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Been waiting for this series to be brought back for a while. Thanks for doing it! You're a really good writer! I've been loving how you've been approaching this story. Can't wait to see what comes next!

Very ptomising, I really like life-swap stories where they maintain their bodies but everyone 'sees' them as someone else.

Very fun! More please!

So this is a kind of life swap, I am guessing?

There’s not that many paths here that does that, so it be cool to see another one.

This is pretty interesting, happy to see where you go with this.

Or maybe turn Karyn into a pervert

I feel like it will be a recurring theme of them not telling each others swaps.

I am enjoying this. I am slightly disappointed we didn't get to find out what the corrective measures are this chapter, but I'm sure we will soon!

This is a very fun start. I like stories where things like the nano-bots 'nudge' someone's behaviour and physical attributes instead of the class full transformation into a woman instantly etc. I like that people can resist a little bit etc.

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Probaly a change Karyn would hate like Karyn being very into shoes or that she likes goes to the salon with Sarah

That part is written, I just need to figure out another change that Sarah will do to Karyn and then I'll have another chapter for ya

A happy ending!? Where Jon stays Jon?

Guess it was about time someone wrote it. :)

Great series, been loving it, with a great ending?

When will you continue the story?

@GQCassie Okay, I get what you mean now. Thanks, that explanation made all the difference

@sget What I would argue is that from Karyn's perspective, because she is one of two people outside the awareness clause in Jon's wish, she doesn't view her relationship with Jon as having been disrupted, right? That's why she was waiting for him to show up for their date in the first place. And the copying has had some flexibility at times when the wording has enabled a grey area - sometimes extending beyond a limited scope - so what copied was the newness of their relationship with each other, and more the overwriting of the relationship that he had been in with Matt. But it's also like in the prop closet, where the copying gave Jon some space in being able to define what decisions he wants to make. It's not perfect but the outcome of Karyn making that statement wasn't going to be exactly clean, either. I just think the result there maybe isn't worth a deep dive into perfecting an outcome versus overwriting a previous copy.

@endless I don't think that would work, given the way the stone has been established in other storylines. But honestly, I've only got about another three chapters in total left here, so if you have ideas, it IS FictionBranches, feel free to branch off at any point and tell your own version!

@GQCassie well they could use the stone to to fix the page when they get a new baseline for Jon. Also are you on discord I wanted to DM you some other questions and ideas?

@GQCassie - I get the intent behind the phrasing, I guess I just don't understand how he can copy a relationship with Karyn off of Karyn. When he copied the relationship off of Kaitlyn, she was dating Matt at the time, and it made sense to me because Matt then treated Jon (presumably) how he would ordinarily treat Kaitlyn. In other words, he got a copy of Kaitlyn's half of an existing relationship. Is Karyn currently considered to be in a relationship right now? I imagined he'd be copying her single status off of her if anything.

In any case, I don't mean to nit-pick. I'm just trying to understand the mechanics.

@endless - she needs to be in the right mind to erase the items. But with the paper ripped, there's no way for them to clear off the past items anymore, thus creating a new baseline that Jon exists in.

@sget - that's Karyn trying to word it to overcome Jon suddenly having a dating history with someone else by overwriting that relationship he had, and trying to not to accidentally create a long dating history between her and Jon at the same time. And thank you!

@Sget I think it’s sort of in the same vein as the copy in “Skipping English Class”. The I need you to be able choose who you are one

"Jon, you need to have just started dating me today, and not be dating anyone else." Wait, how does that work? Karyn didn't start dating herself, how can she copy that to Jon? Love the story so far, by the way

Interesting changes to how the characters are approaching this

I know Karyn thought previously that she can’t be in the right mind until Jon is safe. But cant they just wait until Karyn calms down?

Hope its the same one i think of. While their posts are immune doesnt mean that they themselves are unable to be altered and if one of them causes a significant mental change or changes their name they would be in trouble

As of right now this is all I have written, but there is one flaw that I plan on utilizing in the next bit of the story when I have a chance to write it up. Now I just need to find time to write again.

I can already see some flaws with these rules and I wonder if they will be explored

Welcome back

Nice. Very eager to see this storyline play out

Nice seeing you back. The zoe linda retreat story ended being one of my favs

Will Sarah change Jon during her date with karyn or does she focus on her for the weekend?

A whole day or afternoon of Sarah having Karyn all to herself? Surely nothing could go wrong for Karyn :)
Ultimate revenge for Sarah would be to make Karyn atrracted to her and make it a date then after a few days make Jon aware

I'm glad you approved. It's one of the choices I'm making here that I'm a little worried about what people will think.

Oh interesting. I had taken the right mind part of the wish to mean that Karyn would snap out of any mental hijinks when she was looking at the list. Her not being able to modify things during a panic is fascinating.

You heard it here, folks: Violence is, in fact, sometimes the answer.

Cool choice that you made it so that from Jons perspective it was because of the wishing stone that these changes were made

There's something very appropriately absurd to me about all these stories being magic-driven, and the real answer all along was to just punch someone in the teeth.

When you think about it, we'd all have a lot fewer problems if people would just punch Sarah in the mouth a bit more.

"she'd successfully gotten Karyn back for all the endless comments and micro-aggressions over the years"

At least Sarah can admit to herself that Jon and Karyn have never done anything to her, and her "revenge" is the actual aggression.

I like that it's Karyn coming to save Jon. Most of the time it's Jon doing it. If I was Sarah I would be scared with what Karyn might do to her

Well, Karyn still has the notebook so can easily cross out all the copies Diamond got. It surprises me that Sarah did nothing to stop that. But maybe Jon didn't tell Sarah about the notebook cause that is Karyn's secret. But that also feels like a solution without any consequences
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Welp. We lose. Game over, this situation is irreparable.

...Or is it?

Regarding the bra wish: by sheer coincidence, their wish was taken at face value, and Karyn ended up with a slightly enchanted piece of clothing, instead of something powerful and/or sentient, that added an extra complication into this strange situation.

Promising start.

Matisguy is right. Just a little griping among the cheerleaders about Sarah could be the trigger that gets Jon to gossip out something to cause an uprising.

Wait a fucking second

Sarah just left Jon alone with a bunch of random girls while he still has a compulsion to overshare his Gossip

Rare mistake on her part, I wonder if it'll be her undoing after all, if the notebook isn't

This is good, I enjoy the copy being his/her gender identity and not just a full conversion to girl. I love the idea of him being forced as essentially a man to stand in the women’s change room dressed in an obscene court and viewed as ‘one of the girls’

All these voices you think John is in Disco Elysium

One would certainly assume so!

Surely Karyn can cross off the mental changes?

I'm enjoying this but also hope Karyn can save him.