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Insane branch that I'd recommend reading. Lots of branching timeline stuff in weird ways. It's also not smut like most of the branches on the site, which is an interesting change of pace.

By iamweirdo - 2024-06-15 10:34:04

On Dimensional Time Hopper

This is an interesting branch. Curious to see where it's going and what this extended multiverse from last chapter is.

By iamweirdo - 2024-06-15 10:32:32

On DTH: Hop 33 - What to do about Zoe

This branch is absolutely insane and I love it

By iamweirdo - 2024-06-15 08:57:08

On DTH: Hop 15 - It Cannot Be Lost

Thank you, lifesmainantagonist.

By Bunnie - 2024-06-12 15:57:03

On You begin to understand

Your comment so perfectly sums up the vibe I was feeling when I wrote that chapter. For people of a certain age the mall was such a staple of life. You could shop, hang out with friends, watch a movie, get something to eat, etc... Seeing so many malls today that are on the brink of failure does make me pine for the good ole days. I'm sure that people who lived before the rise of the shopping mall feel the same way about city centers and "down towns". Vibrant down towns were slowly killed by the rise of the shopping mall, just like the internet is slowly killing the shopping mall.

By avatar ThisIsNoOne - 2024-06-12 10:30:01

On Jon stops by the Lake Point Mall

I love blogs. And webrings. And guestbooks. I miss the classic web.

By The Guest - 2024-06-10 18:17:15

On Jocelynne's Blog

@Ms-Scarlett-Raven, Presumably everyone else who's in this particular Computer Science class, but I suppose anyone for whom having a blog might be convenient to the plot may have their own blog.

By avatar Ms. Cork - 2024-06-10 10:51:28

On Jocelynne's Blog

I started learning to write early days as Xyzzy then Xyzzy2 when I lost the account. Looking back some of it is quite cringe worthy. I have 3 old stories on Fictionmania (Virtual Vacation, Virtual Vacation 2, and The Inheritance). The first of which I didn't even understand starting a new paragraph for a speaker change.

I gathered together one of my long sequences of Altered Fates branches and reformatted and completed it as a short novel and e-book experiment. It's available as a free e-book from Smashwords: "Shrink Racked" by Jaime Sparkz.

Currently I'm working on another e-book and I'm in the worst stage for me, the wrap up. So far I'm around 160 pages. Maybe by year end?

At any rate, feel free to jump in anywhere!

By avatar LimitedPower - 2024-06-09 22:48:17

On Finding Clothes to Fit

Does anyone else in the school have blog of their own?

By avatar Ms-Scarlett-Raven - 2024-06-09 18:26:36

On Jocelynne's Blog

@The_Guest, honestly I just really wanted to write some Jocelynne in first-person without breaking the third-person narrative flow, and was like "how can I justify a giant monologue to nobody while she's still in school?" :-p

By avatar Ms. Cork - 2024-06-09 16:55:37

On Jocelynne's Blog

I'm happy to know in Lake Point, people still blog.

By The Guest - 2024-06-09 14:34:21

On Jocelynne's Blog

Great stuff. I saw one of your earlier comments that you use FB as an anti-block tool when you write other stories. Is your other work similar and if so, where can I find it?

By hello - 2024-06-09 09:26:37

On Finding Clothes to Fit

Picture changed and text amended to reflect this. I must have missed it the first time round

By avatar Ms-Scarlett-Raven - 2024-06-08 04:24:40

On End Credits

Adding this comment just to say: the AI image could be better, because 3 arms

By comodo50 - 2024-06-07 21:52:32

On End Credits

I'm going in another direction, but please continue this.

By The Guest - 2024-06-04 00:05:29

On Do you Speak The Language?

Thank you for the explanation on that.

Also I wanted to say, I thought about having “we” to include Jon and having it not count that he’s already a part of Karyn’s body and having Karyn grow 2 tails in place of her nipples in addition to a “normal” tail, but didn’t put that in because although that would be an interesting twist, I didn’t think it actually had any potential to any future plot to needlessly leave her with tentacle nipples. But in case anyone wants to make further chapters and might want to use that idea, the idea hasn’t necessarily been written out, Karyn could just be hiding it from Sarah who hasn’t actually looked up at her upper body or something.

By lifesmainantagonist - 2024-06-03 07:37:06

On Karyn, Sarah and a Fluffy Cat

Since I wrote this...a novel and a TV show are now named Dark Matter.

By The Guest - 2024-06-01 23:55:07

On Zoe (2)

I can't wait to see what additional changes Nicole makes

By LadyViolence - 2024-05-29 11:18:43

On Lunch

@Ms. Cork - I'd wonder what normal people would make of that, but then I don't imagine normal people coming 'round my gallery in the first place XD

By nothingsp - 2024-05-29 10:13:47

On "Jon the Entirely Normal Girl" - themed art!

I love how, without any context, the title "Jon the Entirely Normal Girl" makes less and less sense for that picture with every word you read. But within the context of that branch, it works.

By avatar Ms. Cork - 2024-05-29 09:40:04

On "Jon the Entirely Normal Girl" - themed art!

At the risk of gushing, what a wonderful use of parallelism as a method of narrative framing and storytelling -- it doesn't merely provide comparisons, or even continuity, but instead carries the theme and the story forward.

By AnonyMouse - 2024-05-28 15:22:25

On The Evening: Susan and Linda

"Nicole's whimsical control."

I guess that's technically correct, since Nicole is just pursuing any whim she has at the moment without considering the consequences, but I'd call her cruel.

By Archmage9885 - 2024-05-25 19:27:33

On Lunch

All hail this excellent story, turning themes familiar to these archetype characters on its head jn new and sexy ways.

By MrScade - 2024-05-25 19:11:28

On Susan McMillan Comes Home

So according to the ID card Jon would still be attracted to girls right?

By Endless - 2024-05-25 18:23:20

On Back to Cat

Can't wait to see where you go with it! Recently been thinking about adding again, myself.

By yellowlines - 2024-05-25 00:55:08

On Back to Cat

your story is very interesting. I hope you continue

By LadyViolence - 2024-05-22 09:47:29

On Making Jon like guys?

I’m wondering if Karyn is so far gone that she would use the stone if something is even slightly wrong with her relationship with Jon in her perspective

By Endless - 2024-05-21 23:23:21

On Like a Slap to the Face

A4 equivalent in the US is letter sized paper.

By The Guest - 2024-05-17 11:53:47

On Back with Black

A land that is a mix of the U.S and the U.K I am from the U.K so some of the details of U.S life I may get a little out.

By avatar Ms-Scarlett-Raven - 2024-05-17 03:58:47

On Back with Black

A4? Where is this set?

By The Guest - 2024-05-16 18:38:40

On Back with Black

I can easily relate to this one. I've seen malls I've known from my childhood suffer similar fates (some worse than others). Even though you know why it's happening (changing economic situations, brick and mortar stores facing competition from online retailers, the end of many 'anchor store' chains, failure to adapt with the times), it's still sad to see a once lively and thriving shopping mall become a shell of its former self, sometimes with whole sections full of empty store locations. Some malls that aren't as dependent on 'anchor stores' might fare better than those that had three or four but are reduced to one, but the fact remains that malls aren't what they used to be. A lot of book store and music store chains that were fixtures of malls are just fond memories of years gone by now.

It can be strange to be sad about a shopping mall's decline, but some of us still get nostalgic about them and wish they could become more like the thriving busy places we remember.

I like the way of ending the episode, with a note of ambiguity. If Jon accidentally spoke that wish out loud and didn't know the stone had returned, there are so many different ways the wish could be interpreted. So it's not surprising there's already multiple branches from this episode.

By Christine L. - 2024-05-12 21:42:07

On Jon stops by the Lake Point Mall

This is great! Really like how you have Jon playing with each individual compulsion.

By Enjeubleu - 2024-05-12 17:03:03

On Jon tests the compulsions

Thanks. Yeah it’s a mostly benign enforcer of the rules. the rules are fuzzy though and I think each arbiter has its own measure of right and wrong … exceptions may even be possible.

By Chompy - 2024-05-11 18:13:17

On Jeremy and Eliza the snake girl

Sensible regulation. Just a guide saying don't do that.

By Catprog - 2024-05-11 17:39:28

On Jeremy and Eliza the snake girl

This was really good. Wasn’t expecting the two to turn into each other.

By Paula Clark - 2024-05-11 09:50:51

On The New Mrs. Gibson

@AnonyMouse what is it the kids say nowadays? "Game recognizes game"? Thank you for your kind words :)

By avatar Ms. Cork - 2024-05-10 23:16:37

On The New Mrs. Gibson

He really only needed to walk half a mile before returning home because he would have picked up the other half mile in the way back. 😉

By Bunnie - 2024-05-10 18:45:54

On shoes.

This, right here, is why I so appreciate your compliments. This is a great twist on some familiar themes and written engagingly and concisely. So glad to have this thread resume.

By AnonyMouse - 2024-05-10 15:37:10

On The New Mrs. Gibson

@nothingsp Yay!

By Great Sage - 2024-05-06 07:40:13

On Joni and her sister have a talk...

@Great Sage: Well, she won't be making any wishes just yet...her calendar's full tomorrow ;)

By nothingsp - 2024-05-05 11:56:19

On Joni and her sister have a talk...

Welcome back, please stay :D

By Great Sage - 2024-05-05 09:47:18

On One learns more from failing than from succeeding, and even more from doing both.

Splendid and beautiful, I'm now terrified Joni will make a stupid wish that ruins all this adorable wholesomeness

By Great Sage - 2024-05-05 08:40:09

On Joni and her sister have a talk...

Wonderful as always. Your writing makes me want to improve. One of the highlights of my week.

By avatar ZamZam - 2024-05-04 20:38:33

On Joni and her sister have a talk...

Very cute. I do love fairies being fairies…

By Chompy - 2024-05-04 18:33:57

On Robyn the Fairy Princess

Thank you both for the kind words. I sort of went too far and turned this whole thing into a novella, and now I'm basically pruning it down so that it won't be 200 branches deep. The good news is that, subject to minor revisions and major reactions, it's done; the bad news is that I have to revise and redact to get there.

By AnonyMouse - 2024-05-04 11:03:12

On One learns more from failing than from succeeding, and even more from doing both.

Glad to see you back, AnonyMouse. This story is a whirl, but a beautiful whirl. <3

By avatar ZamZam - 2024-05-04 00:16:48

On One learns more from failing than from succeeding, and even more from doing both.

Did not even need to read the chapter before I knew it deserved an upvote. So glad to see this thread getting a new addition after such a long break. Life can get in the way, and that takes priority. But it's good to see you back :)

By avatar Ms. Cork - 2024-05-03 21:42:09

On One learns more from failing than from succeeding, and even more from doing both.

The clothes of an average teenager were made for a sexy little girl?

By Bunnie - 2024-05-03 05:13:29

On options

Heh, thanks. I figured this was a setup that could go in quite a few different directions and build on what Thisisnoone already established with old Jon's life. Hopefully folk will enjoy it.

By Gooose - 2024-05-02 19:20:58

On The Fairy King

Great set up Gooose! Super excited to see where you go with this

By Enjeubleu - 2024-05-01 22:49:07

On The Fairy King

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