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I wonder how big of a ripple effect it would have if Jon swapped a clothing item that was more typically goth unto Sarah, Karyn or Jessi

Ok look, as long as it's the good Darrin and not the second one, I can handle this.

You probably could go around that by thinking of April as a template. For example Jon thinking of this specific April and then adding additional elements to it.
Also I think having just mem as a tag is fine. Can’t think of another that would fit

I can confirm that I have plans for a story where he'll be a different age.

He didn't completely turn into princess peach here. It's like when you see a person in cosplay, or one of those cartoons into real life images. This April was a person based on the concepts of peach, and wasn't actually cartoons/video game. In my mind at least

It's a pretty broad power. As long as Jon can imagine it as being aspected from april, it is an essentially unlimited reality rewrite ability.

However, well I don't have any specific limitations built in, I don't think he could do full customized reality. He needs that April anchor, and trying to hold a bunch of details in your head is tricky. I heard a concept ages ago of how many things you can focus on at once called "the magic number seven plus or minus two", so without it being a hard limit into the story, I don't think I'd try and do anything more than seven or so key elements

Imagine the possibilities of turning into fictional women and adapting how their personality/life would look like in the modern world or whenever this is set. Maybe even adjusting his own age

I wonder how far Jon/April can make changes when in the shower. Can he for example think about April being in a relationship with Karyn or to go crazier Sarah or a teacher even

What tags should this episode have? Zoe and the rest are unaware, but they haven't been transformed directly. April is a transformed Jon, but the actual action happened in the previous chapter. I wasn't sure what to put down for this short transitional episode.

Are we dealing with a dream brought on by their TV episode binging. Wrong show I know, but they could have moved on to Bewitched. Or is the wish still perculating?

:)

There's definitely more left in this story, but we have hit a turning point. Lots of loose ends still to tie up :)

Not sure if this is the end, and it's not my usual fare, but I do appreciate taking this old story down a new path.

Not my cup of tea, but well written regardless.

I'll keep it in mind. I have rough outlines for a week in world, and there's a new version of April most of those days. That's not really what the story is about, but I'm trying to write it in a way that someone can easily branch off into a new direction without having to deal with all of the emotional resonant stuff I'm going to be doing. Whenever I thought of this fantasy, it was more of being a different person, rather than anything extreme.

Can magical transformation be down to earth? idk.

Jon and Karyn will likely have some space on Tuesday Night that they play with the power. I might do something there

I love this concept it's got so many possibilities to see. It would definitely be cool to see some more "extreme" changes or just a lot of different bodies or something

Sounds like Sarah is finding her inner Karyn and Karyn her inner Sarah. Is Karyn going to push Sarah out and take her position?

This chapter brought me up to where I had planned from the start. I've got some other rough ideas that have yet to really crystallize. I won't say I'm completely done with it, but I've got no immediate plans.

Comments certainly help with keeping it in my mind though :p

I don't think I've got either of those in my plans. Maybe when we get to the weekend?

It sure fun concept to think about though

hoping this continues!

Fun!

loving where this is going - wondering how extreme sexuality and body changes might alter reality

This proves once again that FB people are my people. Years of looking for loopholes and strange wording make kin of us all.

About halfway done with the chapter where Jon learns about that :p

No idea if this is where you're going with it, but my mind immediately goes to - what happens when he uses a shower that turns itself off after a short time, at the school changing rooms, a swimming pool or the gym. If the shower switches itself off, how would Jon fulfil the 'I turn the shower off' bit to turn back.

FYI: For the remainder, I'm going to have Jon self-refer as April whenever female, with pronouns and all. Any time one of their forms is thinking about something they did as the other gender, it'll use those pronouns. That's the plan, at least. It is VERY easy to make mistakes with it.

Apparently, Jon picked up some secondhand trauma from Karyn's wish in the root. I was not expecting this to show up in this story that was supposed to be a light-hearted TF romp that I've been thinking about for 10 years, but I don't hate it.

Ooh this is interesting

I appreciate you. Without giving too much away, I do intend for this story to have a generally happy ending. Maybe not everything will be perfect, there will be some element of bittersweet. But I'm not going to leave anyone out in the cold on this story.

That said, I still have to drag our heroes through Mordor before they can toss the evil ring into the volcano. It will get better. But that doesn't mean bad things won't happen along the way.

Thank you for reading.

Justice for Karyn. She deserves better, and I really don’t want to see her hurt. I hope nothing else in the story ends up involving Biff—he’s consistently a jerk in every version, and the idea of him and Karyn together is something I absolutely can’t stand.

I also struggle when two characters who are deeply close get separated or lose each other for reasons outside their control; it triggers real anxiety for me. That’s why I’m so attached to Jon × Karyn and protective of their bond.

No offense meant—your story is great overall. Please keep going.

Intriguing

What ho? The beginnings of actual conscious communication between Karyn and Other Karyn within Karyn? Hmm... Could it even be the beginning of the end?

Justice for Jon. Karyn x Jon.

Work I can't help you with but this is the definition of informal so I wouldn't worry too much about grammar as long as you're understood. If you're really concerned, take what you're going to submit, have a free AI check it over. "Hey Grok, English isn't my first language and I want to make sure this is understandable. Would you please check this for grammar and spelling?" You're just using a tool to double check yourself like a spell check.

Maybe I’ll give it a try in a few weeks. Am busy with work related stuff and I have to brush up on my English grammar first. Cause it’s neither my first or second language

We'll have to do one from Sarah's POV. We're probably overdue for an outsider perspective. Maybe you'd want to write it up. =-)

It’s bit funny to see it from Sarah’s POV. Since from her perspective she turned a normal guy named Cassandra who is her bff/friend with Benefits into a Goth slut

I hadn't intended Cassandra, Zoe, or their mom to become futanari but it might happen due to future wishes.
And if you want to add to any of these Episodes I'd love to see what you come up with.
And you're right, the wish logic is there if you wanted to build on or alter the Episode with a 'whoops Zoe has a dick now and is freaking out' sort of thing.

Since Cassandra got bigger breasts thanks to Zoe’s wish, I thought that the wish may affect more of her anatomy since they have a futanari mom and Mikey also became a futa

Zoe and Cassandra don't have penises. Unless you can show where they might have gotten them, it is entirely possible I overlooked some bit of wishing logic.

Perhaps Sarah's wish gave her some of the original John's energy and she was able to share it.

Would that mean Cassandra also got a dick or is she now the only one who hasn’t got one?

Finally someone who knows futanari means that they a pussy too.

All I'll say for now is that the story isn't over yet...

I like that Jon changed back and isn't jock Jon anymore. But I don't really understand how Sarah had the power to change Jon back.

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Please! Ask away

Glad to see you writing again. I always like your takes on where a story should go.

I really like your story and I want to talk with you and our discussion is related to story mind can we talk?

Great story I have a question about your story Can I ask?

time will tell

Also hope Jon develops his relationships with his harem more. And im wondering when he does if he will use the editor to make them more accepting of Jon being in more relationships.