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I like the premise of this chapter, seems to be taking the monkey paw effect to a more extreme case than whats usually seen in other chapters.

Reading the other comments I'm not sure what misogyny there is in this chapter, but Jon disagreeing with Karyn is not misogynistic.

I go against the current and I vote for indecision

Agreed with Hmm. [Option 2]

Whoa, whoa, whoa, slow down there. You don't have to spend a whole paragraph demonstrating that you don't know what misogyny is, you can just say it in one sentence. It's okay. You're clearly a very young writer. Live and learn. Open your mind to new perspectives, yeah?

Hmm, I feel like this site has SO much 'default' of option 1, that I vote for OPTION 2 because it'd be different and lead to scenarios we haven't seen on this site.

Go ahead!

I'm excited that you are continuing this story line. Is it OK that I branch out from some of the entries?

StellaBones First of all, there is no "misogyny" in this chapter, casual or otherwise. But you apparently were fine with the actual casual misandry in the first chapter, I'm assuming. You want to see real sexism, read the first chapter, particularly what Karyn says about males straight to the face of her male friend. Oh but I'll bet you're just fine with that, aren't you, because it's against males. There's nothing in this chapter that is remotely like that. You are in fact being so absurd in construing misogyny where it isn't present that I wouldn't even have a clue what you were referring to, if you didn't also say "talking down to". Thus, you could only be referring to him standing his ground on his stance on not wishing for money, with him rejecting Karyn's various ideas on the matter. That's not misogyny. She's the one being confrontational, first of all. She goes on the attack against his ideology on not wishing for money, and tries to change his mind. But you know what, if he had a male friend instead of a female one and was having the same discussion on the ethics of wishing for money, I don't even think that I would have written that discussion any differently. It would have been exactly the same. So it's completely gender-neutral. It's just that she happens to be female and he happens to be male. It could have also just as easily been Karyn not wanting to wish for money and Jon trying to convince her to do so, I only made it this way because she established herself to be more reckless in the first chapter, and that's an assessment based on their characters, not their sexes. I didn't write this discussion with their sexes being the tiniest factor in my mind. The problem is you, not this chapter, or my version of Jon's attitude. You just have a problem with a male standing up to or disagreeing with a female, you call THAT misogyny. No, the one that's being sexist here is you. And if you see this reply as me talking down to you, that's a fair assessment, but I want you to know, I'm not talking down to you because you're presumed female because of your username starting with Stella, I'm talking down to you because you are saying rubbish and are oblivious to your own double standards. If a man said something that retarded, I'd talk down to him too.

Option 1
2 is more chaotic but I feel option1 is both easier on Jon and easier for the author to handle

Nice to see this thread get some action, really liked this story.

Option 1 definitely

Option 2 gives more chaos and seems fun. But im afraid how much longer this story will take with even more voting.

Option 1

This might have been an interesting chapter if it wasn't filled with such casual misogyny. Jon doesn't know any of the things that he claims are facts. Why is he talking down to Karyn in such an obnoxious and unlikable manner? Troubling to read.

Option 1

2 sounds very fun, if having a dangerous potential to spin out of control.

@Matisguy Yeah true, just wanted to know if it was a possibility at all. Does Mikey or Jon’s dad exist in this branch? Any plans for Karyn and Sarah?

Seems like option 1 is winning so I will vote for 2

[X] Option 2

Opinion 1

I vote for 2!

@Endless I take suggestions period, but it remains to be seen whether I follow up on them lol

And yes, I think so, but not right away. Some possibilities close themselves off when Jon himself changes, you know?

Choosing Option 1. Also @Matisguy do you take suggestions for future options on this branch? And will there be options including changing Jon himself in the future?

Great stuff! I'm choosing option 1.

Also, as before, the deadline is the weekend.

Left. Sarah's cute and money's good and all, but if Jon isn't the father there are SOOO many ways things could go sideways.

And as for Profile Ideas:

• Linda from this universe, except the profile was apparently made when she was in College and a young, wild party animal.

• Biff, except he's a total femboy. Like, dressed so femininely that its hard to tell its him, or that he's a guy at all if you ignore the bulge.

• Athena. A very dominant and commanding version of Athena, with actual Witchcraft Magic she uses to play with her boytoys.

Vote on which option you wanna see, and Upvote if you like what you see!

Actually, there IS one sentence in the letter that seems to indicate wishes can't be directly undone. It's this line (copied and pasted from the letter).

"but beware for the words of a wish can be reinterpreted but not changed once the breath is over"

So yes, basically wishes can be reinterpreted but not flat out changed once the breath is over and the wish is made. Some branches have used this to deal with Karyn's blonde hair and big breasts, using a wish re-interpretation to make the blonde hair a wig and the breasts false ones as the original wish never explicitly stated they had to be real.

Left

Left

Some ideas for profiles:

• Lesbian Karan: Will John accept a relatively normal version of Karyn at the threat of being turned into a girl?

-An alternative universe version of John himself: What would he swipe himself into?

Left

I know now that I actually made a huge conceptual error in this one. When I went back to create a "cat universe" alternate version of the starting chapter of this series, I realized that actually grandpa's letter didn't indicate that wishes can't be undone. That was something Jon figured out through experiment that was not information in the letter. And I don't think he would have forgotten that the letter doesn't contain such information that he was only able to determine through experimentation. So the best I could do was make the alternate cat universe version of the letter, contain that information even though the original one didn't, so that at least it would make sense that Sarah would understand that it's all permanent, and hope that it seems kind of reasonable that maybe Jon would have forgotten that this information wasn't in the original letter and just luck out that the letter changed from Sarah's wishes to reveal exactly what he was trying to communicate. The problem is that trying to fix this would just require changing too much, discarding so much of this creation to completely change it, and I thought it was just too much.

Feel free to vote on swiping right (accepting the match) or left (rejecting and moving on to a different profile). Also I'd love to hear any feedback, ideas, or suggestions for profiles!

TF coming soon!

I'll admit, I kinda wasn't expecting "To tie the vote or break the tie" to be more important to folks than actually picking 1 or 2.

A tip for you though: if you're going to vote in bad faith, you should probably know that if you delete your comment and change your vote before the deadline, then oh no! Whatever shall I do? Just have to use the new vote then ;-)

(Fr though I'd appreciate if you left a note explaining if you actually mean to vote for what you vote for, or if you're just voting to tie or not to tie)

Ooh what a interesting concept

Oh, is something beyond criticism if it’s more than 10 years old? You’re still apparently here to monitor it even if you haven’t posted a chapter in years. However:

"I wish that when I say the phrase 'you can have it back', the last person I traded parts with will get back what they had before the trade and that I will get back what I had before the trade'

• definitely isn’t asking for it to stack, so if the stone actually gave him what he asked for, then it wouldn’t stack. It’s also balancing an open double quote with a single quote at the end. You could edit it now, and make all the chapters you wrote that followed make sense because the wish would be consistent with your intentions. Or maybe edit it and write another parallel chapter where he uses these exact words and expects it to stack and gets into trouble because he finds out the hard way that it doesn’t. But if you trade back by using the words “you can have it back”, that then becomes “the last trade”. I would say change it to:

"I wish that when I say the phrase 'you can have it back', the last person I traded parts with but not through the use of the words ‘you can have it back’, will get back what they had before the trade and that I will get back what I had before the trade."

• Then if you want, create another chapter with your original wording where he would get in trouble for being imprecise in future installments.

I'm voting indecision

I can't wait for the next part

Don't delete your comments! I take no offense. I've always appreciated your contributions. And to be completely honest I didn't even think about the skirt lol. I just tried to write it as filler text because I like to roughly match word length when contributing. I'm just glad you said you enjoyed it and added to it. I'd much rather you say something even if it's a critique instead of not commenting.

I should say two things. First, this is fictionbranches do whatever. 2. I meant the skirt felt a little unreasonable, like would she really wear something that short? and excuse me if I came off rude. I was actually coming to delete my comment because I changed my mind, but alas.

Thanks for the feedback! I'm not sure about the "whore assumption". Do you mean the mom part? I just meant for the mom to be upset that Esme was being messy. Or if you mean the assumption that the stone was a vibrator, I can understand that. The interpretation is flexible anyway- can just chalk it up to a mom not understanding her teenage daughter very well, and not that Esme would definitely use one. ^_^

I enjoyed this but the only thing I will critique is don't get the assumption that she's a whore. I don't think Mikey would find the hot but perhaps approaching that line. She's not a parody of a woman just very hot. It at least that's how I've tried to portray it.

good timing with that comment, 39 minutes before I posted another chapter. However, it's broken up into key checkpoints rather than one long story that runs to completion, precisely because I wanted someone else to jump in in the middle and put in their own chapter. Don't just sit there as a spectator, saying "I hope you write more". If you want the story to go a certain way, you're supposed to write it, at any point. Take a whack at it.

did write this nearly 15 years ago dude. The original idea was the undos would stack, so it'd get more complicated to reverse things if he kept changing things too much. but i never wrote deep enough to do that, i used the swaps as the the trigger for narrative elementss rather than the narrative itself.

I'm pretty sure that the way this is worded, that it should be like "undo" in notepad, as opposed to, say, ms paint. In other words, if you do 3 trades, and then say "you can have it back" 3 times, it won't undo the 3, it will just undo the last one, redo the last one, and undo the last one again. But I guess the writer didn't understand that and continued to write as if it worked as he intended. If he was wishing with a real magic wish granting item, he would be a clueless protagonist who doesn't understand the real implications of his wish.

opzione 1

interesting so far. hope to see more.

Since the comments are 50/50 I'm voting indecision. Maybe that'll teach Jon to take the stone more seriously for the next question :)

Option 1

2 gotta break that tie