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Yeah, I meant 'demoting' characters from knowing to not knowing by dark, as well. If you do do that, I prefer it not harm integrity of who the character is so that the 'meaning' of the transformations still hold. Like they can forget but then they also now know something they didnt before thats interesting and useful. Ideally it's like teleological trade-offs.

I agree, but in each scenario the characters I'd work on would be the ones not in the dark.

Knowing Jon, he's likely to wish he was in a position where he could get closer to Karyn. That would transform him into one of the cheerleaders, either fully a girl or dressing like and being treated as one. And if Karyn doesn't hear, she'll accept Jon as always having been that way.

If you're looking for input, I find that 'the more things change, the more they stay the same' is a good maxim. It allows for a lot of imagination, but doesn't entirely hinge on keeping characters in the dark to avoid character work. I voted for this branch but the others are fine if you picked those.

Thank you, and Oh my god! I wrote this before Severance came out! Never even though of the similarities.

This is fun. Very strong Severance vibes.

I figured I'd write a few permutations if people want to encourage me to go in one direction of the other

Gymrats my beloved...

Just like the simulations

Thanks

This storyline makes my brain hurt but im also absolutely enthralled and can’t stop waiting for more

Sarah, with a seat of consciousness?!

@TheScienceWizard
Please tell me you'll be coming back soon 👀 I'm still waiting for that "Round three" in another branch

Every so often I ask myself, "am I becoming too predictable? Am I just re-treading the same old well-worn ground?" How many ways are there, really, to turn Jon Gibson into a girl? After nearly twenty years writing on this site, have I run out of fresh ideas for this handful of characters?

Thank you for answering the question that I never asked out loud.

This story has been such an Alice in wonderland vibe so far. Honestly I have no idea where you're going at this point and am just enjoying the ride.

Great addition!

As I've said before, given the source, this is some of the highest praise imaginable.

ooh, nice addition
can't believe i wrote that last part almost 9 years ago

Once again, the upvote is earned before the chapter is even read. And, of course, reading the chapter proves that this was the correct decision.

provide a description of the tags, We'll take it under consideration.

Amusing

Interesting, curious what might happen next.

These episides are fantastic! I'd love to see this story continued someday. I'm wondering what happened to the stone and what Karyn and Zoe are like in this life, but to be honest, it's also a bit refreshing that you haven't focused on those points.

That is such a fun twist for a Little House on the prairie

I really enjoyed this. This is the type of Life swap imagery that is so hard to pull off. And you made it so evocative. Well done.

Listen, I don't take money for this. I wrote this branch out of my heart and imagination. Maybe we could start a movement to somehow put me back in the narrator spot for this story. I don't want to see Lydia Warren's take on this story, I wanted to do something revelatory with the onsen and MTI. Now the scale is cosmic! How will the audience care about subterfuge and loyalty in a small town if it's interstellar in scope? She's rebel moon'd us!

I'm NOT bitter, I'm NOT jealous. This is about ethics in gaming. This is about corporate replacement! Other word combinations to get back in! Fie!

I was doing way better, maybe she went to the academy and has a better resume, but... okay, but doesn't narrating the previous installments of this branch count towards anything? What else am I supposed to do with my evening except narrate? And don't think for a moment I'm being class conscious about unemployment here, this is a direct absurdity! Has anyone ever seen this happen to anyone before?

Oh, come on!

Is this how SG/G works?

https://mrdylitcirclestories.wordpress.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/09/in-a-grove.pdf

Hm...

To my recollection, Super Grover can fly. Are you telling me that Grover could fly?

This is just... I'm not sure I have energy to comprehend this right now. Is it like Super Mario and that feather cape?

@Ez Super Grover is the alter-ego of Grover. They're the same monster, just one has a costume :)

If you happen to be interested, here's a read-aloud video of the book from this chapter: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_JVK0-4HQTY

Wait is Grover supposed to be sort of like Super Grover or is that a different monster?

I like the way this story is going.

Wondering if it’s current wardrobe or that if Karyn gets a new piece of clothing Jon would get a copy of that in his wardrobe

Honestly, for whatever it's worth, I prefer and have preferred the direction you've gone so far. I think it's quite cleverly executed and making them antagonistic would kinda undercut what you're doing so far.

Then again, you're better at this than I, and I always give experts room to run.

I hadn't even thought of letting Jon and Karyn be actively antagonistic towards Sarah, more just remaining as her puppets. But you're right, there's room for both. I might be re-thinking my next chapter.

I can see them making a wish on Sarah only for Sarah to turn it around on them

@Matisguy im curious. How much have you planned out for this branch?

Excited for the next part

Really enjoy your writing, hope you are doing well in the new year. Can't wait for more of this or any of your other branches!

Hope you continue this one

Maybe... This episode was the end of "part 2" of this story. I have notes written up for part 3, but I only have an episode or two currently written up (those episodes are subject to change). Meg does appear in my notes, but whether or not she makes it back into the story is yet to be seen. It will really depend on how things go when I start writing up part 3.

Hope you keep writing for this branch. Has been interesting so far

Will we see more of Meg?

A bit sad that you quit, you are one of my favorite writers on here

So what are his or rather her powers as a kitsune?

Nice. Excellent chapter!

Believing in change for the better? On Christmas?!

Yeah me too.

Peak mofumofu!

Had some inspiration and free time before I head to Christmas dinner. Happy Holidays everyone!

I made this as an excuse to rewrite the intro to suit my needs (see the subsequent episode for an example), and to potentially branch out if anyone else is interested in contributing. :)