Create an account

or log in:



I forgot my password


Path

2. Not entirely satisfied

1. The Forum

Not entirely satisfied

on 2014-12-29 23:36:44

783 hits, 1 views, 0 upvotes.

Return to Parent Episode
Jump to child episodes
Jump to comments

Umm... I don't know why, but I don't like my last two additions. I split them thinking Jon's part was at least 'okay', but I think something's a bit off. It's probably way too early for Jon to think along those lines, and maybe I've gone on a bit of a tangent there.

As for the second, I've thought about dynamics in the past when we get two friends and one ends up TGed. I thought it might be interesting to avoid a cliche and have the unchanged one think- 'yeah we can take full advantage of this!' (Not that he's feeling any empathy of the situation mind.)

Still... I'm not sure. It just doesn't flow well and I know I can do better in this, somewhere...

I'm contemplating to write a darker alternative, where maybe Matt gets thrown out of the school for a few days, he's no longer friends with David setting up other possibilities.

Maybe Matt could start to insist anyone who hanged out with any of the recent changed should be quarantined to prevent further spread of the transformation virus?

Just my thoughts here, I know it wasn't my best. I was running out of ideas. Feel free to come up with alternatives.




Please consider donating to keep the site running:

Donate using Cash

Donate Bitcoin