding again, myself.

your story is very interesting. I hope you continue

I’m wondering if Karyn is so far gone that she would use the stone if something is even slightly wrong with her relationship with Jon in her perspective

A4 equivalent in the US is letter sized paper.

A land that is a mix of the U.S and the U.K I am from the U.K so some of the details of U.S life I may get a little out.

A4? Where is this set?

I can easily relate to this one. I've seen malls I've known from my childhood suffer similar fates (some worse than others). Even though you know why it's happening (changing economic situations, brick and mortar stores facing competition from online retailers, the end of many 'anchor store' chains, failure to adapt with the times), it's still sad to see a once lively and thriving shopping mall become a shell of its former self, sometimes with whole sections full of empty store locations. Some malls that aren't as dependent on 'anchor stores' might fare better than those that had three or four but are reduced to one, but the fact remains that malls aren't what they used to be. A lot of book store and music store chains that were fixtures of malls are just fond memories of years gone by now.

It can be strange to be sad about a shopping mall's decline, but some of us still get nostalgic about them and wish they could become more like the thriving busy places we remember.

I like the way of ending the episode, with a note of ambiguity. If Jon accidentally spoke that wish out loud and didn't know the stone had returned, there are so many different ways the wish could be interpreted. So it's not surprising there's already multiple branches from this episode.

This is great! Really like how you have Jon playing with each individual compulsion.

Thanks. Yeah it’s a mostly benign enforcer of the rules. the rules are fuzzy though and I think each arbiter has its own measure of right and wrong … exceptions may even be possible.